Poems About Heaven Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about heaven seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
3rd May 2024 4:48pm
3rd May 2024 4:48pm
Maw
for the darkness inside you conceal
you can't see the grey matter in your mind
grey means a dead brain
pink means you still have a choice
call your public defender call ghost busters
I will not ask you to suffer above what you insulted me with
blaming me and mine and making them suffer
you are highly intelligent hold onto your pride no matter what you think you see
hold onto your anger and pain it may someday serve you well
let me introduce myself I won't call you son though I remember you in my dreams
I haven't forgotten your plight and I am...
you can't see the grey matter in your mind
grey means a dead brain
pink means you still have a choice
call your public defender call ghost busters
I will not ask you to suffer above what you insulted me with
blaming me and mine and making them suffer
you are highly intelligent hold onto your pride no matter what you think you see
hold onto your anger and pain it may someday serve you well
let me introduce myself I won't call you son though I remember you in my dreams
I haven't forgotten your plight and I am...
#dark
#heaven
#hell
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smackdownraven
Poem Published
3rd May 2024 6:10am
3rd May 2024 6:10am
Lady Dark, daddy do you see me yet?
darkness is that you?
I hate you Father and love you
you are hate incarnate I get along here
please don't take them from me
I don't seek to rise
daddy I don't seek
your mistresses hunt you
your pets do their bidding
daddy you let them find me
I only break out of the chains when they are seeking your company
and punch me until you come with your guns
wow what a lusty man
daddy you failed to mention
I am here doing my time for breaking through your celestial council
I'm writing my rhymes while...
I hate you Father and love you
you are hate incarnate I get along here
please don't take them from me
I don't seek to rise
daddy I don't seek
your mistresses hunt you
your pets do their bidding
daddy you let them find me
I only break out of the chains when they are seeking your company
and punch me until you come with your guns
wow what a lusty man
daddy you failed to mention
I am here doing my time for breaking through your celestial council
I'm writing my rhymes while...
#dark
#hate
#heaven #love
#heaven #love
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
2nd May 2024 00:49am
2nd May 2024 00:49am
I value Honesty and Truth
I can neither feed nor starve your indecision
neither cater nor pity your numb
it is for you to crave or remain chaste or chained
each of you has a choice before you
stay or remain for the unveiling or leave going where you choose
decide if you are truly ready for the truth
or prefer the illusion
to the brutality of being mind raped
are you secure being restained?
is it I who has misunderstood your unique song?
I thought I heard a need many different needs from the collective thought
I thought you desired freedom from...
neither cater nor pity your numb
it is for you to crave or remain chaste or chained
each of you has a choice before you
stay or remain for the unveiling or leave going where you choose
decide if you are truly ready for the truth
or prefer the illusion
to the brutality of being mind raped
are you secure being restained?
is it I who has misunderstood your unique song?
I thought I heard a need many different needs from the collective thought
I thought you desired freedom from...
#hate
#heaven
#hell #love
#hell #love
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faithmairee
Poem Published
31st Mar 2024 1:26pm
31st Mar 2024 1:26pm
Moonflower
Moonflowers on the vine
Heavenly scent the night
Blooms as big as saucers
Heavenly scent the night
Blooms as big as saucers
#dark
#flowers
#heaven
186 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
22nd Mar 2024 9:28am
22nd Mar 2024 9:28am
Navigating Through Darkness
The Earth above
Circling around Hell
Soulless on a dark river
Calling down the blue light
Returning home
Circling around Hell
Soulless on a dark river
Calling down the blue light
Returning home
#motivational
#earth
#heaven
#hell
#uplifting
200 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
18th Mar 2024 9:29am
18th Mar 2024 9:29am
Ascension of the Downfall
A memory of a guided spirit
took me to the hollow land
rising dark tides from the rains
interrupted my visit
my last wish
before gravity pulls me under
children of the revolution
carving my name in the city of fire
took me to the hollow land
rising dark tides from the rains
interrupted my visit
my last wish
before gravity pulls me under
children of the revolution
carving my name in the city of fire
#death
#fiction
#ghosts
#heaven
#hell
151 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
10th Mar 2024 4:40pm
10th Mar 2024 4:40pm
Who Possesses My Soul?
I can't understand this but I'm dead and I'm talking to you right now
Sounds crazy but it's true.
I was lowered into the ground yesterday around noon
My DOD was 3 days prior
What's really strange is that I remember being placed in the coffin
4 carpeted walls surround me
All different walks of religion say the same thing, a beautiful utopia awaits
Well where is it?
No one greeted me at the gates of heaven
Is this Purgatory?
I have not entered a state of peace, tranquility and serenity
Instead, I've been eager, agitated and...
Sounds crazy but it's true.
I was lowered into the ground yesterday around noon
My DOD was 3 days prior
What's really strange is that I remember being placed in the coffin
4 carpeted walls surround me
All different walks of religion say the same thing, a beautiful utopia awaits
Well where is it?
No one greeted me at the gates of heaven
Is this Purgatory?
I have not entered a state of peace, tranquility and serenity
Instead, I've been eager, agitated and...
#death
#utopia
#religion
#heaven
#hell
243 reads
6 Comments
zinnzinn
ZINNNNIZ
ZINNNNIZ
Poem Published
20th Feb 2024 00:42am
20th Feb 2024 00:42am
A TRIBUTE TO MRS. ZINN (I Love You)
Sadness covered the earth, as.the
chariot came,
And silence fell, like gentle rain.
Friends and loved ones mourned the
day
The angels came to take her home to
stay.
But, lo, the Heavens burst forth with
delight,
As another Saint came into sight!
Prepare the choir, open the gates...
Sound the trumpet, the King
awaits!!
"Welcome, my child, we've been
waiting for you!
Your mansion's prepared and your
robe is too.
Enter your home, Here,sit on my
right...
You'll be dining at the Head Table ...
chariot came,
And silence fell, like gentle rain.
Friends and loved ones mourned the
day
The angels came to take her home to
stay.
But, lo, the Heavens burst forth with
delight,
As another Saint came into sight!
Prepare the choir, open the gates...
Sound the trumpet, the King
awaits!!
"Welcome, my child, we've been
waiting for you!
Your mansion's prepared and your
robe is too.
Enter your home, Here,sit on my
right...
You'll be dining at the Head Table ...
#love
#grief
#mother
#heaven
#memorial
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zinnzinn
ZINNNNIZ
ZINNNNIZ
Poem Published
20th Feb 2024 00:18am
20th Feb 2024 00:18am
A Tribute To Mrs. ZINN
Sadness covered the earth, as.the
chariot came,
And silence fell, like gentle rain.
Friends and loved ones mourned the
day
The angels came to take her home to
stay.
But, lo, the Heavens burst forth with
delight,
As another Saint came into sight!
Prepare the choir, open the gates...
Sound the trumpet, the King
awaits!!
"Welcome, my child, we've been
waiting for you!
Your mansion's prepared and your
robe is too.
Enter your home, Here,sit on my
right...
You'll be dining at...
chariot came,
And silence fell, like gentle rain.
Friends and loved ones mourned the
day
The angels came to take her home to
stay.
But, lo, the Heavens burst forth with
delight,
As another Saint came into sight!
Prepare the choir, open the gates...
Sound the trumpet, the King
awaits!!
"Welcome, my child, we've been
waiting for you!
Your mansion's prepared and your
robe is too.
Enter your home, Here,sit on my
right...
You'll be dining at...
#love
#grief
#mother
#heaven
#memorial
184 reads
2 Comments
Louisamay
JaneyBean
JaneyBean
Poem Published
17th Nov 2023 7:55pm
17th Nov 2023 7:55pm
Heavens Bean Pot
I strive to be productive
I aim to be busy
I need to be kind
I want to spread happiness
I will nurture my children
I can provide a safe loving space
I notice the lonely
I reach out to the sad
I will be the best version
I shall not give up
I am your port in a stormy sea
I relish the challenge
I confront adversaries
I celebrate your victories
I cry alongside you
I am filling my heavens bean pot
I hope when the time comes
Those gates will open.
I aim to be busy
I need to be kind
I want to spread happiness
I will nurture my children
I can provide a safe loving space
I notice the lonely
I reach out to the sad
I will be the best version
I shall not give up
I am your port in a stormy sea
I relish the challenge
I confront adversaries
I celebrate your victories
I cry alongside you
I am filling my heavens bean pot
I hope when the time comes
Those gates will open.
#kindness
#heaven
#SelfReflection #PersonalGrowth
#SelfReflection #PersonalGrowth
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PAR
Poem Published
5th Nov 2023 12:51pm
5th Nov 2023 12:51pm
Moustache
..in the beginning it was nothing
and the core of nothingness said:
let's do nothing
and then nothing was done...
...in the beginning there was nothing
and the being-nothing said:
let's make nothing
and so nothing happened from then on...
...in the beginning there was chaos
and the lord of chaos-nothing said:
let's make chaos into nothing
and after the chaos there was nothing.
and the core of nothingness said:
let's do nothing
and then nothing was done...
...in the beginning there was nothing
and the being-nothing said:
let's make nothing
and so nothing happened from then on...
...in the beginning there was chaos
and the lord of chaos-nothing said:
let's make chaos into nothing
and after the chaos there was nothing.
#religion
#spiritual
#mirror
#heaven
#hell
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1 Comment
Abracadabra
Poem Published
13th Sep 2023 8:48am
13th Sep 2023 8:48am
Dew Dream
I twiddle thumbs
watching dew dry on the grass
so little time
and so much to do
It's best not to count
the days I have left
when I spend them
thinking of you
But if heaven's more than a notion
I'm sorry you won't find me there
Maybe the hardest pill to swallow
is knowing I'm headed elsewhere
watching dew dry on the grass
so little time
and so much to do
It's best not to count
the days I have left
when I spend them
thinking of you
But if heaven's more than a notion
I'm sorry you won't find me there
Maybe the hardest pill to swallow
is knowing I'm headed elsewhere
#sadness
#regret
#heaven
#hell
#unicorns
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