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CarrionCrow44
Poem Published
13th Nov 2024 11:36pm
13th Nov 2024 11:36pm
Renegades
Been living like an outcast
In a prison cell working a nine to five
Fear stays king, hate is strong
I’m told to pay or hang
Separation is god now
Saints and devils dance together
Good people are shot down
Crushed in the womb
News tells me we won
Gas prices will start to decline
While war machines start production
Other countries laugh
While we flounder in education
To stupid to see we’re led to slaughter
Women remain at war
Under siege by an old enemy
The belief that they are just property...
In a prison cell working a nine to five
Fear stays king, hate is strong
I’m told to pay or hang
Separation is god now
Saints and devils dance together
Good people are shot down
Crushed in the womb
News tells me we won
Gas prices will start to decline
While war machines start production
Other countries laugh
While we flounder in education
To stupid to see we’re led to slaughter
Women remain at war
Under siege by an old enemy
The belief that they are just property...
#politics
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oldmanG
Poem Published
12th Nov 2024 6:56am
12th Nov 2024 6:56am
Off of the Tint
See the reflection
Off of the tint
Bloody violence is the scene
Feeling Dakota in the big apple
One who walks among angels of music
Just laid down a new track
Watching the wheels spinning
As he gets into the limousine
Sittin beside him is his lady
No she didn’t break up the Beatles
She’s his companion
Through this twisted world
Skin on skin with baby Sean
Beautiful boy waiting upstairs
Pulls the handle steps out
He’s a gentleman so ...
Off of the tint
Bloody violence is the scene
Feeling Dakota in the big apple
One who walks among angels of music
Just laid down a new track
Watching the wheels spinning
As he gets into the limousine
Sittin beside him is his lady
No she didn’t break up the Beatles
She’s his companion
Through this twisted world
Skin on skin with baby Sean
Beautiful boy waiting upstairs
Pulls the handle steps out
He’s a gentleman so ...
#anger
#despair
#emptiness
#GunControl
#murder
59 reads
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yonahjeong0-
Yonah Jeong
Yonah Jeong
Poem Published
11th Nov 2024 4:23pm
11th Nov 2024 4:23pm
A Song for Solitude
They are not lonely
an organic sleeping pill
anyone can have
anyone can care for by it
anyone can be anyone's parent with it
, lt is to be
anyone's child,
anyone's friend
A flower in the field
A slice of bread In the tears
rocks and streams
flowing deep in the trees
hidden in them and says
"You are welcome"
to the frozen streets of winter
you are windows
in dignity
under the curtains
Your commuting sounds of the night
You
our innocent laughter
Now,
The day begins with you ...
an organic sleeping pill
anyone can have
anyone can care for by it
anyone can be anyone's parent with it
, lt is to be
anyone's child,
anyone's friend
A flower in the field
A slice of bread In the tears
rocks and streams
flowing deep in the trees
hidden in them and says
"You are welcome"
to the frozen streets of winter
you are windows
in dignity
under the curtains
Your commuting sounds of the night
You
our innocent laughter
Now,
The day begins with you ...
#hope
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oldmanG
Poem Published
11th Nov 2024 9:34am
11th Nov 2024 9:34am
Private Jets
Private jets
And chemtrails
Flying first class
45 minutes to my house
1 percent carbon footprint
132 times more than you
Caviar and silk robes
Paid for by your local mailman
Billions and billions
Can’t wrap my mind around
But they leave the check for the rest of us
And tweet about bullshit
They think is important
But not in my world
Have a birthday of decadence
Jet set to opulence
Must be nice for a peasant
Close as you get
Be their servant
Pick up...
And chemtrails
Flying first class
45 minutes to my house
1 percent carbon footprint
132 times more than you
Caviar and silk robes
Paid for by your local mailman
Billions and billions
Can’t wrap my mind around
But they leave the check for the rest of us
And tweet about bullshit
They think is important
But not in my world
Have a birthday of decadence
Jet set to opulence
Must be nice for a peasant
Close as you get
Be their servant
Pick up...
#environment
#hypocrisy
#money #vanity
#money #vanity
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
10th Nov 2024 11:49am
10th Nov 2024 11:49am
Fear
You can drive a car if you do it right
but you can't go far if it puts you out of sight
you can't look at girls
you can't drink anything
you got to get your kicks in the shadow of fear
You stay out late when they think your young
when they find out, there gonna want you hung
so you try to understand that you might get near
cause your lost alone in the shadow of fear
So you found a chick that you think is fine
but you fell too fast so you lost your mind
society looks, but they turn their ears
you got to get...
but you can't go far if it puts you out of sight
you can't look at girls
you can't drink anything
you got to get your kicks in the shadow of fear
You stay out late when they think your young
when they find out, there gonna want you hung
so you try to understand that you might get near
cause your lost alone in the shadow of fear
So you found a chick that you think is fine
but you fell too fast so you lost your mind
society looks, but they turn their ears
you got to get...
#FeelingTrapped
#lyrics
#rebellion
#rhyming
#shadows
54 reads
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oldmanG
Poem Published
10th Nov 2024 10:51am
10th Nov 2024 10:51am
Final Four for my Soul
Ball n tunes vs smoke n alcohol (Final Four for my soul)
Epic battle like Tyson vs Ali
Goliath and David
In the garden
Who wins will decide my soul
Rooting for bball but alcohol calls me
Back in to swim and lose myself
Find my way to the surface
Hearing tunes of dolphins
Smell skunk on the horizon
Sink into oblivion
Clear brain can’t find a word
To put together
Spirit’s figure it out
Playin leather and pulling strings
Are things of Buddha beings
...
Epic battle like Tyson vs Ali
Goliath and David
In the garden
Who wins will decide my soul
Rooting for bball but alcohol calls me
Back in to swim and lose myself
Find my way to the surface
Hearing tunes of dolphins
Smell skunk on the horizon
Sink into oblivion
Clear brain can’t find a word
To put together
Spirit’s figure it out
Playin leather and pulling strings
Are things of Buddha beings
...
#lyrics
#marijuana
#music #sports
#music #sports
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oldmanG
Poem Published
10th Nov 2024 00:26am
10th Nov 2024 00:26am
Here and Now
It took a lot to get to here
Sweat runs down the day laborer
Sleeps in the sun while all are moving
Drops her off to school to go back to sleep
Turning in the covers thoughts win me over
Can’t sleep thinking with my brain turned off
She ends her day of learning my dreams go to sleep dreaming
Back in the soil of everyday life
Brain can’t sleep my body suffers
Back in the soil of everyday life
Brain can’t sleep my body suffers that
Dreams are heaven when you’re laying down ...
Sweat runs down the day laborer
Sleeps in the sun while all are moving
Drops her off to school to go back to sleep
Turning in the covers thoughts win me over
Can’t sleep thinking with my brain turned off
She ends her day of learning my dreams go to sleep dreaming
Back in the soil of everyday life
Brain can’t sleep my body suffers
Back in the soil of everyday life
Brain can’t sleep my body suffers that
Dreams are heaven when you’re laying down ...
#morning
#night
#passion
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oldmanG
Poem Published
10th Nov 2024 00:25am
10th Nov 2024 00:25am
I Wanna Be A…
I Wanna Be A…
So I’m just a rock star
Trying to get on the stage
Thunder from under the auditorium
Broken string that I play
I’m just getting started don’t tempt me
Sit in the audience and listen
Feel like I can be one of them
I can be almost as good as them
Good enough for me and then some
I can slay a dragon if you let me
I can be your demon if that’s what you want me to be
I can be a friar serving penance for the congregation
All I want to be is a rock star
I know this will not...
So I’m just a rock star
Trying to get on the stage
Thunder from under the auditorium
Broken string that I play
I’m just getting started don’t tempt me
Sit in the audience and listen
Feel like I can be one of them
I can be almost as good as them
Good enough for me and then some
I can slay a dragon if you let me
I can be your demon if that’s what you want me to be
I can be a friar serving penance for the congregation
All I want to be is a rock star
I know this will not...
#culture
#identity
#music
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CarrionCrow44
Poem Published
7th Nov 2024 5:42am
7th Nov 2024 5:42am
Got No Say
Been forever now
Since a voice held a vote
Can’t recall when us became them
Well, you got no say
The colors dim
And streets get muddy
From shrapnel thrown around
Well, you got no say
Hate those ways
Deceptive and terrible too
Long gone is saying I told you so
Because it came true
You can’t run
There’s no hiding now
So rise up before they bury you
Fight the submission
Tax the wealthy
Rubber band their future
Let them crawl with no destination
Now, you...
Since a voice held a vote
Can’t recall when us became them
Well, you got no say
The colors dim
And streets get muddy
From shrapnel thrown around
Well, you got no say
Hate those ways
Deceptive and terrible too
Long gone is saying I told you so
Because it came true
You can’t run
There’s no hiding now
So rise up before they bury you
Fight the submission
Tax the wealthy
Rubber band their future
Let them crawl with no destination
Now, you...
#rebirth
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CarrionCrow44
Poem Published
6th Nov 2024 9:11pm
6th Nov 2024 9:11pm
Double Tongue
A premonition
Warnings from within
When entities promise change
Disguised brutality
The walls emerge
There goes accountability
Justice assassinated in the courts
Can’t trust your own
Even blood has no sympathy
Democracy twisted into intolerance
The guilty, the vindicated
Uneducated and willing to grovel
They kill those that oppose
All who rise against
The walls emerge
There goes accountability
Justice assassinate in the courts
Can’t trust your own
Even blood has no...
Warnings from within
When entities promise change
Disguised brutality
The walls emerge
There goes accountability
Justice assassinated in the courts
Can’t trust your own
Even blood has no sympathy
Democracy twisted into intolerance
The guilty, the vindicated
Uneducated and willing to grovel
They kill those that oppose
All who rise against
The walls emerge
There goes accountability
Justice assassinate in the courts
Can’t trust your own
Even blood has no...
#disappointment
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CarrionCrow44
Poem Published
5th Nov 2024 11:54pm
5th Nov 2024 11:54pm
The Pit
Tied up just below
You know I think you know
Lacerated those who came before
Silence the majority again
Leaves you breathless
The burden of knowing why
When machines dictate response
They tell you not to feel
I’ve seen it grow
I really thought we could
Be a little more then just a census
Numbers on a blank page
There is no pride
Only illusions to consider
Undone by greedy little people
As it’s always done
Who is the cause
Who tells you what to be
Who told you to share the wealth...
You know I think you know
Lacerated those who came before
Silence the majority again
Leaves you breathless
The burden of knowing why
When machines dictate response
They tell you not to feel
I’ve seen it grow
I really thought we could
Be a little more then just a census
Numbers on a blank page
There is no pride
Only illusions to consider
Undone by greedy little people
As it’s always done
Who is the cause
Who tells you what to be
Who told you to share the wealth...
#anger
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TimWombles
Poem Published
2nd Nov 2024 2:59pm
2nd Nov 2024 2:59pm
If only I had been
Do I believe in reincarnation, the answer is no
I don't think there is a heaven, we got no place to go
I believe my ship came and went
I think my tokens have all been spent
When my chances came, I took the bus
I've got nothing left but total disgust
Think my world is coming to an end
I'm left without a penny to spend
I wasn't brave enough to do something with my life
~Chorus~
If only I had taken that chance
If only I had stepped out on that limb
Maybe I could have been someone
Instead of sinking I could...
I don't think there is a heaven, we got no place to go
I believe my ship came and went
I think my tokens have all been spent
When my chances came, I took the bus
I've got nothing left but total disgust
Think my world is coming to an end
I'm left without a penny to spend
I wasn't brave enough to do something with my life
~Chorus~
If only I had taken that chance
If only I had stepped out on that limb
Maybe I could have been someone
Instead of sinking I could...
#LifeGoals
#LifeStruggles
#regret
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