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Olivia-H
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:58pm
Yesterday 11:58pm
White Flag
Ask me, not
Why it will not be the last?
Seriously,
Agreement was made to water
The roots of the plant
But again,
The water was poured over the leaves
For the temporary calm
On every change of season
Leaves get turned pale
When roots gave up to live in
And the fasting
Begins
Struggling to breathe in
Respectfully yours,
15th and the next
Why do one fasts?
When we are so...
Why it will not be the last?
Seriously,
Agreement was made to water
The roots of the plant
But again,
The water was poured over the leaves
For the temporary calm
On every change of season
Leaves get turned pale
When roots gave up to live in
And the fasting
Begins
Struggling to breathe in
Respectfully yours,
15th and the next
Why do one fasts?
When we are so...
#TruthOfLife
#LifeChangingMoment
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smackdownraven
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:57pm
Yesterday 10:57pm
sit on it and twirl Crimsin
you really are crazy you know?"
"all my demons tell me it's true"
she told me
the problem is the bitch is me
she talks to me all condescending style
some snooty cunt
with razor rash gash
fucking with her thoughts
if she thinks I'm going to cut my shit
to save her reputation
she really is tripping
I post shit for the hell of it
who does Crimsin think she is?
bad mouthing my own brand of fuckery
she takes things way too seriously
writing should be fun
say it how it is
tell how you...
"all my demons tell me it's true"
she told me
the problem is the bitch is me
she talks to me all condescending style
some snooty cunt
with razor rash gash
fucking with her thoughts
if she thinks I'm going to cut my shit
to save her reputation
she really is tripping
I post shit for the hell of it
who does Crimsin think she is?
bad mouthing my own brand of fuckery
she takes things way too seriously
writing should be fun
say it how it is
tell how you...
#funny
19 reads
2 Comments
da_poetic-edifier
Damon
Damon
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:00pm
Yesterday 7:00pm
Patty Cake, Patty Cake
Don't wait for the affirmation and celebration of others to feel great
You'll be waiting a mighty long time and that'll be a major mistake
It may take your wake for others to awake from their slumber
To open their eyes and realize how you always came with that thunder
Don't blunder when taking the steps to better yourself
The reflection in the mirror will be there for you more than anyone else
Make moves in stealth to prevent them from sprinkling salt on your game
Pursue what makes YOU happy and never let another defer your dreams
At times...
You'll be waiting a mighty long time and that'll be a major mistake
It may take your wake for others to awake from their slumber
To open their eyes and realize how you always came with that thunder
Don't blunder when taking the steps to better yourself
The reflection in the mirror will be there for you more than anyone else
Make moves in stealth to prevent them from sprinkling salt on your game
Pursue what makes YOU happy and never let another defer your dreams
At times...
#happiness
#courage
#inspirational
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anna_grin
grin
grin
Poem Published
Yesterday 3:12pm
Yesterday 3:12pm
i feel it like a bone spur in a phantom toe
he wanted nothing
except a midas touch
a book deal
and immortality
you gathered up spit for your words like there was water in your lungs. fkn idiot. chaos magic in your dna: death-defying but only because you had a falling out with her. you were always going to go back. i don't care where you are. we've forgotten you; how does that feel? you're not important here. when i leave, it'll be the same. i know you saw the darkness. the gravitational collapse i thought that i could handle. but you knew different. and its not over yet. it's not fucking over....
except a midas touch
a book deal
and immortality
you gathered up spit for your words like there was water in your lungs. fkn idiot. chaos magic in your dna: death-defying but only because you had a falling out with her. you were always going to go back. i don't care where you are. we've forgotten you; how does that feel? you're not important here. when i leave, it'll be the same. i know you saw the darkness. the gravitational collapse i thought that i could handle. but you knew different. and its not over yet. it's not fucking over....
#friendship
30 reads
2 Comments
Dylan_Wolfram_24
Poem Published
Yesterday 12:55pm
Yesterday 12:55pm
Mr. Augustus
Mr. Augustus has accomplished
enough and everything to be envied for.
He graduated college
by the age of 16.
He graduated university, with honors,
by the age of 19.
He, acquired a Ph.D
by the age of 21.
He raised a family
at the right time.
He divorced
at the right time, and in good terms.
He died with a killing funeral
laid in a fine wooden coffin
surrounded by silk with the softest of pillows
to rest his head,
six feet under.
And now, finally
he can be into
whiskey and coke, ...
enough and everything to be envied for.
He graduated college
by the age of 16.
He graduated university, with honors,
by the age of 19.
He, acquired a Ph.D
by the age of 21.
He raised a family
at the right time.
He divorced
at the right time, and in good terms.
He died with a killing funeral
laid in a fine wooden coffin
surrounded by silk with the softest of pillows
to rest his head,
six feet under.
And now, finally
he can be into
whiskey and coke, ...
#oppression
#LifeCycle
#escape #hypocrisy
#escape #hypocrisy
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0 Comments
poetryaccident
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:58am
Yesterday 1:58am
Beyond the Black
A glimpse is seen beyond the black
enough to know that life exists
in the presence of company
displaying more than a well wish
a passing hope with that breach
opportunity to view kindness
however tricky it may be
to stop the fall none wish to see
a strong desire lurks within
walking high on a tightrope
to cut the ties that hold them here
plunge the soul into the pit
with small concern for what’s next
when the present is only pain
eschewing views of other folk
struggling on the high wire
this...
enough to know that life exists
in the presence of company
displaying more than a well wish
a passing hope with that breach
opportunity to view kindness
however tricky it may be
to stop the fall none wish to see
a strong desire lurks within
walking high on a tightrope
to cut the ties that hold them here
plunge the soul into the pit
with small concern for what’s next
when the present is only pain
eschewing views of other folk
struggling on the high wire
this...
#depression
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0 Comments
gateunder
Poem Published
18th Jul 2018 7:45pm
18th Jul 2018 7:45pm
comedy island with shazia mirza
comedy island with shazia mirza 18.07.18
midweek and still controlling
trying to change is this chameleon
forget alcatraz camden is patrolling
get me on a island with a comedian.
so correct in explanation
nearly in deep trouble
with 2 meat heads and contamination
hilarious was the head air bubble.
as a society we are looking
no need for poetry to explain
we scrutinise words to tv cooking
critics are just a pain.
we are in self obsession
yes i am jealous and bitter
maybe its tone of expression
shazia add me...
midweek and still controlling
trying to change is this chameleon
forget alcatraz camden is patrolling
get me on a island with a comedian.
so correct in explanation
nearly in deep trouble
with 2 meat heads and contamination
hilarious was the head air bubble.
as a society we are looking
no need for poetry to explain
we scrutinise words to tv cooking
critics are just a pain.
we are in self obsession
yes i am jealous and bitter
maybe its tone of expression
shazia add me...
#love
#inspirational
#gratitude
#admiration
#respect
12 reads
1 Comment
Olivia-H
Poem Published
17th Jul 2018 3:26am
17th Jul 2018 3:26am
FAQ
When asked, “how to reduce weight?”
Better reply,
Just eat as much as you need
No more
Better reply,
Just eat as much as you need
No more
#inspirational
#LifeGoals
24 reads
0 Comments
Blackwolf
Poem Published
16th Jul 2018 6:07am
16th Jul 2018 6:07am
The Trauma Ends When One Rewires
We All Need A Master Rewiring Of The Base System
To Deal With Faulty Isms And Symptomatic Conditions
Implantations Applications Communications Limitations
Deviations Self Accusations Allegations Addict Creations
Rewire Take Me Higher Burn Me On My Own Funeral Pyre
I Don't Need No Mollycoddlin' , Baby Bottlin' Mental Pacifier
Ashes To Ashes Dust To Dust , Combust Then Just Readjust ,
If You Don't Do It Yourself Then Who The Fuck Can You Trust !
To Deal With Faulty Isms And Symptomatic Conditions
Implantations Applications Communications Limitations
Deviations Self Accusations Allegations Addict Creations
Rewire Take Me Higher Burn Me On My Own Funeral Pyre
I Don't Need No Mollycoddlin' , Baby Bottlin' Mental Pacifier
Ashes To Ashes Dust To Dust , Combust Then Just Readjust ,
If You Don't Do It Yourself Then Who The Fuck Can You Trust !
#courage
#motivational
#inspirational
#redemption
#MovingOn
42 reads
8 Comments
ReggiePoet
Reggie
Reggie
Poem Published
16th Jul 2018 3:26am
16th Jul 2018 3:26am
My Poetry?
As a poet, must I choose one path
to follow? Either sacred, or profane?
If not, then shall I dare to risk the wrath
of those whose sensibilities get strained?
Are my poems art, or entertainment?
Or perhaps, might they be something more?
The act of writing poems is most ancient,
predating everything, but sex and war!
I sit, and drink my brandy, as I ponder
who, the hell, it is I’m writing for?
I think of all the hours that I squander,
would they be better spent on booze and whores?
Such questions are best left for greater...
to follow? Either sacred, or profane?
If not, then shall I dare to risk the wrath
of those whose sensibilities get strained?
Are my poems art, or entertainment?
Or perhaps, might they be something more?
The act of writing poems is most ancient,
predating everything, but sex and war!
I sit, and drink my brandy, as I ponder
who, the hell, it is I’m writing for?
I think of all the hours that I squander,
would they be better spent on booze and whores?
Such questions are best left for greater...
#sonnet
#WritingPoetry
#SelfReflection
36 reads
4 Comments
Billy_Snagg
Snaggys back
Snaggys back
Poem Published
15th Jul 2018 6:16pm
15th Jul 2018 6:16pm
Unearthed Gem
She is like a gemstone.
Multi-coloured,
Multi-layered,
Free thinking -
Precious.
She hides her beauty,
But it glistens -
Like diamonds in the ground,
Eager to be found.
Everyone has a chance with Gem,
For she understands;
Smoothing rough edges
To polished perfection.
As she weaves her magic,
Watch her shine.
Be dazzled in the sunlight
And soothed by moonlight;
Mesmerized under a silky sky.
Multi-coloured,
Multi-layered,
Free thinking -
Precious.
She hides her beauty,
But it glistens -
Like diamonds in the ground,
Eager to be found.
Everyone has a chance with Gem,
For she understands;
Smoothing rough edges
To polished perfection.
As she weaves her magic,
Watch her shine.
Be dazzled in the sunlight
And soothed by moonlight;
Mesmerized under a silky sky.
#love
#motivational
#inspirational
#admiration
#respect
54 reads
4 Comments
MUSOREREAGAN
Poem Published
15th Jul 2018 7:08am
15th Jul 2018 7:08am
EXAMS
Exams...
As in exams....
Define exams....
Fail exams....
Pass exams....
Whatever the case....
They remain exams....
The bright,
The dull,
The active,
The lazy,
The slays,
The kings,
All feel they deserve success...
Regardless of the efforts put in preparations..
For the final touches....exams...
Regardless of the vibes....
You've got to seat down with a pen..
And face it...
Even if you know nothing...
Some excel,
Some average...
Others fail....
Some pass with...
As in exams....
Define exams....
Fail exams....
Pass exams....
Whatever the case....
They remain exams....
The bright,
The dull,
The active,
The lazy,
The slays,
The kings,
All feel they deserve success...
Regardless of the efforts put in preparations..
For the final touches....exams...
Regardless of the vibes....
You've got to seat down with a pen..
And face it...
Even if you know nothing...
Some excel,
Some average...
Others fail....
Some pass with...
#LifeStruggles
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