Poems About Memories Seeking Honest Critique
#memories
Poems about memories seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
4th Nov 2024 7:31pm
4th Nov 2024 7:31pm
Frosty Autumn Leaves
In our minds your memory burns bright
Gone too soon, laid to rest, eternally
The autumn leaves and frost
Decorate your absence
Memories of happiness
Memories of love
Long, winding roads led you home
Led us on different paths
Tangled like branches
Lost in the sound of silence
Your memory lives on in the autumn leaves and frost
Silence
You live on
Gone too soon, laid to rest, eternally
The autumn leaves and frost
Decorate your absence
Memories of happiness
Memories of love
Long, winding roads led you home
Led us on different paths
Tangled like branches
Lost in the sound of silence
Your memory lives on in the autumn leaves and frost
Silence
You live on
#fall
#graveyard
#memories
#silence
#snow
107 reads
6 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
3rd Nov 2024 3:03am
3rd Nov 2024 3:03am
The Modelos are Nice and Cold
My pops always seemed to be the life of the party
A strong booming voice that could fill the room
He had a hardy laugh like he heard the funniest thing
And he could drink hard like he was in a saloon
And when the cumbias came on the speakers
He’d hit the floor and dance like nobody’s business
He’d have fun because he loved the ambiance
From birthdays and picnics all the way to Christmas
At the stadium we would sit and drink in the stands
He’d tell me stories when he used to play the game
There was a sense of mystery...
A strong booming voice that could fill the room
He had a hardy laugh like he heard the funniest thing
And he could drink hard like he was in a saloon
And when the cumbias came on the speakers
He’d hit the floor and dance like nobody’s business
He’d have fun because he loved the ambiance
From birthdays and picnics all the way to Christmas
At the stadium we would sit and drink in the stands
He’d tell me stories when he used to play the game
There was a sense of mystery...
#family
#father
#memories
139 reads
6 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
2nd Nov 2024 11:20am
2nd Nov 2024 11:20am
Does Obsession = Love?
As the white doves fly to freedom
My soul is captured with you
To die of coldness and violence
Why do I let it happen to me?
I hate you for loving me; I hate you for obsessing me
Controlling my thoughts by your words
Wish I was dead, wish I could not feel, wish I was cold
People screw with my head
NO more blood – No more violence
NO more awake beside my enemy
My beloved enemy who scares me
The love dies in her, she is empty, she is cold
Again lost in her own world
In her own fucking world
My soul is captured with you
To die of coldness and violence
Why do I let it happen to me?
I hate you for loving me; I hate you for obsessing me
Controlling my thoughts by your words
Wish I was dead, wish I could not feel, wish I was cold
People screw with my head
NO more blood – No more violence
NO more awake beside my enemy
My beloved enemy who scares me
The love dies in her, she is empty, she is cold
Again lost in her own world
In her own fucking world
#dark
#FeelingLost
#love
#memories
#obsession
190 reads
12 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
1st Nov 2024 00:13am
1st Nov 2024 00:13am
No one Here (The Reaper…sows)
No one here (The Reaper…sows)
No one here gets out alive
As hard as we try
We all pay the toll
Hopefully there is an other side
But we can’t escape time
Time doesn’t spare anybody
Even one as smart as me
Though I’m a dummy
I can’t escape from Grim
He reaps what he sows
He reaps what he sows
Reaper sits in
On our family gathering
Hope he picks me
And not someone I really love
He reaps what he knows
He reaps and sows
But he don’t feel pity
And he’ll...
No one here gets out alive
As hard as we try
We all pay the toll
Hopefully there is an other side
But we can’t escape time
Time doesn’t spare anybody
Even one as smart as me
Though I’m a dummy
I can’t escape from Grim
He reaps what he sows
He reaps what he sows
Reaper sits in
On our family gathering
Hope he picks me
And not someone I really love
He reaps what he knows
He reaps and sows
But he don’t feel pity
And he’ll...
#death
#family
#memories
99 reads
0 Comments
AaHarvey
Poem Published
31st Oct 2024 7:10pm
31st Oct 2024 7:10pm
Katrina
We spent a lifetime apart,
But I knew right from the second start,
That you have an important piece of me.
Like a blast from the past,
I smiled and you laughed.
I wasn’t expecting that we’d ever meet.
I smoked your memory away.
Thought I’d gone for the grave,
But then you recognized.
I saw it in your eyes,
No word of a lie,
It could be written on the horoscope page.
Is our future without?
My heart is taken, no doubt,
Yet we...
But I knew right from the second start,
That you have an important piece of me.
Like a blast from the past,
I smiled and you laughed.
I wasn’t expecting that we’d ever meet.
I smoked your memory away.
Thought I’d gone for the grave,
But then you recognized.
I saw it in your eyes,
No word of a lie,
It could be written on the horoscope page.
Is our future without?
My heart is taken, no doubt,
Yet we...
#love
#memories
#school
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0 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
31st Oct 2024 6:25am
31st Oct 2024 6:25am
Still Bleeding Blue
I remember it was some time in the fall
In fourth grade
Fernando came to our school
I drew a cool poster of him in a pitching windup
There were hundreds of us out in the recess yard
He walked around and shook our hands
He was so young
That was 1984
Now he’s gone
But on game 1
The team put number 34
Right behind the pitcher’s mound
And when Freddie hit that Grand Slam
It took me back to Gibson’s 9th inning blast
I was fourteen all over again
Jumping and...
In fourth grade
Fernando came to our school
I drew a cool poster of him in a pitching windup
There were hundreds of us out in the recess yard
He walked around and shook our hands
He was so young
That was 1984
Now he’s gone
But on game 1
The team put number 34
Right behind the pitcher’s mound
And when Freddie hit that Grand Slam
It took me back to Gibson’s 9th inning blast
I was fourteen all over again
Jumping and...
#memories
#sports
126 reads
6 Comments
Duice
Poem Published
27th Oct 2024 11:50pm
27th Oct 2024 11:50pm
Milestones
Surrounded in vibrant sharp beauty
to checkpoint the unknown
Survived experiences devoured
that could’ve sever hip bone
In jungle thorns of life
machete swung at carnivorous dense thicket
Would be insane to run the same path
and more a fool to twice pick it
Resilient in conviction I beat trails
to pave thin fragile success
Fought demons at trials in my wake
asleep woke sweat grapple in stress
Stick a [milestone] at this juncture
to save repeat of heredity queue
S.O.S. walking tight circles to arrive
in...
to checkpoint the unknown
Survived experiences devoured
that could’ve sever hip bone
In jungle thorns of life
machete swung at carnivorous dense thicket
Would be insane to run the same path
and more a fool to twice pick it
Resilient in conviction I beat trails
to pave thin fragile success
Fought demons at trials in my wake
asleep woke sweat grapple in stress
Stick a [milestone] at this juncture
to save repeat of heredity queue
S.O.S. walking tight circles to arrive
in...
#choices
#LifeChangingMoment
#memories
#TruthOfLife
#uplifting
234 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
26th Oct 2024 6:36pm
26th Oct 2024 6:36pm
Dreams, Streams & Waterfalls
This life has had it's way
This place has had its way with me
This loss that burns so cold
Won't back down it will never go away
These dying breaths are fading now
Seems like breathing has lost its charm
That flame i once felt inside
Seems the glow finally died
The memories i had of you
And the place where we ran through
Streams and waterfalls
The memories are fading now
Just like the strength that carried us through
Dreams and waterfalls
Is this what it will come to?
A drowning pool of hopeless...
This place has had its way with me
This loss that burns so cold
Won't back down it will never go away
These dying breaths are fading now
Seems like breathing has lost its charm
That flame i once felt inside
Seems the glow finally died
The memories i had of you
And the place where we ran through
Streams and waterfalls
The memories are fading now
Just like the strength that carried us through
Dreams and waterfalls
Is this what it will come to?
A drowning pool of hopeless...
#death
#love
#memories
#regret
#relationships
150 reads
8 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
23rd Oct 2024 5:30am
23rd Oct 2024 5:30am
I Can’t Remember
I Can’t remember
Can’t remember
Walk in a room what for
I don’t know as the day begins anew
Can’t remember when I started to forget
Cobwebs on my brain
Try to brush them off
I can’t remember
Say to myself check it out
Get on my phone to look it up
Who am I why am I here
Can’t remember when
And I’ve got cobwebs on the cranium
I can’t remember when I
Started to forget
Blank pages in my mind
Sit and stew but the key is simple
Think about something else ...
Can’t remember
Walk in a room what for
I don’t know as the day begins anew
Can’t remember when I started to forget
Cobwebs on my brain
Try to brush them off
I can’t remember
Say to myself check it out
Get on my phone to look it up
Who am I why am I here
Can’t remember when
And I’ve got cobwebs on the cranium
I can’t remember when I
Started to forget
Blank pages in my mind
Sit and stew but the key is simple
Think about something else ...
#aging
#memories
#nostalgia #patience
#nostalgia #patience
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0 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
22nd Oct 2024 5:36pm
22nd Oct 2024 5:36pm
Save Me
I dreamt that you were six years old again
Yet somehow, I knew it was a dream
Subconsciously I was aware of our current time and place
But it didn’t matter
I was going to enjoy this little journey
You took my hand
Led me to the living room with all the toys
I sat with you
I hugged you
Your little face lit
Your bright smile
You spoke to me
I was happy in all the details of your face
Your innocence
I miss you being that little
I miss you all being that small
I held back my tears
Time has...
Yet somehow, I knew it was a dream
Subconsciously I was aware of our current time and place
But it didn’t matter
I was going to enjoy this little journey
You took my hand
Led me to the living room with all the toys
I sat with you
I hugged you
Your little face lit
Your bright smile
You spoke to me
I was happy in all the details of your face
Your innocence
I miss you being that little
I miss you all being that small
I held back my tears
Time has...
#Autism
#children
#memories
200 reads
14 Comments
OyateInyanNajin
Poem Published
18th Oct 2024 1:39pm
18th Oct 2024 1:39pm
ONE HEART (II)-(newly revised, much longer, expanded revision)
ONE HEART
BROKE SLOWLY
LIKE FALLING LEAVES
THE OTHER
SHOOK COLDLY
YET CLUNG
TO THE TREE
HERE LATE
IN THE SEASON
OF THEIR
NATURAL FALL
WITH WINTER S
DEEP CLOSURE ...
BROKE SLOWLY
LIKE FALLING LEAVES
THE OTHER
SHOOK COLDLY
YET CLUNG
TO THE TREE
HERE LATE
IN THE SEASON
OF THEIR
NATURAL FALL
WITH WINTER S
DEEP CLOSURE ...
#fall
#LifeCycle
#memories
#SelfReflection
#winter
156 reads
2 Comments
dartford
Paul S...
Paul S...
Poem Published
16th Oct 2024 11:26pm
16th Oct 2024 11:26pm
who I am
bought an harmonica
reminds me of when I was young
can’t play it now
couldn’t play it then!
which is why it reminds me
of when I was young ..
reminds me of when I was young
can’t play it now
couldn’t play it then!
which is why it reminds me
of when I was young ..
#memories
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3 Comments
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