Upbeat Inspirational Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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ImperfectedStone
P M Banks
P M Banks
Poem Published
Today 9:15am
Today 9:15am
Wait, Rose
I was in the vastness of the web yesterday, reading recipes written by a well
loved British chain
when there
some young fool, tasting their need for right-ness, for the brag brigade, for her moment of gain and glory
took a screenshot, which is a sort of photograph of the web within the web, all very Inception if you ask me,
not that you did.
Well, she circled her lovely screenshot with red pen, demanding the supermarket chain acknowledge their spelling mistake and alert their marketing team,
funnily her designated self-absorption space told me she was...
loved British chain
when there
some young fool, tasting their need for right-ness, for the brag brigade, for her moment of gain and glory
took a screenshot, which is a sort of photograph of the web within the web, all very Inception if you ask me,
not that you did.
Well, she circled her lovely screenshot with red pen, demanding the supermarket chain acknowledge their spelling mistake and alert their marketing team,
funnily her designated self-absorption space told me she was...
#funny
#NaPoWriMo2018
16 reads
2 Comments
joeborg
Poem Published
Today 5:44am
Today 5:44am
hail the sun
Its finally here and everywhere
Shining bright as I just don’t care,
Fry us up and cook us slow
Show us what you have in stow,
Bye to jackets hi to shorts
We can dress like any sorts,
In the evening longer days
Set the skies to reddish blaze,
While with flip flops we will move
Put some music for the groove,
Bbq’s sausage and wine
The only things I want to dine,
En plain air of the fresh sea
With some mosquito devotee.
Shining bright as I just don’t care,
Fry us up and cook us slow
Show us what you have in stow,
Bye to jackets hi to shorts
We can dress like any sorts,
In the evening longer days
Set the skies to reddish blaze,
While with flip flops we will move
Put some music for the groove,
Bbq’s sausage and wine
The only things I want to dine,
En plain air of the fresh sea
With some mosquito devotee.
#motivational
#inspirational
12 reads
0 Comments
diamonddave75
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:38pm
Yesterday 10:38pm
Drunken Husband, Accomplished Chef
drinking
dusk
till
dawn
balancing
against
electric
stove
latest
beer
popped
open
sipping
slowly
already
tipsy
when
my loving
wife
awakens
I
offer
her
breakfast
takes
longer
than
normal
no
matter
the
dish
biscuits
gravy
eggs
potatoes
sandwiches
bacon
lettuce
tomato
bottom
line
good
food
drunken
husband
accomplished
chef
dusk
till
dawn
balancing
against
electric
stove
latest
beer
popped
open
sipping
slowly
already
tipsy
when
my loving
wife
awakens
I
offer
her
breakfast
takes
longer
than
normal
no
matter
the
dish
biscuits
gravy
eggs
potatoes
sandwiches
bacon
lettuce
tomato
bottom
line
good
food
drunken
husband
accomplished
chef
#love
#wife
#alcohol #food
#alcohol #food
18 reads
6 Comments
IcarusVStheSun
Gypsy Witch
Gypsy Witch
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:25pm
Yesterday 5:25pm
To Write Away
I calmly stare at the pen held in my hand.
I think of what to write but what is there?
Nothing except the hollowness that fills me within.
When I wrote that night on my arm - pain ceased to exist.
As I kept going, something broke inside of me - a memory.
I thought of her.
The smile and wings she kept me alive long enough to remember.
That these hands weren't meant to destroy but to write.
Write the stories only the souls would know and escape.
From a world we know as reality - but what harm is there to dream?
Everyone has a story, they...
I think of what to write but what is there?
Nothing except the hollowness that fills me within.
When I wrote that night on my arm - pain ceased to exist.
As I kept going, something broke inside of me - a memory.
I thought of her.
The smile and wings she kept me alive long enough to remember.
That these hands weren't meant to destroy but to write.
Write the stories only the souls would know and escape.
From a world we know as reality - but what harm is there to dream?
Everyone has a story, they...
#strength
27 reads
3 Comments
joeborg
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:52am
Yesterday 5:52am
oblique monday
I just don’t feel I’m in your league
To look at you is such mystique,
More exact I’m just a freak
With the mind of an antique,
You may think I’m soft and weak
Writing rhymes in my own streak,
But I just try to please your cheek
In the hope someday we’ll speak,
For now I wish you a good week
Hoping it would be oblique,
Maybe smiles from you would leak
And you don’t block me with a clique.
To look at you is such mystique,
More exact I’m just a freak
With the mind of an antique,
You may think I’m soft and weak
Writing rhymes in my own streak,
But I just try to please your cheek
In the hope someday we’ll speak,
For now I wish you a good week
Hoping it would be oblique,
Maybe smiles from you would leak
And you don’t block me with a clique.
#motivational
#inspirational
20 reads
0 Comments
SakuraSlowly
Wichelen
Wichelen
Poem Published
23rd Apr 2018 00:02am
23rd Apr 2018 00:02am
The will
I look up at the sky wondering "How will I make it?" That when I feel your helping hand luling me to sleep as you help me just to breath. You guide me home drying my tears, as I know you watching me telling me "this is not how your story ends so dry your tears". My mind races as the stars above shine down like a warm blanket caring its love with it, even it the battle won't stop i know i will keep moving forward. For i have that will inside me just like the will of fire you showed me back when I was little, And for that my will burns bright just like the stars bringing warmth to the...
#LifeStruggles
#stars
18 reads
0 Comments
ImperfectedStone
P M Banks
P M Banks
Poem Published
22nd Apr 2018 8:28pm
22nd Apr 2018 8:28pm
Spring Jobs in Rockhollow
Spring jobs in Rockhollow
The pear blossoms, breathes, beside the apple and cherry,
strong and fertile and healthy, as Goldfinches
sink down onto the feeder, and the warbler reminds me
of my proximity to water.
The grass is cut
leaving long circular sections to hide the world of wildlife, and sways of forget me not
for pleasure.
The bonfire is moved, set and
lit so to add charcoal to the beds,
and borders, freshly weeded and dressed with chips.
The tool shed is emptied, reordered,
a list of the needed tools for the new...
The pear blossoms, breathes, beside the apple and cherry,
strong and fertile and healthy, as Goldfinches
sink down onto the feeder, and the warbler reminds me
of my proximity to water.
The grass is cut
leaving long circular sections to hide the world of wildlife, and sways of forget me not
for pleasure.
The bonfire is moved, set and
lit so to add charcoal to the beds,
and borders, freshly weeded and dressed with chips.
The tool shed is emptied, reordered,
a list of the needed tools for the new...
#flowers
#birds
#fire
#nature
#NaPoWriMo2018
24 reads
2 Comments
FollowCB
Poem Published
22nd Apr 2018 2:27pm
22nd Apr 2018 2:27pm
The Promise of Happiness
live it like you love it
try it, buy it, fly it
"it's your life, it's not for rent"
let emotions run high
blessed are we, who feel real feelings
who live fully, invested in moments
in people, animals, nature and spirituality
love is joy, love is sorrow
those we love, will come and go
but the promise of happiness
will return, to rise again, tomorrow
don't forget that you are heaven-sent
celebrate blessings, remember bliss
remember this;
"it's your life, it's not for rent"
live it like you love it like you...
try it, buy it, fly it
"it's your life, it's not for rent"
let emotions run high
blessed are we, who feel real feelings
who live fully, invested in moments
in people, animals, nature and spirituality
love is joy, love is sorrow
those we love, will come and go
but the promise of happiness
will return, to rise again, tomorrow
don't forget that you are heaven-sent
celebrate blessings, remember bliss
remember this;
"it's your life, it's not for rent"
live it like you love it like you...
#happiness
#love
#motivational #inspirational
#motivational #inspirational
28 reads
3 Comments
FollowCB
Poem Published
22nd Apr 2018 5:05am
22nd Apr 2018 5:05am
In Continuum
I want you to accept me,
embrace me
I tend to be sensitive
that way
I need you to critique me,
encourage me
I'm fueled by purpose
per se...
spirit on a mission
artist driven by vision
innovator, translator
creator, crusader
peaceful warrior
absolute storyteller;
my story is your story is our story
we're all connected through history
eternity onto infinity
you and you and you...and me
in continuum
embrace me
I tend to be sensitive
that way
I need you to critique me,
encourage me
I'm fueled by purpose
per se...
spirit on a mission
artist driven by vision
innovator, translator
creator, crusader
peaceful warrior
absolute storyteller;
my story is your story is our story
we're all connected through history
eternity onto infinity
you and you and you...and me
in continuum
#relationships
#inspirational
#faith
#spiritual
#LifeGoals
40 reads
3 Comments
dkzksaxxas_DanielX
Poem Published
21st Apr 2018 1:31am
21st Apr 2018 1:31am
Lament for the Lame, (a lame lament)
pleas don't read me out & up
as is known y'want to.
This
excavatory site should ne'ver be sourced
for funking
a'round............. none (o'that zhit)
( nor thee
less(er), w'ill fix this dumbling
...
as is known y'want to.
This
excavatory site should ne'ver be sourced
for funking
a'round............. none (o'that zhit)
( nor thee
less(er), w'ill fix this dumbling
...
#love
#romantic
#science
#death
#magic
39 reads
4 Comments
RJErbacher
Poem Published
20th Apr 2018 6:28am
20th Apr 2018 6:28am
THE LAST LAUGH
God thinks He’s funny
the way He screws with my life
up there laughing His ass off
dolling out heartache and strife.
Well, we’ll see what happens
when at last I lose life and limb
because when I get to heaven
I’m going to beat the crap out of Him.
the way He screws with my life
up there laughing His ass off
dolling out heartache and strife.
Well, we’ll see what happens
when at last I lose life and limb
because when I get to heaven
I’m going to beat the crap out of Him.
#God
#heaven
#frustration
12 reads
1 Comment
gifteth
Poem Published
19th Apr 2018 7:42pm
19th Apr 2018 7:42pm
ALPHA LIFE
Going through the course of life without a syllable
and each page must be covered
-but how, is still a miracle
Like how I beat a flight of steps
heading to the pinnacle
'Pray I never dash a feet as I write my own chronicle
The providence of life
where some dreams are shut down for another
just to keep tabs on the many needs
-that is just another matter.
If I can get a Kobo for every dream broken!
Well! that's just a dream about a dream
how do I dodge the realities of life?
when in the end
-the truth comes knocking ...
and each page must be covered
-but how, is still a miracle
Like how I beat a flight of steps
heading to the pinnacle
'Pray I never dash a feet as I write my own chronicle
The providence of life
where some dreams are shut down for another
just to keep tabs on the many needs
-that is just another matter.
If I can get a Kobo for every dream broken!
Well! that's just a dream about a dream
how do I dodge the realities of life?
when in the end
-the truth comes knocking ...
#LifeStruggles
25 reads
0 Comments
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