Senryu Seeking Honest Critique Poems

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SonderNinja
SonderNinja
BenjaminEC
Poem Published
27th Oct 2024 9:13pm

Body Horror

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Neck and shoulders groan    
when my back acts like a prick.    
     
Brain is an asshole.    
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
     
 
 #aging   #senryu 
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XiaoLong
XiaoLong
Poem Published
27th Oct 2024 1:23am

Artwork Sublime

She simply wonders
entire day lost in words
anticipation

Her man awaits her
her nervousness betters her
lost in expression

He greets her with passion
gropes her with an intention
teasing sensations

She embraces him
kissing him at the entrance
sharing her pulsations

In the lift they enter
moaning, she just surrenders
yet an alluring temptress

pantyless she was
blissfully wet without thought
her daddy she sought

mindlessly surrenders
she knew it’s a night...
 #haiku   #seductive 
 #senryu   #sensual 
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AspergerPoet56
AspergerPoet56
Poem Published
16th Oct 2024 8:16pm

Ethereal Longing The Touch ThatWasnt

saddest thing ever
your skin and mine ~ will never
touch ~ except in dreams
 #crush   #love 
 #senryu   #UnrequitedLove 
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Vision_of_insanity
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
14th Oct 2024 12:38pm

Broken Promises, Broken Mirrors

No reasoning here
You've demolished many hearts
Mirrors tell no lies
 #hurt   #lies 
 #manipulation   #senryu 
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Vision_of_insanity
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
14th Oct 2024 12:26pm

You'll Never Become Content

Never satisfied
So many live for excess
Gluttonous features
 #greed   #senryu 
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Vision_of_insanity
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
12th Oct 2024 11:08pm

Positivity Goes A Long Way

You say no one cares
They're sick of your self-pity
Negativity
 #depression   #inspirational   #LifeChangingMoment   #sadness   #senryu 
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Vision_of_insanity
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
12th Oct 2024 11:05pm

Another Crappy Meal

Eat all of your food
There's starving people out there
One taste, they'd soon starve
 #food   #funny 
 #satirical   #senryu 
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Vision_of_insanity
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
11th Oct 2024 7:50pm

No Whoopie For Me

I'm not in the mood
I have a headache, good night
You sound like my wife
 #girlfriend   #satirical   #senryu   #sex   #wife 
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Vision_of_insanity
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
11th Oct 2024 7:48pm

Governments Destroy Lives

Expatriation
Trail of Tears, ethnically cleansed
Abandoned future
 #corruption   #death   #hate   #politics   #senryu 
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AspergerPoet56
AspergerPoet56
Poem Published
11th Oct 2024 4:03pm

Yearning For Harmony

insatiable need
tangible urgency seeks
a beautiful rhythm
 #erotic   #love   #lust   #senryu   #sensual 
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Vision_of_insanity
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
2nd Oct 2024 11:12am

Truth in Poetry

Invoke is to live
Feelings get tangled with words
Restrict is to die
 #LifeAsAWriter   #senryu   #TruthOfLife 
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Vision_of_insanity
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
2nd Oct 2024 11:07am

Happy Wednesday

I am you today
Do you notice me inside?
Walls are caving in
 #identity   #senryu 
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