Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Lost At Sea
My arms grew tired, I couldn't swim anymore
No one around to help me
A sharp pain within my core
I was drifting further & further out
The more I fought the current
I began to panic, I began to shout
The distant coastline was my last vision
Rip currents tired me out
I made my final decision
I stayed afloat until I had nothing else left
Neptune dragged me down
Drowning was the cause of death
No one around to help me
A sharp pain within my core
I was drifting further & further out
The more I fought the current
I began to panic, I began to shout
The distant coastline was my last vision
Rip currents tired me out
I made my final decision
I stayed afloat until I had nothing else left
Neptune dragged me down
Drowning was the cause of death
#dark
#rhyming
#sea #water
#sea #water
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Care To Join Me For A Swim?
Cody stepped outside the house.
He spotted Lisa standing by the pool.
She slid off her robe.
Lisa glanced over at Cody and smiled.
Then, she started with her skinny dipping.
He spotted Lisa standing by the pool.
She slid off her robe.
Lisa glanced over at Cody and smiled.
Then, she started with her skinny dipping.
#fiction
#home
#sex
#summer
#water
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A Natural Disaster
I AM A
NATURAL DISASTER,
I will RIP THROUGH
YOU like a
HURRICANE,
I will DESTROY YOU like a
TORNADO,
I WILL WIPE YOU OUT like a
TSUNAMI,
I will ERUPT STRONG like a
VOLCANO,
I will SWIRL YOU like a
CYCLONE,
I will DROWN YOU like the
DEEP SEAS!!,
BURN THROUGH YOU like
FIRE,
VERY FAST and
WITH EASE,
I AM A
STRONG and POWERFUL
WIND,
Blowing down
REALLY TALL TREES,
I AM A ROCK, and
I WILL CRUSH you,
SO, WATCH OUT
IF YOU SO PLEASE!!!!!
I will ...
NATURAL DISASTER,
I will RIP THROUGH
YOU like a
HURRICANE,
I will DESTROY YOU like a
TORNADO,
I WILL WIPE YOU OUT like a
TSUNAMI,
I will ERUPT STRONG like a
VOLCANO,
I will SWIRL YOU like a
CYCLONE,
I will DROWN YOU like the
DEEP SEAS!!,
BURN THROUGH YOU like
FIRE,
VERY FAST and
WITH EASE,
I AM A
STRONG and POWERFUL
WIND,
Blowing down
REALLY TALL TREES,
I AM A ROCK, and
I WILL CRUSH you,
SO, WATCH OUT
IF YOU SO PLEASE!!!!!
I will ...
#nature
#rain
#water #wind
#water #wind
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Was Just Performing A Special Service
Richard went to the roof.
He spotted Tricia soaking in the jacuzzi.
She truly was enjoying it.
That was before Richard approached.
Tricia felt his hand and looked up.
She became shocked by Richard.
Then, another figure popped up.
It was their next door neighbor Tom.
They put their robes on.
Tricia tried to explain herself.
That was before Jodie walked towards Richard.
She said it was okay.
Tom was just performing a special service.
Just like on the TV show Satisfaction.
He spotted Tricia soaking in the jacuzzi.
She truly was enjoying it.
That was before Richard approached.
Tricia felt his hand and looked up.
She became shocked by Richard.
Then, another figure popped up.
It was their next door neighbor Tom.
They put their robes on.
Tricia tried to explain herself.
That was before Jodie walked towards Richard.
She said it was okay.
Tom was just performing a special service.
Just like on the TV show Satisfaction.
#fiction
#friendship
#home
#sex
#water
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Intelligence of nature
nature knows best
accept the easy path, yet do not rest
be a rock, carved in the stream
let life rip you apart
& rejoice, once again
Kamaloca, on and off
time quickens, as it must.
all the bars
to them prison cells
been left unlocked
a beacon for the moth
Step out side, ride the night,
wild and raw, unthinking,
deconstruct time
let loose, your mind.
accept the easy path, yet do not rest
be a rock, carved in the stream
let life rip you apart
& rejoice, once again
Kamaloca, on and off
time quickens, as it must.
all the bars
to them prison cells
been left unlocked
a beacon for the moth
Step out side, ride the night,
wild and raw, unthinking,
deconstruct time
let loose, your mind.
#escape
#freedom
#nature
#sex
#water
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A Thousand Years From Forever (Twenty)
The Waterloo
Below Sea Level
The Golden Palace
Somewhere In The Midst of Time There Is You
My Queen, please wait and slow down
I hear his voice, and that is an unwelcoming sound
The King, where is he, I must get to him
This is not a feeling, on a whim
My Queen, please just stand still, and tell your Ladies-In-Waiting, what is going on
This movement of chaos occurred upon moons ago, the result, and I humbly bow to tell the slice of my truth, where I was dethroned
The wind at my back,...
Below Sea Level
The Golden Palace
Somewhere In The Midst of Time There Is You
My Queen, please wait and slow down
I hear his voice, and that is an unwelcoming sound
The King, where is he, I must get to him
This is not a feeling, on a whim
My Queen, please just stand still, and tell your Ladies-In-Waiting, what is going on
This movement of chaos occurred upon moons ago, the result, and I humbly bow to tell the slice of my truth, where I was dethroned
The wind at my back,...
#mythology
#water
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Water
Water is the fluid that moves everything in our bodies, including our neural pathways.
(Well, for neural pathways, it is more like the medium for electricity, but still drink water for thought and movement.)
(Well, for neural pathways, it is more like the medium for electricity, but still drink water for thought and movement.)
#evolution
#healing
#MentalHealth
#nature
#water
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Inner Harmony with Peace
Come go with me 🙏 and travel into a different place, where there's no time only your own thoughts, in the depths of your own MIND. For sure you could need to have a few minutes, to just unwind from the negativity and drama, and confusion for the betterment of your mind thoughts. WOULD you take the time. ⌚ To release the deepness of your own thoughts, to be able to feel you are unblocking, the very deepness of your spiritual. ENTITY of your energy and determination and perseverance. TO just have this opportunity to get inside of your own personal thoughts, 🤔 to be able to...
#dialogue
#mountains
#nature
#StreamOfConsciousness
#water
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Obelisks
Wintry tears drip deep
into icy, dark waters
The stream is endless,
as she came to me in the form of paradise
As I envisioned
I made a decision
Wisdom floats
as infinity awaits
into icy, dark waters
The stream is endless,
as she came to me in the form of paradise
As I envisioned
I made a decision
Wisdom floats
as infinity awaits
#nature
#utopia
#water
#winter
#wisdom
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Feed it to the fire.
Shake off all the dead wood,
Chuck it on the fire,
As the wind blows stronger,
The flames climb ever higher.
It’s a mystery that we claim,
When we come into this world,
When we put upon our name,
And learn to shape its words.
All troubles are the allies,
Of the spirits we rely on,
That rough edges do us favours,
That there’s little use denying.
It’s a mystery we accept,
When we’re pulled between the worlds,
When we’re struck by flailing limbs,
With whipping stings, we learn.
Shake off all...
Chuck it on the fire,
As the wind blows stronger,
The flames climb ever higher.
It’s a mystery that we claim,
When we come into this world,
When we put upon our name,
And learn to shape its words.
All troubles are the allies,
Of the spirits we rely on,
That rough edges do us favours,
That there’s little use denying.
It’s a mystery we accept,
When we’re pulled between the worlds,
When we’re struck by flailing limbs,
With whipping stings, we learn.
Shake off all...
#earth
#fate
#luck
#responsibility
#water
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Four Elements - A Paraphrase
There are four elements in this world
I think upon how beautiful three of them are
But the fourth, just as lovely
I cannot touch with my full understanding
The way of an eagle in the air as it swims through the canyon
The way of the snake on the ground as it flies from my sight
The way of a ship upon the water as it gives itself to the wind
The way of a man with the flame as he gives himself to a woman
Paraphrase of Proverbs 30:19
I think upon how beautiful three of them are
But the fourth, just as lovely
I cannot touch with my full understanding
The way of an eagle in the air as it swims through the canyon
The way of the snake on the ground as it flies from my sight
The way of a ship upon the water as it gives itself to the wind
The way of a man with the flame as he gives himself to a woman
Paraphrase of Proverbs 30:19
#beauty
#earth
#FallingInLove
#fire
#water
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By the water...
I'm not gonna drown myself...
the sun is going down...
the guy who gave me a ride...
is pitching a tent for us -
I'm fucking him for the ride.
I just came down here to piss..
Not drown myself.
I only tried that once.
Figured I'd finish what...
my Mom once started!
I got too scared. Flashback.
He's calling me. Tent's up!
We didn't exchange names.
Body fluids are enough -
fair trade for the ride.
I'll probably just lay there.
I walked miles today.
I'm tired. I'll play dead.
Or, I could...
the sun is going down...
the guy who gave me a ride...
is pitching a tent for us -
I'm fucking him for the ride.
I just came down here to piss..
Not drown myself.
I only tried that once.
Figured I'd finish what...
my Mom once started!
I got too scared. Flashback.
He's calling me. Tent's up!
We didn't exchange names.
Body fluids are enough -
fair trade for the ride.
I'll probably just lay there.
I walked miles today.
I'm tired. I'll play dead.
Or, I could...
#dirty
#nature
#sex #water
#sex #water
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DU Poetry : Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique