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Short stories and chapters from books and novels
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
15th Dec 2024 10:48am
15th Dec 2024 10:48am
Sweets
I still remember the scent.
Of chocolate,wet cement.
When I was still a child.
And all of the pain was mild.
I remember the scent of pastries.
With cream and chocolate chips.
I remember her cookies.
So good,you would lick your lips.
And maybe homemade,vanilla cake.
That you and your family would make.
Maybe the scent and taste of caramel.
If only I could remember the smell.
I would have a fairytale to tell.
One day,I will also try to bake.
Maybe while painting an ethereal lake.
I will...
Of chocolate,wet cement.
When I was still a child.
And all of the pain was mild.
I remember the scent of pastries.
With cream and chocolate chips.
I remember her cookies.
So good,you would lick your lips.
And maybe homemade,vanilla cake.
That you and your family would make.
Maybe the scent and taste of caramel.
If only I could remember the smell.
I would have a fairytale to tell.
One day,I will also try to bake.
Maybe while painting an ethereal lake.
I will...
#happiness
#hope
#memories
#nostalgia
#uplifting
79 reads
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
14th Dec 2024 10:47am
14th Dec 2024 10:47am
The Diamond Tree
One day,you were walking home at night.
In the storm,with no fright.
Something was sparkling in the sky.
But not just the stars.
You find something far away.
That looks like it will never decay.
It resembled a tree.
With diamonds on it,that will set you free.
Maybe it was all in your head.
Maybe it was an illusion,a threat.
But when you followed the thread.
You became amazed.
With diamonds so shiny,you became dreamy and dazed.
Your feelings were happy,amazed.
With your fascination unphased.
...
In the storm,with no fright.
Something was sparkling in the sky.
But not just the stars.
You find something far away.
That looks like it will never decay.
It resembled a tree.
With diamonds on it,that will set you free.
Maybe it was all in your head.
Maybe it was an illusion,a threat.
But when you followed the thread.
You became amazed.
With diamonds so shiny,you became dreamy and dazed.
Your feelings were happy,amazed.
With your fascination unphased.
...
#dreams
#happiness
#hope
#motivational
#uplifting
60 reads
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Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
13th Dec 2024 8:10pm
13th Dec 2024 8:10pm
Three Clowns for Samhain
#corruption
#dark
#Halloween
#horror
#murder
53 reads
0 Comments
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
12th Dec 2024 10:51am
12th Dec 2024 10:51am
When Flowers Bloom
When it's spring it's a surprise.
The glowing stars in the skies.
The flowers all begin to bloom.
And you give them to a wedded bride and groom.
The colors,you can arrange.
And maybe get a chance.
Of a colorful,new romance.
Roses represent grace.
And put a smile on your face.
They come in so many varieties and ways.
Daisies,white petals.
In the cold,midnight rain.
When flowers bloom,you feel no pain.
All the colors on the field.
And the pollen that they shield.
It's like a game of...
The glowing stars in the skies.
The flowers all begin to bloom.
And you give them to a wedded bride and groom.
The colors,you can arrange.
And maybe get a chance.
Of a colorful,new romance.
Roses represent grace.
And put a smile on your face.
They come in so many varieties and ways.
Daisies,white petals.
In the cold,midnight rain.
When flowers bloom,you feel no pain.
All the colors on the field.
And the pollen that they shield.
It's like a game of...
#happiness
#hope
#nature #uplifting
#nature #uplifting
124 reads
0 Comments
Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
5th Dec 2024 7:07pm
5th Dec 2024 7:07pm
Blake's Ghost Hunters and the Web of Madness: Part Two
#dark
#ghosts
#horror
#scifi
#ShortStory
48 reads
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Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
5th Dec 2024 7:04pm
5th Dec 2024 7:04pm
Blake's Ghost Hunters and the Web of Madness: Part One
#dark
#ghosts
#horror
#scifi
#ShortStory
49 reads
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Mercurial
Poem Published
4th Dec 2024 6:16pm
4th Dec 2024 6:16pm
Lunar Alchemy
In the night of darkness,
The trees get taller on a full moon,
Branches get longer than noon,
Leaves are greener with veins thick.
Darkness gets darker,
Moonlight yearns for blood,
Squirrels hide in their treehouses,
When the beast walks through the forest.
A blend of a wolf and medusa’s head,
Spitting lethal poison out of their hissing voices,
Standing on hooves of a goat,
Looking for innocent blood to cherish its soul.
Walks distances, delving deeper,
Thirst builds up like a snowball,
Swaying anything on...
The trees get taller on a full moon,
Branches get longer than noon,
Leaves are greener with veins thick.
Darkness gets darker,
Moonlight yearns for blood,
Squirrels hide in their treehouses,
When the beast walks through the forest.
A blend of a wolf and medusa’s head,
Spitting lethal poison out of their hissing voices,
Standing on hooves of a goat,
Looking for innocent blood to cherish its soul.
Walks distances, delving deeper,
Thirst builds up like a snowball,
Swaying anything on...
#admiration
#love
#romantic
#strength
#TimeHeals
149 reads
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RyanBlackborough
Poem Published
1st Dec 2024 11:28am
1st Dec 2024 11:28am
It's sweet insight
"Good afternoon sir, welcome to the patisserie. What can I get for you"
"Hi, yes I'd like some cake please"
"Certainly, is it for a particular occasion"
"No no, simply to observe"
"Hi, yes I'd like some cake please"
"Certainly, is it for a particular occasion"
"No no, simply to observe"
#funny
137 reads
2 Comments
Casted_Runes
Mr Karswell
Mr Karswell
Poem Published
25th Nov 2024 1:42pm
25th Nov 2024 1:42pm
Tops & Tails
They gathered in a room of the hotel that served as a sort of dressing room for waitresses, who functioned essentially as entertainers. The girls weren't dressed in formal wear but in a showgirl ensemble that combined tops and tails with fishnet stockings. A few of the more imposing waitresses even wielded canes like Old Hollywood tap dancers.
Mrs Berkeley sailed into the room, all frontage and steerage. Her chest and rear were of proportions that the girls in her care could only have nightmares about. She wore her hair in the tortured bob of women her age and size. She was...
Mrs Berkeley sailed into the room, all frontage and steerage. Her chest and rear were of proportions that the girls in her care could only have nightmares about. She wore her hair in the tortured bob of women her age and size. She was...
#fiction
#revenge
#ShortStory #violence
#ShortStory #violence
94 reads
2 Comments
Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
24th Nov 2024 6:47pm
24th Nov 2024 6:47pm
Klingon Legends: The Clans of the Damned
- Klingon Legends: The Clans of the Damned -
(Inspired by stories found in the book “Let's Trek: The Budget Traveller's Guide to Klingon Worlds”.)
This is a rather dark story, which was hidden deep within a historical knowledge database of a highly respected university on the Klingon home world of Kronos. The author's name was stricken off records.
Upon one of the more remote planets of the Klingon Empire, there was a clan known for their strange and mysterious behavior. No one can be said to be truly familiar with their origins, but it is known that those...
(Inspired by stories found in the book “Let's Trek: The Budget Traveller's Guide to Klingon Worlds”.)
This is a rather dark story, which was hidden deep within a historical knowledge database of a highly respected university on the Klingon home world of Kronos. The author's name was stricken off records.
Upon one of the more remote planets of the Klingon Empire, there was a clan known for their strange and mysterious behavior. No one can be said to be truly familiar with their origins, but it is known that those...
#aliens
#dark
#historical
#horror
#scifi
82 reads
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Koulouri
Poem Published
16th Nov 2024 10:54pm
16th Nov 2024 10:54pm
Change the Locks
scatterbrained,
feathers and pecking,
thoughts quick,
frantic checking.
the door is locked,
footsteps approach,
sweat sliding down,
a creeping roach.
It looks in your eyes,
you have no disguise.
knob turning,
knee hitting the wood,
still locked in a trance,
be understood.
one-click,
two-click,
three-click,
done.
time standing still,
yet persisting forward,
the door is now open,
you are cornered.
a question is asked,
yet...
feathers and pecking,
thoughts quick,
frantic checking.
the door is locked,
footsteps approach,
sweat sliding down,
a creeping roach.
It looks in your eyes,
you have no disguise.
knob turning,
knee hitting the wood,
still locked in a trance,
be understood.
one-click,
two-click,
three-click,
done.
time standing still,
yet persisting forward,
the door is now open,
you are cornered.
a question is asked,
yet...
#anxiety
#fear
#memories #scary
#memories #scary
115 reads
2 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
14th Nov 2024 1:51pm
14th Nov 2024 1:51pm
The One Night Stand
#erotic
#lust
#orgasm
#sex
#temptation
276 reads
18 Comments
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