Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Nocturnal Tranquility...
Tucked within the Blue Ridge tapestry,
I watched, with passion, as skies of sun
and indigo kissed day goodbye.
Droplets of dew fell from the ether
to then be carried upon a chaotic zephyr
while I bundled around the fire.
As hues of muted grey painted the sky,
the moon made its debut in a pale,
yet supple form; granting the slightest mångata atop the liquid mirth.
As the cosmos embraced the lake from
the expanse of its astral plane,
I played voyeur; wrapped up in their moonlight reverie, and thoroughly
enjoying the cold, yet...
I watched, with passion, as skies of sun
and indigo kissed day goodbye.
Droplets of dew fell from the ether
to then be carried upon a chaotic zephyr
while I bundled around the fire.
As hues of muted grey painted the sky,
the moon made its debut in a pale,
yet supple form; granting the slightest mångata atop the liquid mirth.
As the cosmos embraced the lake from
the expanse of its astral plane,
I played voyeur; wrapped up in their moonlight reverie, and thoroughly
enjoying the cold, yet...
#night
#water
#mountains
#moon
#peace
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26 Comments
Mermaid Fantasy
You were swimming in the sea.
Down in the ocean,deep sea.
You swimmed past fish of all kinds.
And creatures with all sorts of minds.
The colors they produce,all the shapes.
Different patterns on ocean snakes.
And the way they glowed at the very bottom.
Like nightlights deep in the sea.
And you wonder,who do I want to be?
Where do I want to be?
Suddenly,you see a girl in scales.
Long dark hair,blue eyes.
With a fish tail,surrounded by whales.
They seemed like old friends.
Chattering in the ocean,...
Down in the ocean,deep sea.
You swimmed past fish of all kinds.
And creatures with all sorts of minds.
The colors they produce,all the shapes.
Different patterns on ocean snakes.
And the way they glowed at the very bottom.
Like nightlights deep in the sea.
And you wonder,who do I want to be?
Where do I want to be?
Suddenly,you see a girl in scales.
Long dark hair,blue eyes.
With a fish tail,surrounded by whales.
They seemed like old friends.
Chattering in the ocean,...
#sea
#water
#nature #uplifting
#nature #uplifting
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Why Did You Do That To Me?! Are You Crazy?!
Jonathan walked
to the pool
and spotted Brooke
sleeping naked on a
float over the water.
But when he touched her skin,
it made her go into the water.
to the pool
and spotted Brooke
sleeping naked on a
float over the water.
But when he touched her skin,
it made her go into the water.
#friendship
#summer
#water
#fiction
#sensual
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Messenger
The likes of no one draw near
Times of change, a growing fear
Upon the ocean my dreams all died
Ever since the full moon rises the tide
Watching the world precisely through my lens
Famine & Poverty will never end
Times of change, a growing fear
Upon the ocean my dreams all died
Ever since the full moon rises the tide
Watching the world precisely through my lens
Famine & Poverty will never end
#LifeStruggles
#pollution
#water
#rhyming
#poverty
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4 Comments
Riding The Wave Until It Crashes
Pieces of me.
Pieces of he,
evaporating.
We are not the same, things have changed.
All about me
never about he.
Unblinking, unthinking, rapidly sinking.
Falling into a sea of me
leaving he, far behind.
Pieces of he,
evaporating.
We are not the same, things have changed.
All about me
never about he.
Unblinking, unthinking, rapidly sinking.
Falling into a sea of me
leaving he, far behind.
#water
#unicorns
#apathy
104 reads
7 Comments
Urging Him To Come Over
Colin
walked to the pool
and saw Julia in a
blue bikini urging him to
come over and join her at that one spot.
walked to the pool
and saw Julia in a
blue bikini urging him to
come over and join her at that one spot.
#friendship
#summer
#water
#fiction
#dating
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That's It! I'm Calling The Police!
Kathryn was showering herself outside.
Then, she turned and spotted Jonathan videotaping.
She covered up and ran.
Then, she turned and spotted Jonathan videotaping.
She covered up and ran.
#anger
#home
#water
#fiction
#sensual
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she loved the river
Life is like the river, sometimes it sweeps you gently along and
sometimes the rapids come out of nowhere.”―Emma Smith
she loved the river,
the whispering, lisping river.
there skinny-dipped
under the curtain of its depths,
when no one was around.
fish popping out huge eyes,
attracted by her nippled elegance
and marvelled by her gently rippled dance.
she moved the river, ...
sometimes the rapids come out of nowhere.”―Emma Smith
she loved the river,
the whispering, lisping river.
there skinny-dipped
under the curtain of its depths,
when no one was around.
fish popping out huge eyes,
attracted by her nippled elegance
and marvelled by her gently rippled dance.
she moved the river, ...
#river
#water
#nature
#fate
#tragedy
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Mahogany
It's that quiet whisper
Allow me to esoterically caress the path to that enlightenment
In my company
Under the warmth of the Sun
The skies are our blanket of forevermore
Lay me down upon the soft illumination of a Blue Moon
Relax me in the octopus of your beautiful stardust
Here, there, mmm… I feel the slippery slopes of your love potion
Fusing
Softly siphoning the drops of my resistance in the cocoon of desires
I see the vastness of oceans in your eyes
I tasted the doctrine to the portal to your...
Allow me to esoterically caress the path to that enlightenment
In my company
Under the warmth of the Sun
The skies are our blanket of forevermore
Lay me down upon the soft illumination of a Blue Moon
Relax me in the octopus of your beautiful stardust
Here, there, mmm… I feel the slippery slopes of your love potion
Fusing
Softly siphoning the drops of my resistance in the cocoon of desires
I see the vastness of oceans in your eyes
I tasted the doctrine to the portal to your...
#sun
#water
#lover
#sensual
#seductive
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5 Comments
I Am The Ocean
because today I am water
because salt is more than wounds
because Pisces brands me on a Sunday
because gulls cackle like covens
because I’ve tattooed wild selkie skin
because I’ve never drowned on land
because submergence is risk
[I crave risk]
because I stuffed a message in a bottle
because wet paper feels like kelp
because I am holy, holier still
because God is humble at sundown
because I am late night thunder
because I am a lighthouse of warnings
because my skull is a clifftop suicide
because I am...
because salt is more than wounds
because Pisces brands me on a Sunday
because gulls cackle like covens
because I’ve tattooed wild selkie skin
because I’ve never drowned on land
because submergence is risk
[I crave risk]
because I stuffed a message in a bottle
because wet paper feels like kelp
because I am holy, holier still
because God is humble at sundown
because I am late night thunder
because I am a lighthouse of warnings
because my skull is a clifftop suicide
because I am...
#sea
#water
#confessional #SelfReflection
#confessional #SelfReflection
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17 Comments
The Ballad Of No-Man Pam
Let me start by saying
I liked her.
It was as simple as that.
There were billions of people in the world,
and I liked maybe five,
but she was one—
complex and undignified,
farted with meaning in her beat-up car,
as the fog rolled in
and you were never entirely sure
where menthol vape met air biscuit.
We swam once a week together,
poured ourselves into awkward Lycra
and willed each other towards water.
Shy of babysitters, her...
I liked her.
It was as simple as that.
There were billions of people in the world,
and I liked maybe five,
but she was one—
complex and undignified,
farted with meaning in her beat-up car,
as the fog rolled in
and you were never entirely sure
where menthol vape met air biscuit.
We swam once a week together,
poured ourselves into awkward Lycra
and willed each other towards water.
Shy of babysitters, her...
#motherhood
#friendship
#water
#disability
#Autism
198 reads
6 Comments
Coastal navigation
Gigantic sea of forgotten
silent sea that does not bring
your voice in the turbulent waves
sea of island eyes on fire
that doesn't imitate the sound of your voice
sea that limits the roof of your mouth
and swallow your voice mythologically
like a desert island lighthouse
human marks of desert sonar
quasar pulse and virus analysis
sea that salts the throat
sea that stretches the rope
chained from anchored boats
in the deep brown
from the...
silent sea that does not bring
your voice in the turbulent waves
sea of island eyes on fire
that doesn't imitate the sound of your voice
sea that limits the roof of your mouth
and swallow your voice mythologically
like a desert island lighthouse
human marks of desert sonar
quasar pulse and virus analysis
sea that salts the throat
sea that stretches the rope
chained from anchored boats
in the deep brown
from the...
#river
#sea
#beach
#water
#nature
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DU Poetry : Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique