Romantic Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#romantic
romantic seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Ah do
Yes, I’d love to tell you that I do
And I'd love to make you my boo; without further ado
Through fire and ice; we’ll see it through
A love reborn; both bold and new
Your touch ignites like morning’s hue
A blaze of passion; fierce and due.
No shadow falls where your light grew
The world revolves; yet rests on you.
With every step; my soul imbues
A rhythm synced; to love’s own cues.
The storms may rise; the winds may bruise
But I stand firm; I cannot lose.
Your voice; a symphony that woos
A melody...
And I'd love to make you my boo; without further ado
Through fire and ice; we’ll see it through
A love reborn; both bold and new
Your touch ignites like morning’s hue
A blaze of passion; fierce and due.
No shadow falls where your light grew
The world revolves; yet rests on you.
With every step; my soul imbues
A rhythm synced; to love’s own cues.
The storms may rise; the winds may bruise
But I stand firm; I cannot lose.
Your voice; a symphony that woos
A melody...
#beauty
#love
#romantic #UnrequitedLove
#romantic #UnrequitedLove
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Folded Clothes
I picture such a vivid future for us,
my dear.
A place of my own,
made into our own.
I can see a whole life,
laid out on my bed.
It is neat and folded,
like the outfit I plan to wear tomorrow.
I want to take you with me.
I want to learn you.
I want to lay with you.
I want to share my life with you.
It scares me,
something so perfect.
Because nothing perfect,
ever lasts.
I want this to last.
I need it too.
I am not so strong.
I don't think I could try again.
The...
my dear.
A place of my own,
made into our own.
I can see a whole life,
laid out on my bed.
It is neat and folded,
like the outfit I plan to wear tomorrow.
I want to take you with me.
I want to learn you.
I want to lay with you.
I want to share my life with you.
It scares me,
something so perfect.
Because nothing perfect,
ever lasts.
I want this to last.
I need it too.
I am not so strong.
I don't think I could try again.
The...
#FallingInLove
#love
#lover
#relationships
#romantic
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The Man
I miss his face his hands on my body his eyes I miss the man his soul his his hugs his kisses I miss the dreams I had in his arms.. I run I hide I love him beyond his word I crave him in more ways then one my mind pushes me to the vulnerable side of being a women to let him lead.. to love me beyond my eyes pass my exterior. I think of him all day all night I love him can’t get him out my system soul bound. His cravenness for me his personality is never given up on his patience to want me when I’m unsure of myself. The little things flowers.. calls.. check ins never forget me. Loving me I miss...
#ILoveYou
#love
#relationships
#romantic
#support
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A Romantic..
want and romance
and then
the opening
the walkway looking west
a small cutaway
I held you close
staring into your laser eyes
holding you tight
tenderness spinning out of control
a new control emerged
one you knew was buried
deep in my brow
matching you stare for stare
electrons and gamma rays
cross stimulation
I took your smile
and marked it
with my mine
taking you
under my wing
protecting you
feeding you
giving you...
and then
the opening
the walkway looking west
a small cutaway
I held you close
staring into your laser eyes
holding you tight
tenderness spinning out of control
a new control emerged
one you knew was buried
deep in my brow
matching you stare for stare
electrons and gamma rays
cross stimulation
I took your smile
and marked it
with my mine
taking you
under my wing
protecting you
feeding you
giving you...
#love
#romantic
#Romanticism
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Full Moon Silverlight
The pearl full moon floats in a star pricked sea,
casting upon the ocean's swell
a crystal chipped path
ripples of rocky reflected light
born of the sun that gilds my beloved’s face
in the land where she resides,
far beyond my sunset.
I cannot, in this dusty reflection,
chase her hot shadow,
but silverlight blends
with my eventide shade
and I dance on the shoreline,
stepping with the pearled ribbons
that lace and purl the briny ruffles.
The sea breeze,
another finger of the zephyr’s hand
that twines...
casting upon the ocean's swell
a crystal chipped path
ripples of rocky reflected light
born of the sun that gilds my beloved’s face
in the land where she resides,
far beyond my sunset.
I cannot, in this dusty reflection,
chase her hot shadow,
but silverlight blends
with my eventide shade
and I dance on the shoreline,
stepping with the pearled ribbons
that lace and purl the briny ruffles.
The sea breeze,
another finger of the zephyr’s hand
that twines...
#ForbiddenLove
#romantic
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David Lewis and the concept of bearded men
The concept
of us in all time
and in no time
at the same time
a bitch-baby concept
to grasp.
Because the multiverse theory
says there are
infinite worlds,
and we exist
in some form
in each
So I assume rather
arrogantly
that a version of
Me
You
Us
wafts through all
space and time
in a philosophical
reduction
that we call:
quantitative parsimony
Each thing is a thing. ...
of us in all time
and in no time
at the same time
a bitch-baby concept
to grasp.
Because the multiverse theory
says there are
infinite worlds,
and we exist
in some form
in each
So I assume rather
arrogantly
that a version of
Me
You
Us
wafts through all
space and time
in a philosophical
reduction
that we call:
quantitative parsimony
Each thing is a thing. ...
#love
#lover
#passion
#philosophical
#romantic
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"Skating On Porcelain"
Skating On Porcelain”
Sometimes I like the way
the carpeting feels on bare feet.
Other times I walk barefoot in the parking lot
not caring if I get cut.
Outside, at night, the moon has a ring
and the constellations fight for ultimate supremacy.
To the right, a flickering light,
most likely a candle.
The flame dancing around.
It makes me think of you.
My flame.
Now I skate on porcelain anymore with you
looking down on me.
You and that delicious smile.
I circle 'round and 'round and...
Sometimes I like the way
the carpeting feels on bare feet.
Other times I walk barefoot in the parking lot
not caring if I get cut.
Outside, at night, the moon has a ring
and the constellations fight for ultimate supremacy.
To the right, a flickering light,
most likely a candle.
The flame dancing around.
It makes me think of you.
My flame.
Now I skate on porcelain anymore with you
looking down on me.
You and that delicious smile.
I circle 'round and 'round and...
#heartbroken
#love
#romantic
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Great Catch! (Lapping it up)
What a great catch,
As you fall into my lap!
It could be a trap,
But I ain't takin' that!
You're a great match,
A really amazing snatch.
Forget about that nap,
Till I've read you like a map!
We're on the right track,
Takin' up the slack,
Never goin' back -
Filling that sweet crack!
As you fall into my lap!
It could be a trap,
But I ain't takin' that!
You're a great match,
A really amazing snatch.
Forget about that nap,
Till I've read you like a map!
We're on the right track,
Takin' up the slack,
Never goin' back -
Filling that sweet crack!
#admiration
#lust
#seductive
#temptation
#romantic
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~(y)our timeless traction & tactilities :: in process
if, “touch has a memory”
then, your musky trailing arrival
driving me in a dense haziness
of a nimbus stormy craziness.. in
an impregnating petrichor
pheromonal spree
from
your gentle touching grounds..
I breathe erratically arrhythmic..
as if a wholly deathly choking, a
lumping painpleasure struggle
you stuff me in… in
your arrowing magnetic eye
bows.. that dents & shrinks
my shiversweating contours
.. craving your metallic touch
but then, the foreplaying ...
then, your musky trailing arrival
driving me in a dense haziness
of a nimbus stormy craziness.. in
an impregnating petrichor
pheromonal spree
from
your gentle touching grounds..
I breathe erratically arrhythmic..
as if a wholly deathly choking, a
lumping painpleasure struggle
you stuff me in… in
your arrowing magnetic eye
bows.. that dents & shrinks
my shiversweating contours
.. craving your metallic touch
but then, the foreplaying ...
#love
#romantic
#sensual
#spiritual
#StreamOfConsciousness
209 reads
9 Comments
~ (y)our timeless traction & tactilities:: in essence
viz: touch
#love
#romantic
#sensual #spiritual
#sensual #spiritual
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3 Comments
Vibe Check
Will you pass the vibe check?
Are you the Blue Moon song—classic yet distinct.
Remember, I like plants, not flowers.
I’ll connect to you on a deeper plane, more than anyone has.
Two planets circling, locked in orbit.
Slide close to me, and I'll slide to you.
Don’t forget to open my door when I step out of the car;
I love a man who proves chivalry isn’t dead.
I want a teacher and a student.
I’ll show you my darkness
If you reveal what truly haunts you.
Forever dancing, side by side,
Traveling partners, in...
Are you the Blue Moon song—classic yet distinct.
Remember, I like plants, not flowers.
I’ll connect to you on a deeper plane, more than anyone has.
Two planets circling, locked in orbit.
Slide close to me, and I'll slide to you.
Don’t forget to open my door when I step out of the car;
I love a man who proves chivalry isn’t dead.
I want a teacher and a student.
I’ll show you my darkness
If you reveal what truly haunts you.
Forever dancing, side by side,
Traveling partners, in...
#FallingInLove
#ILoveYou
#love
#relationships
#romantic
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Still Waiting To Kiss You!
#crush
#romantic
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