Romantic Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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romantic seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
What If
What If”
What if I never devour your ruby mouth again?
What if you get lost in the wilderness of evil sin?
If what, I ask myself do I recall you in my dreams?
Always the same one, couldn't hear my screams
Everyday begging that you would let me back in
But what if the sunset doesn't come to rise again?
What if you stop painting the sky for only my eyes?
What if you never decorated my heart by surprise?
And what if these days won't carry on for us forever?
What if your kisses aren't carried by a gusty...
What if I never devour your ruby mouth again?
What if you get lost in the wilderness of evil sin?
If what, I ask myself do I recall you in my dreams?
Always the same one, couldn't hear my screams
Everyday begging that you would let me back in
But what if the sunset doesn't come to rise again?
What if you stop painting the sky for only my eyes?
What if you never decorated my heart by surprise?
And what if these days won't carry on for us forever?
What if your kisses aren't carried by a gusty...
#bittersweet
#love
#romantic
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YOU ARE MINE
You are mine
I feel it
You are mine
Something tells me you're mine
May be not now, but eventually you will be mine
Nothing, and nothing at all will stop me, nothing will stop us
And when the stars finally align, I will hold you, my grip will be so fine tight.
I will hold you for ever, until my hands go weak and can't hold even a feather, until I have no pulse in my body.
That is my dream, that is my purpose, that will be life to me.
You are my life line, never fade until we exhaust even the deepest of any feelings we could ever have. That's my...
I feel it
You are mine
Something tells me you're mine
May be not now, but eventually you will be mine
Nothing, and nothing at all will stop me, nothing will stop us
And when the stars finally align, I will hold you, my grip will be so fine tight.
I will hold you for ever, until my hands go weak and can't hold even a feather, until I have no pulse in my body.
That is my dream, that is my purpose, that will be life to me.
You are my life line, never fade until we exhaust even the deepest of any feelings we could ever have. That's my...
#love
#relationships
#romantic
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I'LL TAKE YOU FOR A SPIN
I'll take you for a spin,
if it is not a sin
to ask this woman out
with me - it is my shout.
We can be " just be a pair"
who happen to car share.
In anonymity
you and I can just be,
away from gossipy
neighbours and family.
The time belongs to us,
not like being on bus.
No one will bat an eye
as they see us go by
to where I'm taking you.
You can choose what we do
at our destination.
Let loose imagination!
if it is not a sin
to ask this woman out
with me - it is my shout.
We can be " just be a pair"
who happen to car share.
In anonymity
you and I can just be,
away from gossipy
neighbours and family.
The time belongs to us,
not like being on bus.
No one will bat an eye
as they see us go by
to where I'm taking you.
You can choose what we do
at our destination.
Let loose imagination!
#dating
#love
#relationships #romantic
#relationships #romantic
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Where are we going?
Softened lines converge
in the haze, your lips meet mine,
blurred, yet crystal clear.
Whispers merge with light,
colors fade but hearts align
timeless in the kiss.
Within oblivion
a kiss blooms, defying void,
timeless whispers rise.
Stars dissolve to dust
yet your touch ignites the dark,
void bends, love remains.
Through the endless night
oblivion guards our spark
bound within the void.
Through the veiled embrace
world dissolves to just us...
Softened lines converge
in the haze, your lips meet mine,
blurred, yet crystal clear.
Whispers merge with light,
colors fade but hearts align
timeless in the kiss.
Within oblivion
a kiss blooms, defying void,
timeless whispers rise.
Stars dissolve to dust
yet your touch ignites the dark,
void bends, love remains.
Through the endless night
oblivion guards our spark
bound within the void.
Through the veiled embrace
world dissolves to just us...
#husband
#love
#passion
#relationships
#romantic
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Boomerang
You're the weapon of choice.
You're invisible in the rain.
My enemies better duck fast,
If they want to keep their brains.
You're supersonic.
You're a siren shrieking.
Fidget spinner in flight.
Intimidating and defeating.
All my enemies, they hide.
Because they think you're insane.
You put their minds out of focus.
Riding the jet streams.
All they see is the glare,
From an object unseen.
You hide in the air.
So fresh and clean.
You're the weapon I sharpen.
Working together as one. ...
You're invisible in the rain.
My enemies better duck fast,
If they want to keep their brains.
You're supersonic.
You're a siren shrieking.
Fidget spinner in flight.
Intimidating and defeating.
All my enemies, they hide.
Because they think you're insane.
You put their minds out of focus.
Riding the jet streams.
All they see is the glare,
From an object unseen.
You hide in the air.
So fresh and clean.
You're the weapon I sharpen.
Working together as one. ...
#romantic
#violence
#war
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Rewind
You can't say that I didn't try.
I gave you what I could.
I even let you have my mind.
Nights I prayed,
And days I use to fantasize.
I was mesmerized how I reflected in your eyes.
Plus I hate to mention,
All the little dirty things you would do for me.
Flowers just because.
Reminiscing on what once was.
Holding hands when we bent the block.
Late night smoke sessions.
And early morning pillow talks.
Sexing you above the sheets.
While the radio played slow beats.
I'd like to press rewind,
Just to find what we lost...
I gave you what I could.
I even let you have my mind.
Nights I prayed,
And days I use to fantasize.
I was mesmerized how I reflected in your eyes.
Plus I hate to mention,
All the little dirty things you would do for me.
Flowers just because.
Reminiscing on what once was.
Holding hands when we bent the block.
Late night smoke sessions.
And early morning pillow talks.
Sexing you above the sheets.
While the radio played slow beats.
I'd like to press rewind,
Just to find what we lost...
#breakup
#ILoveYou
#love
#relationships
#romantic
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Pale Evenings Glow
Words spoken over wine in candlelight
On a pale moonlit night
What could be better?
Such are the desires and pleasures of life
Heard in the evening crooner’s voice
Witnessed in the twilight
By the night owl’s steady gaze
Together in unison
As the stars blaze
Burning till the wax melts
And the wick flickers and fades
On a pale moonlit night
What could be better?
Such are the desires and pleasures of life
Heard in the evening crooner’s voice
Witnessed in the twilight
By the night owl’s steady gaze
Together in unison
As the stars blaze
Burning till the wax melts
And the wick flickers and fades
#love
#moon
#night #romantic
#night #romantic
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Her
Skin as white as snow,
eyes with an uncanny glow,
hair made out of fresh silk,
oh! heaven may I have seen;
in her, love was like a mothers womb,
and pain was like when a fire blooms,
no garment could ever fit her beauty,
even the moon was jealous of her!!
with a heart that was only pure,
as the sun in the sky,
her smile shines bright,
got paralyzed by only her sight,
if that was love I wasn't sure,
lungs pumping with a sweet pain,
if it were, our love would have left a stain,
breath with a burning Passion,
but now...
eyes with an uncanny glow,
hair made out of fresh silk,
oh! heaven may I have seen;
in her, love was like a mothers womb,
and pain was like when a fire blooms,
no garment could ever fit her beauty,
even the moon was jealous of her!!
with a heart that was only pure,
as the sun in the sky,
her smile shines bright,
got paralyzed by only her sight,
if that was love I wasn't sure,
lungs pumping with a sweet pain,
if it were, our love would have left a stain,
breath with a burning Passion,
but now...
#beauty
#crush
#love #romantic
#love #romantic
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Never mine
As I take pen in hand
To write but one final verse
I stop to read your text
Examine your photos
The love begins to poor
From my eyes as rain
My hands begin to shake
Knowing this is but a farewell
It becomes hard to breathe
Catching my breath
Becoming impossible to breathe
Empty time will fill the void
As you slip thru my hands
Putting down the pen
Unable to write
I see now that was once unclear
You were never mine
To have and to hold
Till death do us part
It was but a dream
Made by the...
To write but one final verse
I stop to read your text
Examine your photos
The love begins to poor
From my eyes as rain
My hands begin to shake
Knowing this is but a farewell
It becomes hard to breathe
Catching my breath
Becoming impossible to breathe
Empty time will fill the void
As you slip thru my hands
Putting down the pen
Unable to write
I see now that was once unclear
You were never mine
To have and to hold
Till death do us part
It was but a dream
Made by the...
#girlfriend
#ILoveYou
#romantic
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What Songbird Sings The Night To Wake
Its late now
I drowse between imaginings
and dreams
You sleep or I'd call
...(I wonder if you're asleep [or thinking of me the same])
*
The quiet whiles
In the wee, small hours
when night gives way to flights of dreams
I lay adrift in imaginings
Yes, tonight (my love)
Your linger wraps my thoughts
Unbidden
At times the heart will have its way
As ordinary thoughts find their lustre
When moments touch your grace
What speaks the deep of night
Save missing you
I'm caught in the spell...
I drowse between imaginings
and dreams
You sleep or I'd call
...(I wonder if you're asleep [or thinking of me the same])
*
The quiet whiles
In the wee, small hours
when night gives way to flights of dreams
I lay adrift in imaginings
Yes, tonight (my love)
Your linger wraps my thoughts
Unbidden
At times the heart will have its way
As ordinary thoughts find their lustre
When moments touch your grace
What speaks the deep of night
Save missing you
I'm caught in the spell...
#FallingInLove
#love
#romantic
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Alluring
a face hidden by a mobile phone mask,
the February moon that came to forge,
knowing her traits, an adventurous task,
an alluring woman so cool, a chill-out lodge.
As she walks in, a scent of fragrant ambrosia,
almost an encounter with an alluring beauty from Polynesia,
I admired her in awe, yet I was looking away after the first glance,
sense of an alluring nature, yet the innocence left me in trance,
I embraced her elegance tightly in my arms,
she’s an alluring power that glows,
such deep eyes my mind just blows, ...
the February moon that came to forge,
knowing her traits, an adventurous task,
an alluring woman so cool, a chill-out lodge.
As she walks in, a scent of fragrant ambrosia,
almost an encounter with an alluring beauty from Polynesia,
I admired her in awe, yet I was looking away after the first glance,
sense of an alluring nature, yet the innocence left me in trance,
I embraced her elegance tightly in my arms,
she’s an alluring power that glows,
such deep eyes my mind just blows, ...
#dreams
#passion
#romantic #sexy
#romantic #sexy
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almost forgotten languages on the surface of a stone
I spent the night with my fingers buried
on some keys, damn typewriter,
they don't speak my language.
I have an old alphabet and you probably
never seen a carrier pigeon...
I struggle with these meaningless words,
out of context, code words
that try to signify love, desire, oblivion.
What about the numbers?
Ah, those malevolent signifiers of time,
of space and how many fingers we have then,
on each hand, how many times they touch
every year of your time, every letter of your name...
Each phase of the moon.
...
on some keys, damn typewriter,
they don't speak my language.
I have an old alphabet and you probably
never seen a carrier pigeon...
I struggle with these meaningless words,
out of context, code words
that try to signify love, desire, oblivion.
What about the numbers?
Ah, those malevolent signifiers of time,
of space and how many fingers we have then,
on each hand, how many times they touch
every year of your time, every letter of your name...
Each phase of the moon.
...
#love
#passion
#PowerOfWords
#redemption
#romantic
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