Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Her Way Of Wanting Us To Join In
Zayda walked to the pool.
She stripped down and smiled before diving.
She said the water's fine.
She stripped down and smiled before diving.
She said the water's fine.
#fiction
#friendship
#sensual
#summer
#water
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What He Saw On One Summer Night
One summer,
Princeton stepped outside for
some air and spotted twin chicks splashing
in the water until they looked at him before
Jenna smacked him on the head and got
him to come and rejoin
the party.
Princeton stepped outside for
some air and spotted twin chicks splashing
in the water until they looked at him before
Jenna smacked him on the head and got
him to come and rejoin
the party.
#beach
#dating
#fiction
#summer
#water
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The Missing Link
The tree and the bird
the bee and the flower
the sun and the moon
the heat and the shower
The silence and the sound
the ear and the music
the heart and the feeling
the brain and the thinking
The wild and the wise
The Human and Nature
the wild is inborn
the wise is artificial
From the wild comes the rule
Into the wise mind instilled
While the city is the filter
The rules then, are broken
Nature's facts disfigured
all the trees became timber
the animals...
the bee and the flower
the sun and the moon
the heat and the shower
The silence and the sound
the ear and the music
the heart and the feeling
the brain and the thinking
The wild and the wise
The Human and Nature
the wild is inborn
the wise is artificial
From the wild comes the rule
Into the wise mind instilled
While the city is the filter
The rules then, are broken
Nature's facts disfigured
all the trees became timber
the animals...
#birds
#earth
#fire
#nature
#water
166 reads
6 Comments
move like water
aquamarine waves
tremble against roaring shore
white shells shine like stars
tremble against roaring shore
white shells shine like stars
#beach
#LifeAsAWriter
#love
#nature
#water
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8 Comments
While Two Lovers Share A Jacuzzi
Susan was caressing Jessica's body.
Then, she saw Mark using his camcorder.
That made Susan smile big.
Then, she saw Mark using his camcorder.
That made Susan smile big.
#fiction
#friendship
#lesbian
#sensual
#water
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Fluidity
Dawn, rests on grass blades, unbending
My dry dying bones lap up her gift
Mystical rise to skies, ascending
Carried by air, barely, thick on my breath
My atrocities below, leak to above
She withdraws her warmth but keeps her cool
Falling gems, she weeps from bitter love
In her wrath, I'm hailed with ice daggers
Calling me into depths of her magnetic ocean
Resting my head softly into her dark depths
Cities and their kings fall to her liquid emotion
In you, I give final breath, because I love
My dry dying bones lap up her gift
Mystical rise to skies, ascending
Carried by air, barely, thick on my breath
My atrocities below, leak to above
She withdraws her warmth but keeps her cool
Falling gems, she weeps from bitter love
In her wrath, I'm hailed with ice daggers
Calling me into depths of her magnetic ocean
Resting my head softly into her dark depths
Cities and their kings fall to her liquid emotion
In you, I give final breath, because I love
#love
#NaPoWriMo2024
#water
105 reads
1 Comment
Great Day For A Cool Swim
Preston and some friends arrived at the beach house
just in time to see Juliette swimming around
in a black bikini before she heard a
voice say "Great day for a cool swim, Darling Sweetheart!"
just in time to see Juliette swimming around
in a black bikini before she heard a
voice say "Great day for a cool swim, Darling Sweetheart!"
#beach
#fiction
#friendship
#summer
#water
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Monoliths
Wintry tears drip deep,
into icy, dark waters
The stream is endless,
as she came to me in the form of paradise
As I envisioned
I made a decision
Wisdom floats
as infinity awaits
into icy, dark waters
The stream is endless,
as she came to me in the form of paradise
As I envisioned
I made a decision
Wisdom floats
as infinity awaits
#utopia
#winter
#water
#nature
#wisdom
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2 Comments
One fish, Two Fish - NaPoWriMo 10
Inside me are
one fish, two fish
at the least,
The dreamiest goldfish
daydreaming away
into obliviousness
you have ever known
so out of touch
they forget the previous moment
in favour of naive fondness
eager to look on the positive
and the golden lining.
And a surprise Shark
snarling and snapping away
in sudden savage attack
with a grinning quip
of deepest blue
to flush blood into the water
and a sharp erect fin
that will hardly finish anytime soon,
slapping some colour into...
one fish, two fish
at the least,
The dreamiest goldfish
daydreaming away
into obliviousness
you have ever known
so out of touch
they forget the previous moment
in favour of naive fondness
eager to look on the positive
and the golden lining.
And a surprise Shark
snarling and snapping away
in sudden savage attack
with a grinning quip
of deepest blue
to flush blood into the water
and a sharp erect fin
that will hardly finish anytime soon,
slapping some colour into...
#identity
#water
#fish
#SelfReflection
#NaPoWriMo2024
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1 Comment
Well? Don't You Want To Join Me For A Hot Soak?
Khloe looked at
Jason standing
naked next to
the jacuzzi.
Jason standing
naked next to
the jacuzzi.
#friendship
#water
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#sensual
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Dragon ships
Snails
full sail
wet pavement
drums
full sail
wet pavement
drums
#rain
#water
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2 Comments
Embracing The Aquatic - Heat 3
If we pay to use
the neighborhood pool,
you will join the swim team.”
A parental edict
we thought was real mean.
Getting up early
on Summer-break day's
Mounting old, purple
Schwinn bicycle,
slowly, reluctantly peddling…
sloth off to practice
for a Saturday meet
Beach towel, goggles
dangling ‘roun neck.
Wearing too brief,
light/darker blue-striped Speedo.
Splashers’ mandated
racing suit…
that if worn today,
would get me arrested.
Greeted each day
by smiley Coach Butch...
the neighborhood pool,
you will join the swim team.”
A parental edict
we thought was real mean.
Getting up early
on Summer-break day's
Mounting old, purple
Schwinn bicycle,
slowly, reluctantly peddling…
sloth off to practice
for a Saturday meet
Beach towel, goggles
dangling ‘roun neck.
Wearing too brief,
light/darker blue-striped Speedo.
Splashers’ mandated
racing suit…
that if worn today,
would get me arrested.
Greeted each day
by smiley Coach Butch...
#childhood
#water
#memorial #sports
#memorial #sports
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DU Poetry : Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique