Rhyming Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#rhyming
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
3rd Apr 2025 8:11pm
3rd Apr 2025 8:11pm
I Love People
Who the fuck are you
Trying to fuck with?
Since you‘re nothing
But a fuckwit
I don‘t wanna be your friend
I want to put your life to an end
The more I know
The more it‘s enough
I gotta say
People piss me off
The more I know
The more it‘s enough
I gotta be honest with you
You really piss me the fuck off!
From the cradle
To the cave
You‘re such a piece of trash
Degenerate, every day!
Live and let die
I‘d rather choose the latter
The sooner you‘re dead
My heart...
Trying to fuck with?
Since you‘re nothing
But a fuckwit
I don‘t wanna be your friend
I want to put your life to an end
The more I know
The more it‘s enough
I gotta say
People piss me off
The more I know
The more it‘s enough
I gotta be honest with you
You really piss me the fuck off!
From the cradle
To the cave
You‘re such a piece of trash
Degenerate, every day!
Live and let die
I‘d rather choose the latter
The sooner you‘re dead
My heart...
#anger
#hate
#LifeStruggles
#rhyming
#TruthOfLife
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Ashtal_Leb_Azure
Poem Published
3rd Apr 2025 11:28am
3rd Apr 2025 11:28am
Carol of the Creator
(Hush, hush—do not call,)
(Hush, hush—do not fall,)
(Still your breath, still your step,)
(Lest they wake and take you yet.)
They who carved the sky from ink,
Set the sun and stars to sink,
Spun the thread and wove the lines,
Wrote the names and shaped the words.
(Hush, hush—do not gaze,)
(Hush, hush—shun their praise,)
(Turn your eyes, bow your head,)
(Tread too close, you’ll join the dead.)
Words unspoken, worlds unseen,
Maps erased and hands wiped clean,
They who build and they who rend,
Minds...
(Hush, hush—do not fall,)
(Still your breath, still your step,)
(Lest they wake and take you yet.)
They who carved the sky from ink,
Set the sun and stars to sink,
Spun the thread and wove the lines,
Wrote the names and shaped the words.
(Hush, hush—do not gaze,)
(Hush, hush—shun their praise,)
(Turn your eyes, bow your head,)
(Tread too close, you’ll join the dead.)
Words unspoken, worlds unseen,
Maps erased and hands wiped clean,
They who build and they who rend,
Minds...
#death
#God
#horror
#narrative
#rhyming
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Josh
Joshua Bond
Joshua Bond
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 7:06pm
2nd Apr 2025 7:06pm
Terzanelle Nr.07 — The Keeper
When the world stopped turning it was three o’ clock
the animals slept in an odd dozing state
and everything froze in the grip of pure shock
the sea hushed to silence, as flat as a plate
the sun ceased its flaring, embarrassed and hot
the animals slept in an odd dozing state.
They looked at each other to grasp what they’d lost …
When man and woman lived naked and free
the sun ceased its flaring, expressive and hot
but vultures of jealousy circled the tree
dealt their intent on destroying creation
where woman...
the animals slept in an odd dozing state
and everything froze in the grip of pure shock
the sea hushed to silence, as flat as a plate
the sun ceased its flaring, embarrassed and hot
the animals slept in an odd dozing state.
They looked at each other to grasp what they’d lost …
When man and woman lived naked and free
the sun ceased its flaring, expressive and hot
but vultures of jealousy circled the tree
dealt their intent on destroying creation
where woman...
#astronomy
#rhyming
#TimeHeals
75 reads
1 Comment
EleazarSwan
Poem Published
29th Mar 2025 2:24am
29th Mar 2025 2:24am
These last few days
These last few days I’ve pondered more
Than anytime in life before
The one who is, and one to be
So near, as nearness follows me
The worst offender, by and large
Is from the freedom that we charge
To shackle us in debtor’s jail
As men bid summer’s stormy gale
A wish for more, more home & power
When down the street the homeless cower
A wish to travel by sea and star
While wars rage on in lands afar
A hope for a raise, a promotion or two
While suff’ring citizens make soup with glue
And you—
Aye, you—...
Than anytime in life before
The one who is, and one to be
So near, as nearness follows me
The worst offender, by and large
Is from the freedom that we charge
To shackle us in debtor’s jail
As men bid summer’s stormy gale
A wish for more, more home & power
When down the street the homeless cower
A wish to travel by sea and star
While wars rage on in lands afar
A hope for a raise, a promotion or two
While suff’ring citizens make soup with glue
And you—
Aye, you—...
#rhyming
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
28th Mar 2025 9:39pm
28th Mar 2025 9:39pm
The Upbringing
Your parents have a problem and you live in constant pain
Your atmosphere is darkness as you begin to go insane
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
You hear the words of wisdom as you practice what they tell
You follow your parents teachings, as they threaten you to hell
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
My advice to you, is to follow what's in your heart
For if you don't, you'll be finished before you ever start
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
Your atmosphere is darkness as you begin to go insane
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
You hear the words of wisdom as you practice what they tell
You follow your parents teachings, as they threaten you to hell
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
My advice to you, is to follow what's in your heart
For if you don't, you'll be finished before you ever start
And the way you're going, you'll turn out the same
#LifeStruggles
#lyrics
#parent
#religion
#rhyming
112 reads
8 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
26th Mar 2025 9:59am
26th Mar 2025 9:59am
An Odd Tale
Some monsters have always said
There are parents under my bed
One of their names is Jeb
The other goes by Meg
There are parents under my bed
They won’t eat me as long as their fed
There are parents under my bed
Their complexions are lumpy & red
There are parents under my bed
My dreams are filled with dread
There are parents under my bed
I’d like to shoot them with lead
There are parents under my bed
Must act now before I wind up dead
There are parents under my bed
They say this illusion is in my head
There are...
There are parents under my bed
One of their names is Jeb
The other goes by Meg
There are parents under my bed
They won’t eat me as long as their fed
There are parents under my bed
Their complexions are lumpy & red
There are parents under my bed
My dreams are filled with dread
There are parents under my bed
I’d like to shoot them with lead
There are parents under my bed
Must act now before I wind up dead
There are parents under my bed
They say this illusion is in my head
There are...
#children
#MentalHealth
#monsters
#rhyming
#ShortStory
69 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
22nd Mar 2025 10:13am
22nd Mar 2025 10:13am
A Toxic Drowning
They were married for a very long time
Minimal love for one another
Both daydreamed about the perfect crime.
A poor swimmer she was at best
He thought of submerging her deep
An expeditious agonizing death.
He enjoyed her cooking and anything she made
She thought of poisoning his food
Wild Mushrooms, drain cleaners or a can of raid.
One day they went walking on the beach
The ocean was violent
Waves crashing within an arms reach
She made a picnic basket full of joy
Pie, sandwiches and soda ...
Minimal love for one another
Both daydreamed about the perfect crime.
A poor swimmer she was at best
He thought of submerging her deep
An expeditious agonizing death.
He enjoyed her cooking and anything she made
She thought of poisoning his food
Wild Mushrooms, drain cleaners or a can of raid.
One day they went walking on the beach
The ocean was violent
Waves crashing within an arms reach
She made a picnic basket full of joy
Pie, sandwiches and soda ...
#relationships
#rhyming
#tragedy
110 reads
8 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
20th Mar 2025 7:26pm
20th Mar 2025 7:26pm
Failing in life
Their cars were motionless
Their home was drab
Their intensity was addiction
They once tried going to rehab
They failed miserably
Handling it with no care
Their appearance was frightful
Entering their house was extremely rare
Their sex was frustrating
Both were failing
He was dry & she was limp
Their health was ailing
Reality was a nightmare
Death surrounds their vision
The Grim Reaper is watching
Motionless people can create a collision
Their home was drab
Their intensity was addiction
They once tried going to rehab
They failed miserably
Handling it with no care
Their appearance was frightful
Entering their house was extremely rare
Their sex was frustrating
Both were failing
He was dry & she was limp
Their health was ailing
Reality was a nightmare
Death surrounds their vision
The Grim Reaper is watching
Motionless people can create a collision
#addiction
#dark
#death
#emptiness
#rhyming
162 reads
10 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
16th Mar 2025 11:59am
16th Mar 2025 11:59am
Internal Incarceration
I hold myself in disdain
I don't give a fuck
I've got nothing to hide
No one understands
A part of me has died
Utopia rejected on Earth that's hell
My mind is lonely, no different from a cell
My body is sick, which I can't leave behind
What will it take to medicate the mind
Exit the womb to a tomb
Can't adjust
Alone in my room
Depend on my departed friend
Not remembering
How long has it been
If there's one thing I've learned
Comfort cannot be found
Nowhere to grow
Nobody's fault but mine ...
I don't give a fuck
I've got nothing to hide
No one understands
A part of me has died
Utopia rejected on Earth that's hell
My mind is lonely, no different from a cell
My body is sick, which I can't leave behind
What will it take to medicate the mind
Exit the womb to a tomb
Can't adjust
Alone in my room
Depend on my departed friend
Not remembering
How long has it been
If there's one thing I've learned
Comfort cannot be found
Nowhere to grow
Nobody's fault but mine ...
#loneliness
#motivational
#rhyming
#sadness
#TruthOfLife
97 reads
12 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
15th Mar 2025 11:05am
15th Mar 2025 11:05am
A Cryptic Illness
Bring your beauty onto me
Mysterious and distant
I can only imagine to see
We discovered our magic together
Mileage should never stop our love
Your valued more then any buried treasure
One day i will arrive, when you least suspect
Surprise!! Surprise!!
Let's make love, take off your dress
Your looks and appeal are stunning to my eyes
Your body, so beautifully developed
So sexy honey, I tell no lies
Days & weeks go by
Personality isn't what I like
A few more days, I'm saying goodbye
She...
Mysterious and distant
I can only imagine to see
We discovered our magic together
Mileage should never stop our love
Your valued more then any buried treasure
One day i will arrive, when you least suspect
Surprise!! Surprise!!
Let's make love, take off your dress
Your looks and appeal are stunning to my eyes
Your body, so beautifully developed
So sexy honey, I tell no lies
Days & weeks go by
Personality isn't what I like
A few more days, I'm saying goodbye
She...
#FallingInLove
#revenge
#rhyming
#ShortStory
#support
104 reads
10 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
11th Mar 2025 3:10pm
11th Mar 2025 3:10pm
As a muse...
I'd softly whisper in the poet's ear:
"Let your words flow like rivers
of dreams,
for within you lies the magic
to shape worlds.
Embrace the emotions
that stir your soul
and paint them with the colors
of your heart.
Each line you craft is a step
towards eternity,
where your voice will echo forever.
Trust in your gift,
for your rhymes hold the power
to transcend time
and touch the hearts."
"Let your words flow like rivers
of dreams,
for within you lies the magic
to shape worlds.
Embrace the emotions
that stir your soul
and paint them with the colors
of your heart.
Each line you craft is a step
towards eternity,
where your voice will echo forever.
Trust in your gift,
for your rhymes hold the power
to transcend time
and touch the hearts."
#inspirational
#mirror
#rhyming
#spiritual
#WritingPoetry
134 reads
10 Comments
cheesa
Poem Published
9th Mar 2025 9:04pm
9th Mar 2025 9:04pm
She comes in waves
She comes in waves crashes over me
She's the ocean I'm lost at sea
She on the breeze and the air
Like a tornado everywhere
She comes with passion a burning fire
Lighting up a hidden desire
She comes so loud without a sound
She comes in waves I almost drown
She's the ocean I'm lost at sea
She on the breeze and the air
Like a tornado everywhere
She comes with passion a burning fire
Lighting up a hidden desire
She comes so loud without a sound
She comes in waves I almost drown
#rhyming
#symbolism
#uplifting
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