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Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:05pm
Yesterday 8:05pm
The Fountain of Death
- The Fountain of Death -
Diego Cruz was awakened in the middle of the pitch-black of those dark hours past midnight, and as he did awaken... he felt a sense of dread creeping upon him. Instinctively, he reached for the long sword that lay nearby, on the large sack full of supplies that the native bearers had brought and laid in his tent with much care. He nearly tripped on the animal skins that covered the ground, but caught himself so as to not fall. It had been raining most of the previous day, and camp had been set up to wait out the rain... but this had halted the expedition...
Diego Cruz was awakened in the middle of the pitch-black of those dark hours past midnight, and as he did awaken... he felt a sense of dread creeping upon him. Instinctively, he reached for the long sword that lay nearby, on the large sack full of supplies that the native bearers had brought and laid in his tent with much care. He nearly tripped on the animal skins that covered the ground, but caught himself so as to not fall. It had been raining most of the previous day, and camp had been set up to wait out the rain... but this had halted the expedition...
#dark
#rebirth
#travel
#magic
#curse
23 reads
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Kou_Indigo
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:51pm
Yesterday 7:51pm
The Unholy Brides of Kalin Dragos
#love
#dark
#gothic
#vampires
#obsession
10 reads
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Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
7th Dec 2023 3:05pm
7th Dec 2023 3:05pm
Ocean Breeze
I felt the ocean breeze.
I breathe in the scent of beach sand.
And I try not to sneeze.
With birds flying in the sky.
I make a sandcastle and don't ask why.
Fish swimming,with dolphins,wild and free.
With the ice cold water,despite the hot weather.
As you go in it with a group of friends.
You play together as kids and make amends.
The sun shines on your face.
The moon controls the tide at night with grace.
You look at it whatsoever with a wondering face.
Personally,I always found the ocean soothing.
With...
I breathe in the scent of beach sand.
And I try not to sneeze.
With birds flying in the sky.
I make a sandcastle and don't ask why.
Fish swimming,with dolphins,wild and free.
With the ice cold water,despite the hot weather.
As you go in it with a group of friends.
You play together as kids and make amends.
The sun shines on your face.
The moon controls the tide at night with grace.
You look at it whatsoever with a wondering face.
Personally,I always found the ocean soothing.
With...
#sea
#water
#nature
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Casted_Runes
Mr Karswell
Mr Karswell
Poem Published
5th Dec 2023 11:00pm
5th Dec 2023 11:00pm
Dupin in London
fan fiction based on characters created by Edgar Allan Poe
It was in the year 18—— that my friend Dupin and I set sail to London to stay with a sponsor for whom Dupin had rendered a most invaluable service when they were caught in a “cooping” incident, a most disreputable practice whereby a man is plied with drink and then forced to visit polling stations to vote for his assailants’ chosen candidate. The sponsor was a wealthy but naive young dandy from New York, visiting New Orleans just as Dupin had also gone to sample the local culture for a piece to be published in Blackwood’s....
It was in the year 18—— that my friend Dupin and I set sail to London to stay with a sponsor for whom Dupin had rendered a most invaluable service when they were caught in a “cooping” incident, a most disreputable practice whereby a man is plied with drink and then forced to visit polling stations to vote for his assailants’ chosen candidate. The sponsor was a wealthy but naive young dandy from New York, visiting New Orleans just as Dupin had also gone to sample the local culture for a piece to be published in Blackwood’s....
#Fanfiction
#ShortStory
#prose #mystery
#prose #mystery
46 reads
6 Comments
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
25th Nov 2023 12:16pm
25th Nov 2023 12:16pm
Wonderland
It was night.
I was tired.
And ready to dream away.
I got under the blanket.
I laid my head on the pillow,closing my eyes.
One second,I was in my bed.
Next thing I know,I have a fuzzy feeling in my head.
I woke up in a mystical land.
Where it's colorful,and everything is bent.
Everyone was smiling unnaturally wide.
I didn't know what it meant.
I began to head inside a tunnel.
But I started to fall.
I ended up in a hallway.
The air had an odd smell.
Next to me ,a magical wishing well. ...
I was tired.
And ready to dream away.
I got under the blanket.
I laid my head on the pillow,closing my eyes.
One second,I was in my bed.
Next thing I know,I have a fuzzy feeling in my head.
I woke up in a mystical land.
Where it's colorful,and everything is bent.
Everyone was smiling unnaturally wide.
I didn't know what it meant.
I began to head inside a tunnel.
But I started to fall.
I ended up in a hallway.
The air had an odd smell.
Next to me ,a magical wishing well. ...
#dreams
#sleep
46 reads
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Nizana
Lauryn
Lauryn
Poem Published
22nd Nov 2023 3:20pm
22nd Nov 2023 3:20pm
Susan's Temptation Part 1
#marriage
#sex
#betrayal
76 reads
4 Comments
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
21st Nov 2023 2:54pm
21st Nov 2023 2:54pm
Ballad Of The Fairy
The clouds were in the air.
The sun was shining through.
It was a lovely sunday morning afternoon.
There was a light breeze.
And you feel like you might sneeze.
But you don't.
And you spot something in the air.
It's sparkly,leaving trace in your hair.
It's like magic dust.
From a creature so unknown.
You look behind and your mind is blown.
You saw a fairy.
A pixie in small size.
She uses sparkly wings to fly in the skies.
Her hair,so beautiful you mesmerize.
And shiny,blue angel eyes. ...
The sun was shining through.
It was a lovely sunday morning afternoon.
There was a light breeze.
And you feel like you might sneeze.
But you don't.
And you spot something in the air.
It's sparkly,leaving trace in your hair.
It's like magic dust.
From a creature so unknown.
You look behind and your mind is blown.
You saw a fairy.
A pixie in small size.
She uses sparkly wings to fly in the skies.
Her hair,so beautiful you mesmerize.
And shiny,blue angel eyes. ...
#nature
#fairies
45 reads
1 Comment
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
17th Nov 2023 4:48pm
17th Nov 2023 4:48pm
Dollhouse
The little girl opened up the walls.
She ran excitedly down the halls.
To open up her dollhouse.
The dolls all became back plastic,and put on their dresses.
Wearing their dollfaces.
And bright color, happy smiles.
She picked up one of them.
And she played all day.
Then,at the end of the day,she puts them away.
They turn back into their true form.
They walk out of the dollhouse at midnight.
And they head down to the kitchen.
Trying not to make a noise.
They weren't hiding behind their masks anymore. ...
She ran excitedly down the halls.
To open up her dollhouse.
The dolls all became back plastic,and put on their dresses.
Wearing their dollfaces.
And bright color, happy smiles.
She picked up one of them.
And she played all day.
Then,at the end of the day,she puts them away.
They turn back into their true form.
They walk out of the dollhouse at midnight.
And they head down to the kitchen.
Trying not to make a noise.
They weren't hiding behind their masks anymore. ...
#music
#scary
#horror
59 reads
1 Comment
Lowko
Poem Published
16th Nov 2023 4:13pm
16th Nov 2023 4:13pm
Cracula
It was Halloween night, no Michael Myers in sight.
I was dressed up as a mime, ready to get high as a kite!
I was no juggalo, but I played ICP in the whip.
As I burnt rubber towards downtown to get me some shit.
With my barnett in platts, I headed down to the flats.
That was full of dope feins, like the roaches, and rats.
I was approached by a straggly haired lady, she looked like a banshee.
A hag of the mist type, and asked me for some Mandy.
I said "I've got nothing on me lady, now leave me alone!"
As I proceeded...
I was dressed up as a mime, ready to get high as a kite!
I was no juggalo, but I played ICP in the whip.
As I burnt rubber towards downtown to get me some shit.
With my barnett in platts, I headed down to the flats.
That was full of dope feins, like the roaches, and rats.
I was approached by a straggly haired lady, she looked like a banshee.
A hag of the mist type, and asked me for some Mandy.
I said "I've got nothing on me lady, now leave me alone!"
As I proceeded...
#Halloween
51 reads
1 Comment
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
13th Nov 2023 10:53am
13th Nov 2023 10:53am
Secret Garden
I was exploring my town.
Looking at mountains far away.
Then ,something caught my eye.
I found a house.
With a backyard,very big.
I went into the backyard.
I entered through the doors.
I explored the mystical halls.
Listening to birds chirping.
As I catch a sunlight ray.
And I found something fascinating.
I had found a secret garden.
A fairytale,hidden away.
It had flowers of all kinds, so much color.
Like a jungle hidden in paradise.
You look at its beauty and you widen your eyes.
As...
Looking at mountains far away.
Then ,something caught my eye.
I found a house.
With a backyard,very big.
I went into the backyard.
I entered through the doors.
I explored the mystical halls.
Listening to birds chirping.
As I catch a sunlight ray.
And I found something fascinating.
I had found a secret garden.
A fairytale,hidden away.
It had flowers of all kinds, so much color.
Like a jungle hidden in paradise.
You look at its beauty and you widen your eyes.
As...
#dreams
#flowers
#rose #nature
#rose #nature
61 reads
2 Comments
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
10th Nov 2023 2:04pm
10th Nov 2023 2:04pm
Music
I put on my headphones.
And a whole new world awaits me.
Full of color and play.
Where you are comforted,night and day.
With its own words of understanding.
Or a happy, cheerful beat.
Lyrics is sang, as a happy tune you greet.
Whether you are sad.
Or if you are traveling far away.
It entertains you,even in the light of day.
You just choose a playlist.
And tap the play button.
As your worries melt away.
You listen to your favorite music, your happiness never decay.
Whether you need comforting.
...
And a whole new world awaits me.
Full of color and play.
Where you are comforted,night and day.
With its own words of understanding.
Or a happy, cheerful beat.
Lyrics is sang, as a happy tune you greet.
Whether you are sad.
Or if you are traveling far away.
It entertains you,even in the light of day.
You just choose a playlist.
And tap the play button.
As your worries melt away.
You listen to your favorite music, your happiness never decay.
Whether you need comforting.
...
#happiness
#music
70 reads
2 Comments
Liziantus-Marantus
Poem Published
7th Nov 2023 9:28am
7th Nov 2023 9:28am
Ballad Of The Siren
You were at the sea shore.
As waves crash into the sea.
You take a deep breath, and you take in the scent of all the sand you see.
As something catches your gaze from afar.
And you hear her angelic song.
And you go to the source of the sound.
A georgeous siren is what you found.
With her fish tail,and human eyes.
You listen to her song and hypnotize.
And before you realised ,you came closer.
As she extends to you her hand.
And together you travel very far land.
Exploring the ocean.
With your...
As waves crash into the sea.
You take a deep breath, and you take in the scent of all the sand you see.
As something catches your gaze from afar.
And you hear her angelic song.
And you go to the source of the sound.
A georgeous siren is what you found.
With her fish tail,and human eyes.
You listen to her song and hypnotize.
And before you realised ,you came closer.
As she extends to you her hand.
And together you travel very far land.
Exploring the ocean.
With your...
#love
#magic
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