Rhyming Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#rhyming
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
20th Mar 2025 7:26pm
20th Mar 2025 7:26pm
Failing in life
Their cars were motionless
Their home was drab
Their intensity was addiction
They once tried going to rehab
They failed miserably
Handling it with no care
Their appearance was frightful
Entering their house was extremely rare
Their sex was frustrating
Both were failing
He was dry & she was limp
Their health was ailing
Reality was a nightmare
Death surrounds their vision
The Grim Reaper is watching
Motionless people can create a collision
Their home was drab
Their intensity was addiction
They once tried going to rehab
They failed miserably
Handling it with no care
Their appearance was frightful
Entering their house was extremely rare
Their sex was frustrating
Both were failing
He was dry & she was limp
Their health was ailing
Reality was a nightmare
Death surrounds their vision
The Grim Reaper is watching
Motionless people can create a collision
#addiction
#dark
#death
#emptiness
#rhyming
135 reads
10 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
16th Mar 2025 11:59am
16th Mar 2025 11:59am
Internal Incarceration
I hold myself in disdain
I don't give a fuck
I've got nothing to hide
No one understands
A part of me has died
Utopia rejected on Earth that's hell
My mind is lonely, no different from a cell
My body is sick, which I can't leave behind
What will it take to medicate the mind
Exit the womb to a tomb
Can't adjust
Alone in my room
Depend on my departed friend
Not remembering
How long has it been
If there's one thing I've learned
Comfort cannot be found
Nowhere to grow
Nobody's fault but mine ...
I don't give a fuck
I've got nothing to hide
No one understands
A part of me has died
Utopia rejected on Earth that's hell
My mind is lonely, no different from a cell
My body is sick, which I can't leave behind
What will it take to medicate the mind
Exit the womb to a tomb
Can't adjust
Alone in my room
Depend on my departed friend
Not remembering
How long has it been
If there's one thing I've learned
Comfort cannot be found
Nowhere to grow
Nobody's fault but mine ...
#loneliness
#motivational
#rhyming
#sadness
#TruthOfLife
79 reads
12 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
15th Mar 2025 11:05am
15th Mar 2025 11:05am
A Cryptic Illness
Bring your beauty onto me
Mysterious and distant
I can only imagine to see
We discovered our magic together
Mileage should never stop our love
Your valued more then any buried treasure
One day i will arrive, when you least suspect
Surprise!! Surprise!!
Let's make love, take off your dress
Your looks and appeal are stunning to my eyes
Your body, so beautifully developed
So sexy honey, I tell no lies
Days & weeks go by
Personality isn't what I like
A few more days, I'm saying goodbye
She...
Mysterious and distant
I can only imagine to see
We discovered our magic together
Mileage should never stop our love
Your valued more then any buried treasure
One day i will arrive, when you least suspect
Surprise!! Surprise!!
Let's make love, take off your dress
Your looks and appeal are stunning to my eyes
Your body, so beautifully developed
So sexy honey, I tell no lies
Days & weeks go by
Personality isn't what I like
A few more days, I'm saying goodbye
She...
#FallingInLove
#revenge
#rhyming
#ShortStory
#support
87 reads
10 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
11th Mar 2025 3:10pm
11th Mar 2025 3:10pm
As a muse...
I'd softly whisper in the poet's ear:
"Let your words flow like rivers
of dreams,
for within you lies the magic
to shape worlds.
Embrace the emotions
that stir your soul
and paint them with the colors
of your heart.
Each line you craft is a step
towards eternity,
where your voice will echo forever.
Trust in your gift,
for your rhymes hold the power
to transcend time
and touch the hearts."
"Let your words flow like rivers
of dreams,
for within you lies the magic
to shape worlds.
Embrace the emotions
that stir your soul
and paint them with the colors
of your heart.
Each line you craft is a step
towards eternity,
where your voice will echo forever.
Trust in your gift,
for your rhymes hold the power
to transcend time
and touch the hearts."
#inspirational
#mirror
#rhyming
#spiritual
#WritingPoetry
116 reads
10 Comments
cheesa
Poem Published
9th Mar 2025 9:04pm
9th Mar 2025 9:04pm
She comes in waves
She comes in waves crashes over me
She's the ocean I'm lost at sea
She on the breeze and the air
Like a tornado everywhere
She comes with passion a burning fire
Lighting up a hidden desire
She comes so loud without a sound
She comes in waves I almost drown
She's the ocean I'm lost at sea
She on the breeze and the air
Like a tornado everywhere
She comes with passion a burning fire
Lighting up a hidden desire
She comes so loud without a sound
She comes in waves I almost drown
#rhyming
#symbolism
#uplifting
79 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
9th Mar 2025 5:26pm
9th Mar 2025 5:26pm
Naked Lunch
William S. Burroughs was possessed by genius
founding member of the Beat Generation
1st novel was Junkie
hipster subculture sweeping the nation
After WWII morphine was his choice drug
Greenwich Village heroin was sold
became an addict for the rest of his life
shooting up till he was 83 years old
In 1951 drunk in Mexico City
time for the "William Tell Act"
highball glass on his wife's head
gun shot murder, that's a fact
Naked Lunch was his biggest seller
a series of loosely connected vignettes ...
founding member of the Beat Generation
1st novel was Junkie
hipster subculture sweeping the nation
After WWII morphine was his choice drug
Greenwich Village heroin was sold
became an addict for the rest of his life
shooting up till he was 83 years old
In 1951 drunk in Mexico City
time for the "William Tell Act"
highball glass on his wife's head
gun shot murder, that's a fact
Naked Lunch was his biggest seller
a series of loosely connected vignettes ...
#nonfiction
#PopCulture
#rhyming
91 reads
7 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
8th Mar 2025 12:18pm
8th Mar 2025 12:18pm
Spring is near
Winter suddenly hides away
waterfalls once frozen
flowing downward into the bay
Lonely sidewalks decay, after before
spring is arriving soon
the end of the bridge lies an open door
Broken dreams picked up where they last fell
the emotional wasteland sleeps again
my love through words, encouraged to tell
waterfalls once frozen
flowing downward into the bay
Lonely sidewalks decay, after before
spring is arriving soon
the end of the bridge lies an open door
Broken dreams picked up where they last fell
the emotional wasteland sleeps again
my love through words, encouraged to tell
#hope
#nature
#rhyming
#spring
#uplifting
112 reads
18 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
5th Mar 2025 2:27pm
5th Mar 2025 2:27pm
Have a f**ked up righteous day!
#CallToAction
#LifeChangingMoment
#philosophical
#rhyming
#TruthOfLife
85 reads
13 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
5th Mar 2025 1:04am
5th Mar 2025 1:04am
The Caboose
She was on her way to the quickie mart
Picking up grape soda and some pop tarts
Would you believe she has no money
Figures, she works for a pimp named Sunny
She takes her earnings and blows it all away
Another Friday night, time to get laid
Two weeks later, Sunny is getting fed up
Time is money, she's taking a piss in a cup
Sick and tired of all the abuse
Her ass is referred to as "The Caboose"
How will she know when the time is right
Keep her in the dark, she's a fugly sight
Hopping on the train, leaving far...
Picking up grape soda and some pop tarts
Would you believe she has no money
Figures, she works for a pimp named Sunny
She takes her earnings and blows it all away
Another Friday night, time to get laid
Two weeks later, Sunny is getting fed up
Time is money, she's taking a piss in a cup
Sick and tired of all the abuse
Her ass is referred to as "The Caboose"
How will she know when the time is right
Keep her in the dark, she's a fugly sight
Hopping on the train, leaving far...
#abuse
#rhyming
#SelfDiscovery
#sex
#ShortStory
106 reads
13 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
27th Feb 2025 1:48pm
27th Feb 2025 1:48pm
Beware!!
Isolated house far from reach
Prophecy, torture and death unleashed
Life behind these walls
Demented voices call
Blood is all you crave
Mentally deranged & insane
Bodies hang from meat-hooks
Human flesh peeled and cooked
House by the cemetery
Basement is a mortuary
Walk among the tombstones
Rotting flesh, decaying bones
Some buried alive
No one hears their cries
Maggots pour in eating your flesh
A slow agonizing death
Insane family pray for their souls
Funeral’s over, the casket’s closed
Another...
Prophecy, torture and death unleashed
Life behind these walls
Demented voices call
Blood is all you crave
Mentally deranged & insane
Bodies hang from meat-hooks
Human flesh peeled and cooked
House by the cemetery
Basement is a mortuary
Walk among the tombstones
Rotting flesh, decaying bones
Some buried alive
No one hears their cries
Maggots pour in eating your flesh
A slow agonizing death
Insane family pray for their souls
Funeral’s over, the casket’s closed
Another...
#dark
#death
#evil
#horror
#rhyming
119 reads
26 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
27th Feb 2025 1:38pm
27th Feb 2025 1:38pm
Make it a great day!
My visions tell no lies
someday were all going to die
until then open your heart
today's the day for you to start
no need to dwell in misery
smiles & laughter spells victory
be kind and appreciate others
as a child we listened to our mothers
only one shot we have to plant a seed
lend your hand to others that are in need
someday were all going to die
until then open your heart
today's the day for you to start
no need to dwell in misery
smiles & laughter spells victory
be kind and appreciate others
as a child we listened to our mothers
only one shot we have to plant a seed
lend your hand to others that are in need
#inspirational
#motivational
#rhyming
#support
#uplifting
131 reads
15 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
27th Feb 2025 1:02am
27th Feb 2025 1:02am
how does your city grow
city was grey of an evening
until there was electricity and neon
adverts and car lights
and lamp posts, and oh, I don’t know
perhaps pretty maids all in a row
until there was electricity and neon
adverts and car lights
and lamp posts, and oh, I don’t know
perhaps pretty maids all in a row
#rhyming
117 reads
6 Comments
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