Spiritual Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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spiritual seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Second Homecoming (Collab with summultima uma)
Clear revealing night
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity
For these eyes were never shut
Upon humanity feasting
with twilight eating eyes
He...
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity
For these eyes were never shut
Upon humanity feasting
with twilight eating eyes
He...
#collaboration
#love
#spiritual
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~second homecoming [collab with Vision_of_ insanity (Keith)]
https://youtu.be/6LD30ChPsSs?feature=shared
Clear revealing night
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity ...
Clear revealing night
Where light is broken twice
To welcome now the stranger
that has made him risen
He opened another door
Out of which he gazed in visions
Strangulated by his own premonition
Expectations and inner competitions
Upon the barriers feasting
with twilight eating eyes
Onward resisting
Demons be driven
Being human is an oath
So he stared into their eyes
A multidimensional plane took him
for all eternity ...
#collaboration
#LifeChangingMoment
#spiritual
#StreamOfConsciousness
#love
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4 Comments
rise
2/30
sigh to touch the stars in my mortal state
to feel the light caress my soul
entering into a place of hope
my thoughts fill with wonder
at the glory that is beheld
a passage is sometimes opened, and I rise
to greet the angels and the ambassadors of faith
sending salutations to the heavens
in a perpetual state of grace
when my body feels broken and cast aside
my soul lifts off, and in my Father's chambers I reside
recovering from the battering of the world that is
balm to my being is the...
sigh to touch the stars in my mortal state
to feel the light caress my soul
entering into a place of hope
my thoughts fill with wonder
at the glory that is beheld
a passage is sometimes opened, and I rise
to greet the angels and the ambassadors of faith
sending salutations to the heavens
in a perpetual state of grace
when my body feels broken and cast aside
my soul lifts off, and in my Father's chambers I reside
recovering from the battering of the world that is
balm to my being is the...
#love
#spiritual
47 reads
4 Comments
She Rises
With spirit and determination
Her lifeforce spread like fire
Every single feather - a blaze
A wingspan more than what anyone could ever measure
A rite of rebirth and regeneration
Baptized in flames
And us poets
With glassy eyes witness
How she rises
A reawakening from beyond this realm
How the words spoken
Can help heal those of us who are broken
As a testament
Leaving behind a legacy
58 Unique words
69 Total
Her lifeforce spread like fire
Every single feather - a blaze
A wingspan more than what anyone could ever measure
A rite of rebirth and regeneration
Baptized in flames
And us poets
With glassy eyes witness
How she rises
A reawakening from beyond this realm
How the words spoken
Can help heal those of us who are broken
As a testament
Leaving behind a legacy
58 Unique words
69 Total
#gratitude
#love
#rebirth
#spiritual
#WritingPoetry
51 reads
2 Comments
The Almighty
Because of sin
The death
Has gained ground
in human life
The earth
has become cursed
The wickedness
spread
The payment
of sin
is
death
Only
the sacrifice
can be
wiped out
The son of god took human flesh
came to the earth and died on the cross instead of me.
He died and resurrected the third day
He is the glorious king forever.
Jesus is the way, the truth and the life
Who believes in him
will live, even though they die
in...
The death
Has gained ground
in human life
The earth
has become cursed
The wickedness
spread
The payment
of sin
is
death
Only
the sacrifice
can be
wiped out
The son of god took human flesh
came to the earth and died on the cross instead of me.
He died and resurrected the third day
He is the glorious king forever.
Jesus is the way, the truth and the life
Who believes in him
will live, even though they die
in...
#Christian
#God
#religion
#spiritual
#TruthOfLife
62 reads
8 Comments
~i l l u m i n e
glinting tinkly silvery pearls
with the hardened sacred
‘rudraksha’.. in a darkened
matte beaded alternating..
a simplistic rustic jewellery
of this a ‘bhakti sanyasini’
hymning devoutional love
to you my Shiva..
this inner earthen red
a terracota dotted base, this
rooted ‘Kundalini’ Shakti
rises in an awakening..
a hissing divine serpent
in search of the Spirited
You..
half stern, yet yielding
to a malleably flexing..
in her...
with the hardened sacred
‘rudraksha’.. in a darkened
matte beaded alternating..
a simplistic rustic jewellery
of this a ‘bhakti sanyasini’
hymning devoutional love
to you my Shiva..
this inner earthen red
a terracota dotted base, this
rooted ‘Kundalini’ Shakti
rises in an awakening..
a hissing divine serpent
in search of the Spirited
You..
half stern, yet yielding
to a malleably flexing..
in her...
#love
#power
#spiritual #StreamOfConsciousness
#spiritual #StreamOfConsciousness
71 reads
3 Comments
caress
loneliness of soul I'm missing something
wandering spirit return to me
caress the feeling
sensing you are near
covet the art of forgetting
it hurts too much to remember
listless day give me invitation
to share in celebration with your earth-bound children
remorseful shadow cultivating sorrow within me
draw nearer so I will know the immortal
part me from my brothers and sisters
and let me forget what it is to be human
painful understanding I am terribly different
with thoughts of where will I go
cast...
wandering spirit return to me
caress the feeling
sensing you are near
covet the art of forgetting
it hurts too much to remember
listless day give me invitation
to share in celebration with your earth-bound children
remorseful shadow cultivating sorrow within me
draw nearer so I will know the immortal
part me from my brothers and sisters
and let me forget what it is to be human
painful understanding I am terribly different
with thoughts of where will I go
cast...
#metaphor
#spiritual
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0 Comments
Eid of Light and Longing
The crescent rose; the night stood still
A whispered joy; a sacred thrill
Though hunger knocked and pockets sighed
Still we prayed; still we tried
Eid has come; the air is bright
A morning bathed in golden light
Children race with laughter free
In clothes that dance like poetry
The markets roared; the butchers grinned
The scent of spice and meat within
Some feast with plenty; some with few
Yet hearts are full where faith is true
Oh Allah; let this joy remain
Let ease be poured where once was pain
Let every...
A whispered joy; a sacred thrill
Though hunger knocked and pockets sighed
Still we prayed; still we tried
Eid has come; the air is bright
A morning bathed in golden light
Children race with laughter free
In clothes that dance like poetry
The markets roared; the butchers grinned
The scent of spice and meat within
Some feast with plenty; some with few
Yet hearts are full where faith is true
Oh Allah; let this joy remain
Let ease be poured where once was pain
Let every...
#God
#happiness
#religion #spiritual
#religion #spiritual
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Initiation
Blood in:
so daft in my grave,
a fresh-cut flesh-nut
slips & falls
from proverbial vein-
my sleepaway cave
craved awake
on chords of light
through ancient rows
where I soak my cells
in a green serene
slurping gasoline
a break from those
unblinking
high beam
~eyes:
this all-seeing dream
that winked at our dogs
& wormed our wrists
into one happy hominid ...
#FreeVerse
#spiritual
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hiccup
gleaning from fact and fiction
with visions of past events
Sacred art is understanding
wealth of knowledge is what I crave
Putting away earthly things
The dark appears, and I look in
It is all around us
my star records are in the heavens
memories locked in code
lest they be discovered
Mortal touch is disavowed
divinity in the flesh is graced
within the numerals is the key
a bit of math, and the information comes pouring in
past happenings and the future in collision with time
There is no fate...
with visions of past events
Sacred art is understanding
wealth of knowledge is what I crave
Putting away earthly things
The dark appears, and I look in
It is all around us
my star records are in the heavens
memories locked in code
lest they be discovered
Mortal touch is disavowed
divinity in the flesh is graced
within the numerals is the key
a bit of math, and the information comes pouring in
past happenings and the future in collision with time
There is no fate...
#humankind
#spiritual
#stars
69 reads
4 Comments
~ The Chain (DUP)
Sign off full stop
The final stage
Those dreams and ink
Down the page
Curtain drops
On precious memories
Whispers of things past
Wondering what will come to pass
With great hope of meeting once again
To love and encourage the writing power
Foregoing rhymes to copy addresses
Hooking our words to create a chain
-Shall not break
For the bond is to deep to deny
Someday soon this world will realize
Unity through words, bringing us together
A few weeks remaining, through the never
..well, kill us with nulling...
The final stage
Those dreams and ink
Down the page
Curtain drops
On precious memories
Whispers of things past
Wondering what will come to pass
With great hope of meeting once again
To love and encourage the writing power
Foregoing rhymes to copy addresses
Hooking our words to create a chain
-Shall not break
For the bond is to deep to deny
Someday soon this world will realize
Unity through words, bringing us together
A few weeks remaining, through the never
..well, kill us with nulling...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#gratitude
#love #spiritual
#love #spiritual
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4 Comments
Stand Tall
The giraffe, guardian of my spark,
stands tall, silent sentinel.
Guardian spirit, infinite vision,
its calm presence my soul dwells.
Its gaze sweeps across the broad horizon,
as if seeing beyond the passing of time.
With graceful steps, she walks firmly,
bringing serenity that aligns me.
Our hearts beat in harmony,
gentle strength in eternal vigil.
Neck that touches stars and ground.
Unites the worlds in full communion.
I am happy to harbor such charm
and in its shadow I find my cloak.
My soul, which...
stands tall, silent sentinel.
Guardian spirit, infinite vision,
its calm presence my soul dwells.
Its gaze sweeps across the broad horizon,
as if seeing beyond the passing of time.
With graceful steps, she walks firmly,
bringing serenity that aligns me.
Our hearts beat in harmony,
gentle strength in eternal vigil.
Neck that touches stars and ground.
Unites the worlds in full communion.
I am happy to harbor such charm
and in its shadow I find my cloak.
My soul, which...
#beauty
#happiness
#love
#nature
#spiritual
70 reads
6 Comments
DU Poetry : Spiritual Seeking Honest Critique Poems