Poems About Heaven Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about heaven seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
22nd Mar 2024 9:28am
22nd Mar 2024 9:28am
Navigating Through Darkness
The Earth above
Circling around Hell
Soulless on a dark river
Calling down the blue light
Returning home
Circling around Hell
Soulless on a dark river
Calling down the blue light
Returning home
#motivational
#earth
#heaven
#hell
#uplifting
176 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
18th Mar 2024 9:29am
18th Mar 2024 9:29am
Ascension of the Downfall
A memory of a guided spirit
took me to the hollow land
rising dark tides from the rains
interrupted my visit
my last wish
before gravity pulls me under
children of the revolution
carving my name in the city of fire
took me to the hollow land
rising dark tides from the rains
interrupted my visit
my last wish
before gravity pulls me under
children of the revolution
carving my name in the city of fire
#death
#fiction
#ghosts
#heaven
#hell
136 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
10th Mar 2024 4:40pm
10th Mar 2024 4:40pm
Who Possesses My Soul?
I can't understand this but I'm dead and I'm talking to you right now
Sounds crazy but it's true.
I was lowered into the ground yesterday around noon
My DOD was 3 days prior
What's really strange is that I remember being placed in the coffin
4 carpeted walls surround me
All different walks of religion say the same thing, a beautiful utopia awaits
Well where is it?
No one greeted me at the gates of heaven
Is this Purgatory?
I have not entered a state of peace, tranquility and serenity
Instead, I've been eager, agitated and...
Sounds crazy but it's true.
I was lowered into the ground yesterday around noon
My DOD was 3 days prior
What's really strange is that I remember being placed in the coffin
4 carpeted walls surround me
All different walks of religion say the same thing, a beautiful utopia awaits
Well where is it?
No one greeted me at the gates of heaven
Is this Purgatory?
I have not entered a state of peace, tranquility and serenity
Instead, I've been eager, agitated and...
#death
#utopia
#religion
#heaven
#hell
226 reads
6 Comments
zinnzinn
ZINNNNIZ
ZINNNNIZ
Poem Published
20th Feb 2024 00:42am
20th Feb 2024 00:42am
A TRIBUTE TO MRS. ZINN (I Love You)
Sadness covered the earth, as.the
chariot came,
And silence fell, like gentle rain.
Friends and loved ones mourned the
day
The angels came to take her home to
stay.
But, lo, the Heavens burst forth with
delight,
As another Saint came into sight!
Prepare the choir, open the gates...
Sound the trumpet, the King
awaits!!
"Welcome, my child, we've been
waiting for you!
Your mansion's prepared and your
robe is too.
Enter your home, Here,sit on my
right...
You'll be dining at the Head Table ...
chariot came,
And silence fell, like gentle rain.
Friends and loved ones mourned the
day
The angels came to take her home to
stay.
But, lo, the Heavens burst forth with
delight,
As another Saint came into sight!
Prepare the choir, open the gates...
Sound the trumpet, the King
awaits!!
"Welcome, my child, we've been
waiting for you!
Your mansion's prepared and your
robe is too.
Enter your home, Here,sit on my
right...
You'll be dining at the Head Table ...
#love
#grief
#mother
#heaven
#memorial
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4 Comments
zinnzinn
ZINNNNIZ
ZINNNNIZ
Poem Published
20th Feb 2024 00:18am
20th Feb 2024 00:18am
A Tribute To Mrs. ZINN
Sadness covered the earth, as.the
chariot came,
And silence fell, like gentle rain.
Friends and loved ones mourned the
day
The angels came to take her home to
stay.
But, lo, the Heavens burst forth with
delight,
As another Saint came into sight!
Prepare the choir, open the gates...
Sound the trumpet, the King
awaits!!
"Welcome, my child, we've been
waiting for you!
Your mansion's prepared and your
robe is too.
Enter your home, Here,sit on my
right...
You'll be dining at...
chariot came,
And silence fell, like gentle rain.
Friends and loved ones mourned the
day
The angels came to take her home to
stay.
But, lo, the Heavens burst forth with
delight,
As another Saint came into sight!
Prepare the choir, open the gates...
Sound the trumpet, the King
awaits!!
"Welcome, my child, we've been
waiting for you!
Your mansion's prepared and your
robe is too.
Enter your home, Here,sit on my
right...
You'll be dining at...
#love
#grief
#mother
#heaven
#memorial
167 reads
2 Comments
Louisamay
JaneyBean
JaneyBean
Poem Published
17th Nov 2023 7:55pm
17th Nov 2023 7:55pm
Heavens Bean Pot
I strive to be productive
I aim to be busy
I need to be kind
I want to spread happiness
I will nurture my children
I can provide a safe loving space
I notice the lonely
I reach out to the sad
I will be the best version
I shall not give up
I am your port in a stormy sea
I relish the challenge
I confront adversaries
I celebrate your victories
I cry alongside you
I am filling my heavens bean pot
I hope when the time comes
Those gates will open.
I aim to be busy
I need to be kind
I want to spread happiness
I will nurture my children
I can provide a safe loving space
I notice the lonely
I reach out to the sad
I will be the best version
I shall not give up
I am your port in a stormy sea
I relish the challenge
I confront adversaries
I celebrate your victories
I cry alongside you
I am filling my heavens bean pot
I hope when the time comes
Those gates will open.
#kindness
#heaven
#SelfReflection #PersonalGrowth
#SelfReflection #PersonalGrowth
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0 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
5th Nov 2023 12:51pm
5th Nov 2023 12:51pm
Moustache
..in the beginning it was nothing
and the core of nothingness said:
let's do nothing
and then nothing was done...
...in the beginning there was nothing
and the being-nothing said:
let's make nothing
and so nothing happened from then on...
...in the beginning there was chaos
and the lord of chaos-nothing said:
let's make chaos into nothing
and after the chaos there was nothing.
and the core of nothingness said:
let's do nothing
and then nothing was done...
...in the beginning there was nothing
and the being-nothing said:
let's make nothing
and so nothing happened from then on...
...in the beginning there was chaos
and the lord of chaos-nothing said:
let's make chaos into nothing
and after the chaos there was nothing.
#religion
#spiritual
#mirror
#heaven
#hell
168 reads
1 Comment
Abracadabra
Poem Published
13th Sep 2023 8:48am
13th Sep 2023 8:48am
Dew Dream
I twiddle thumbs
watching dew dry on the grass
so little time
and so much to do
It's best not to count
the days I have left
when I spend them
thinking of you
But if heaven's more than a notion
I'm sorry you won't find me there
Maybe the hardest pill to swallow
is knowing I'm headed elsewhere
watching dew dry on the grass
so little time
and so much to do
It's best not to count
the days I have left
when I spend them
thinking of you
But if heaven's more than a notion
I'm sorry you won't find me there
Maybe the hardest pill to swallow
is knowing I'm headed elsewhere
#sadness
#regret
#heaven
#hell
#unicorns
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0 Comments
CeCe
Poem Published
13th Jul 2023 1:19am
13th Jul 2023 1:19am
Our Corner Of Heaven
You are such a perfect muse
No other I’d rather use
For the fodder than makes me better
Or the midnight love we share together
All the odd rhythms that synch our wishes
The reality that rips our stitches
A silence that stretches out between us
Breaking the cloud of all consuming lust
A playback reel, a corrosive stain left like rust
Internal screams meant to break some
The sirens from which we run
I will never refuse you my sweet
Or the tainted nectar we share in dreams
Some corner of heaven where we hope to meet ...
No other I’d rather use
For the fodder than makes me better
Or the midnight love we share together
All the odd rhythms that synch our wishes
The reality that rips our stitches
A silence that stretches out between us
Breaking the cloud of all consuming lust
A playback reel, a corrosive stain left like rust
Internal screams meant to break some
The sirens from which we run
I will never refuse you my sweet
Or the tainted nectar we share in dreams
Some corner of heaven where we hope to meet ...
#love
#fate
#spiritual #heaven
#spiritual #heaven
247 reads
0 Comments
jenny_is_hungry
Poem Published
3rd Jul 2023 9:52am
3rd Jul 2023 9:52am
Revisiting
The aged surround
Mourning the reminder
Sinking lower
Feeling her presence
The love
That linked us together
Yet the hungry earth
Dissolves the resolve
In all of us
Nine was young for this
And here I sit
With the same pit
Now silent
Empty
As before
There is no presence here
Just memory
Who were they kidding
Her grave now weathered
Uncle leaning upon the same tree
Watching
Intently
As he did long ago
'You look as lost as you did
When you were a kid'...
Mourning the reminder
Sinking lower
Feeling her presence
The love
That linked us together
Yet the hungry earth
Dissolves the resolve
In all of us
Nine was young for this
And here I sit
With the same pit
Now silent
Empty
As before
There is no presence here
Just memory
Who were they kidding
Her grave now weathered
Uncle leaning upon the same tree
Watching
Intently
As he did long ago
'You look as lost as you did
When you were a kid'...
#childhood
#death
#spiritual
#heaven
#meditation
229 reads
4 Comments
LillyValleyPoems
Poem Published
30th Jun 2023 7:20am
30th Jun 2023 7:20am
The Ocean Becomes The Sky
When the ocean became the sky
I was there,
When I looked out from the Narrows Bridge,
It was quite black,
I fathomed,
How in the nautical length
Could I reach the arch of heaven?
I wondered if anyone down there
Could measure
Our understanding of a sounding line
Heavens length equal to six feet of water,
A difficult problem,
Would anyone care
If I laid in the air?
When the ocean became the sky
I was there,
limitless, I hope I can stay
Way up here while
You’re stuck 467 feet...
I was there,
When I looked out from the Narrows Bridge,
It was quite black,
I fathomed,
How in the nautical length
Could I reach the arch of heaven?
I wondered if anyone down there
Could measure
Our understanding of a sounding line
Heavens length equal to six feet of water,
A difficult problem,
Would anyone care
If I laid in the air?
When the ocean became the sky
I was there,
limitless, I hope I can stay
Way up here while
You’re stuck 467 feet...
#utopia
#heaven
#hell
256 reads
2 Comments
averageJoe69
Ron Summers
Ron Summers
Poem Published
9th Jun 2023 11:50pm
9th Jun 2023 11:50pm
The special place
#lust
#sex
#heaven
349 reads
0 Comments
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