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Hashman
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:39pm
Yesterday 9:39pm
One Day of Love
I remember it
I'll never forget it
it was so special
so full
one day
maybe I was 7 or 8
my birthday
mom said "no school for you today"
I was gonna stay with her
all day
she made me chocolate cake
with vanilla frosting, my favorite
for breakfast
went to Arlan's and let me
pick out any toy I wanted :)
two six-shooters with holsters
cowboy hat and a sheriff's badge
walked hand in hand to mom's hangout
The Polish-American Club
she had a couple of beers
I put my guns on
played the jukebox ...
I'll never forget it
it was so special
so full
one day
maybe I was 7 or 8
my birthday
mom said "no school for you today"
I was gonna stay with her
all day
she made me chocolate cake
with vanilla frosting, my favorite
for breakfast
went to Arlan's and let me
pick out any toy I wanted :)
two six-shooters with holsters
cowboy hat and a sheriff's badge
walked hand in hand to mom's hangout
The Polish-American Club
she had a couple of beers
I put my guns on
played the jukebox ...
#happiness
#love
14 reads
0 Comments
Joseph-Zenieh
Poem Published
2nd Jul 2022 10:18pm
2nd Jul 2022 10:18pm
HOW SHOULD I PRAY?
HOW SHOULD I PRAY?
I have to think of that great Lord,
and His soft feelings when l pray.
Jesus loves me with all his might.
He knows my heart as there He stays.
He's in my heart but also stood
so firm as He assisted me
when l was caught by those who tried
to injure me, a frightened prey.
I recall it when that hard test
alarmed me and destroyed my nerves.
The closest friends made me their laugh;
Christ was the One Who would me save.
How can l be but full of trust
that He will never my side...
I have to think of that great Lord,
and His soft feelings when l pray.
Jesus loves me with all his might.
He knows my heart as there He stays.
He's in my heart but also stood
so firm as He assisted me
when l was caught by those who tried
to injure me, a frightened prey.
I recall it when that hard test
alarmed me and destroyed my nerves.
The closest friends made me their laugh;
Christ was the One Who would me save.
How can l be but full of trust
that He will never my side...
#love
18 reads
2 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
2nd Jul 2022 3:35pm
2nd Jul 2022 3:35pm
Goddess...Excellently Bright!
She's as constant as a German clock
And as lovely as a Gallic maid
Who teases with the scanty frock
Of scattered clouds moonbeam arrayed.
What dullard would ignore such grace
Serenaded by coyote call
As if they worshipped outer space
As much as Satan's angel fall?
A fall which came from such a height
As depicted by the moon above
The denizens of lunar night
Long looking for more midnight love,
Knowing full well that love is best
Whenever it is moonbeam blessed!
And as lovely as a Gallic maid
Who teases with the scanty frock
Of scattered clouds moonbeam arrayed.
What dullard would ignore such grace
Serenaded by coyote call
As if they worshipped outer space
As much as Satan's angel fall?
A fall which came from such a height
As depicted by the moon above
The denizens of lunar night
Long looking for more midnight love,
Knowing full well that love is best
Whenever it is moonbeam blessed!
#romantic
#moon
#sky #night
#sky #night
36 reads
3 Comments
faithmairee
Poem Published
2nd Jul 2022 9:54am
2nd Jul 2022 9:54am
Loving Me
It played out
In plain view
For all to see
The way you
Love me is
A wonderful thing
You claim it
Happened even
Before we met
You knew you
Loved me
And always did
I was surprised
To hear that you
Have already made
Plans for us
I felt for you
An immediate trust
The bottom line
Is simple and sweet
I love your
Loving me
a r d e n t l y
In plain view
For all to see
The way you
Love me is
A wonderful thing
You claim it
Happened even
Before we met
You knew you
Loved me
And always did
I was surprised
To hear that you
Have already made
Plans for us
I felt for you
An immediate trust
The bottom line
Is simple and sweet
I love your
Loving me
a r d e n t l y
#love
#FallingInLove
37 reads
7 Comments
Carpe_Noctem
Poem Published
2nd Jul 2022 9:25am
2nd Jul 2022 9:25am
Momma zed
Every storm runs her course
Broken bones mend in time
Life will pound away
where the light don't shine
just as scars reveal what lie beneath
Even a wise crow sung
"It can't rain all the time"
Some feel it
some just get wet
Take the high road
Take it on the chin
Take it like a man
Broken bones mend in time
Life will pound away
where the light don't shine
just as scars reveal what lie beneath
Even a wise crow sung
"It can't rain all the time"
Some feel it
some just get wet
Take the high road
Take it on the chin
Take it like a man
#heartbroken
#TimeHeals
#MovingOn #healing
#MovingOn #healing
17 reads
0 Comments
da_poetic-edifier
Damon
Damon
Poem Published
2nd Jul 2022 2:16am
2nd Jul 2022 2:16am
Peace Be Still
When waters are still
I feel at peace
What the ripples reveal
Is that tranquility ceases
Pieces of my soul
Stole along the way
Repossession is the goal
Achieving each & everyday
The days of dismay
Suffered by us all
Seem here to stay
Be strong; stand tall
I feel at peace
What the ripples reveal
Is that tranquility ceases
Pieces of my soul
Stole along the way
Repossession is the goal
Achieving each & everyday
The days of dismay
Suffered by us all
Seem here to stay
Be strong; stand tall
#strength
#LifeStruggles
#motivational
#inspirational
#peace
26 reads
2 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
1st Jul 2022 10:52am
1st Jul 2022 10:52am
Marking Time
Good lingo regards syllabic thrift
With intellection's distinguished forces
Providing the mind a proper sift
Like filtered archeologic sources
Which race all through cerebral nerves
Like Hermes with an Olympic letter
Faring as mastermind hors d'oeuvres
Making the cerebral diet better...
So much better than thoughts with no panache
Which do not serve to keep my wits afresh
Or as antipodal to trailer trash
As the legendary Gilgamesh,
Whose exploits on those tablets of clay
Keep oblivion for another day!
With intellection's distinguished forces
Providing the mind a proper sift
Like filtered archeologic sources
Which race all through cerebral nerves
Like Hermes with an Olympic letter
Faring as mastermind hors d'oeuvres
Making the cerebral diet better...
So much better than thoughts with no panache
Which do not serve to keep my wits afresh
Or as antipodal to trailer trash
As the legendary Gilgamesh,
Whose exploits on those tablets of clay
Keep oblivion for another day!
#inspirational
#sonnet
#metaphor
22 reads
0 Comments
archie23
Poem Published
1st Jul 2022 1:51am
1st Jul 2022 1:51am
UNICORN CASSEROLE (poor man"s bump)
UNICORN CASSEROLE
I can't say that I have a clear perception of time
but on one day of deception I was drinking some wine
with a friend of mine, Mr. Phillip McPearson
who in reality wasn't actually a real person
He was an ex-con leprechaun
a fact that I never did dwell upon
He would visit from time to time on occasion
when I had whiskey and rye as persuasion
I puffed some pot and passed him the bowl in a glow
and he told me about the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow
With a sinful grin this bloke told me the joke
about the...
I can't say that I have a clear perception of time
but on one day of deception I was drinking some wine
with a friend of mine, Mr. Phillip McPearson
who in reality wasn't actually a real person
He was an ex-con leprechaun
a fact that I never did dwell upon
He would visit from time to time on occasion
when I had whiskey and rye as persuasion
I puffed some pot and passed him the bowl in a glow
and he told me about the pot of gold at the end of the rainbow
With a sinful grin this bloke told me the joke
about the...
#fate
#misunderstood
#magic #philosophical
#magic #philosophical
42 reads
6 Comments
rubyredheart
Poem Published
30th Jun 2022 10:26pm
30th Jun 2022 10:26pm
Beautiful
Rarely have I felt beautiful
Inside or out
Been thinking: maybe
I’m too critical.
So here’s beauty I see
In those close to me:
She’s beautiful
Her silver hair neatly rolled
Her work-worn arthritic hands
Blue veins showing through
Speckled age-spotted wrinkled skin
Beautiful hands!
She cares, wants to be kind and loving
She’s a doer
She’s a survivor
She’s a fighter
Frail and considerate
With hidden strength and determination
She’s beautiful
He’s beautiful
Neat brown hair
Brown...
Inside or out
Been thinking: maybe
I’m too critical.
So here’s beauty I see
In those close to me:
She’s beautiful
Her silver hair neatly rolled
Her work-worn arthritic hands
Blue veins showing through
Speckled age-spotted wrinkled skin
Beautiful hands!
She cares, wants to be kind and loving
She’s a doer
She’s a survivor
She’s a fighter
Frail and considerate
With hidden strength and determination
She’s beautiful
He’s beautiful
Neat brown hair
Brown...
#family
#identity
#beauty
49 reads
4 Comments
MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
30th Jun 2022 6:39pm
30th Jun 2022 6:39pm
Afflatus!
The world is full of beautiful stuff
Like river banks full of cottonwood trees
Littering moonbeams with gossamer fluff
All to the tune of a whispering breeze
Teasing starlight in its terminal path
Through the heavenly layer cake gales
Of nautical might, and their aftermath,
Filling lungs like a schooner's proud sails!
Let inspiration blow where it will...
Through the Cupid feathers flapping above
All of the breath providing the thrill
Of midnight lovers in midsummer love,
Ever the ambiance and atmosphere
Of a debonair Midnight...
Like river banks full of cottonwood trees
Littering moonbeams with gossamer fluff
All to the tune of a whispering breeze
Teasing starlight in its terminal path
Through the heavenly layer cake gales
Of nautical might, and their aftermath,
Filling lungs like a schooner's proud sails!
Let inspiration blow where it will...
Through the Cupid feathers flapping above
All of the breath providing the thrill
Of midnight lovers in midsummer love,
Ever the ambiance and atmosphere
Of a debonair Midnight...
#motivational
#sky
#night
30 reads
2 Comments
NANCY_RDZ_STORIES
Poem Published
30th Jun 2022 5:45pm
30th Jun 2022 5:45pm
MY PASSION POETRY
彡(✿╹◡╹) 𝘐𝘯𝘴𝘱𝘪𝘳𝘪𝘯𝘨 𝘭𝘰𝘷𝘦 𝘵𝘩𝘦 𝘱𝘢𝘴𝘴𝘪𝘰𝘯 𝘵𝘰 𝘸𝘳𝘪𝘵𝘦
𝘛𝘢𝘬𝘪𝘯𝘨 𝘮𝘦 𝘩𝘪𝘨𝘩𝘦𝘳
𝘓𝘪𝘬𝘦 𝘢𝘴 𝘢 𝘤𝘩𝘪𝘭𝘥...
𝘛𝘢𝘬𝘪𝘯𝘨 𝘮𝘦 𝘩𝘪𝘨𝘩𝘦𝘳
𝘓𝘪𝘬𝘦 𝘢𝘴 𝘢 𝘤𝘩𝘪𝘭𝘥...
#courage
#motivational
#admiration #respect
#admiration #respect
48 reads
8 Comments
telliott2
Poem Published
30th Jun 2022 5:28am
30th Jun 2022 5:28am
Hey there
Hey there
As I sit here reading emails about good wishes and holiday cheer.
I wonder why it is only sent at this time of year.
I am only thought of, liked or loved within reason
for those few short days around the Christmas season?
I like to think that I am kind and good,
And possibly a little misunderstood.
But the reality is that I am as much to blame
For playing the “holiday cheer wishing” game.
I don’t take time every month to check in on family and friends
Just to say, “Hey there, I was thinking of you today”.
I...
As I sit here reading emails about good wishes and holiday cheer.
I wonder why it is only sent at this time of year.
I am only thought of, liked or loved within reason
for those few short days around the Christmas season?
I like to think that I am kind and good,
And possibly a little misunderstood.
But the reality is that I am as much to blame
For playing the “holiday cheer wishing” game.
I don’t take time every month to check in on family and friends
Just to say, “Hey there, I was thinking of you today”.
I...
#separation
26 reads
0 Comments
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