Poems About Heaven Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about heaven seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
ThePalestRider
Poem Published
6th Aug 2024 10:10pm
6th Aug 2024 10:10pm
The Dark Between Hells
In realms 'twixt hells where shadows deep do dwell,
A place forsaken, ne'er by light adorned,
There lies a darkness darker than e'en Hell,
Where souls lament, by Heaven's grace forsworn.
No fiery pit, nor brimstone's searing flare,
But void eternal, still and void of sound,
Where echoes of despair do fill the air,
And restless spirits wander, lost, unbound.
In this abyss, 'twixt realms of doom and sin,
No hope doth shine, nor mercy doth descend,
For here the damned, their endless...
A place forsaken, ne'er by light adorned,
There lies a darkness darker than e'en Hell,
Where souls lament, by Heaven's grace forsworn.
No fiery pit, nor brimstone's searing flare,
But void eternal, still and void of sound,
Where echoes of despair do fill the air,
And restless spirits wander, lost, unbound.
In this abyss, 'twixt realms of doom and sin,
No hope doth shine, nor mercy doth descend,
For here the damned, their endless...
#heaven
#hell
#narrative
#religion
#WilliamShakespeare
102 reads
1 Comment
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
31st Jul 2024 10:08pm
31st Jul 2024 10:08pm
Elysium
Mourning air whispering over me
You were all mine seven months ago
I was denied entry
Elysium
Will I see you again?
Each day of mine is closing without light
Where will I rest my head for my eternity?
You were all mine seven months ago
I was denied entry
Elysium
Will I see you again?
Each day of mine is closing without light
Where will I rest my head for my eternity?
#death
#heaven
#hell
#peace
#silence
117 reads
2 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
14th Jun 2024 2:33pm
14th Jun 2024 2:33pm
Mystical In My Walk
Veiled within a dark green shade, the forest alternates shadow and light,
playing with truth and myth, awakening the sylvan spirit to come alive,
and share the light of the truth.......the tiny smallest movement is caught
inside a thiik forest, when a bird alights, when a beetle cracks a weed.
an empty space where the sounds travel fast between the trees, and
the sight, is somehow left out, to enhance the hearing reception...
The pines are mute save of a suspicious breath that comes from
the adjacent mountain...
playing with truth and myth, awakening the sylvan spirit to come alive,
and share the light of the truth.......the tiny smallest movement is caught
inside a thiik forest, when a bird alights, when a beetle cracks a weed.
an empty space where the sounds travel fast between the trees, and
the sight, is somehow left out, to enhance the hearing reception...
The pines are mute save of a suspicious breath that comes from
the adjacent mountain...
#earth
#emotions
#heaven
#inspirational
#utopia
163 reads
6 Comments
AfterSexDilemma
Poem Published
12th Jun 2024 10:58am
12th Jun 2024 10:58am
Babylon
Gate of the gods.
Where the girls weep alone.
Eros disregards,
The unwelcome vermin.
Hoards of like mind,
Create towers of stone.
Building blocks of righteousness,
All the way home.
Never say what they think.
Just working as one.
A team of creators,
Invading heaven.
Don't let God know.
Don't let him see.
He'll scatter your thoughts,
Languages and family.
He'll tear down your tower.
And label it blaspheme.
He'll punish until you cower.
For even the thought of heresy.
You'll...
Where the girls weep alone.
Eros disregards,
The unwelcome vermin.
Hoards of like mind,
Create towers of stone.
Building blocks of righteousness,
All the way home.
Never say what they think.
Just working as one.
A team of creators,
Invading heaven.
Don't let God know.
Don't let him see.
He'll scatter your thoughts,
Languages and family.
He'll tear down your tower.
And label it blaspheme.
He'll punish until you cower.
For even the thought of heresy.
You'll...
#gothic
#heaven
#wisdom
196 reads
10 Comments
CasketSharpe
Poem Published
5th Jun 2024 1:35am
5th Jun 2024 1:35am
Snowflake Heaven
His mama probably told him not to ever fuck a white girl
But that did not stop him, he still let them in his world,
“Throughout his life he became addicted to the black man’s kryptonite
Giving them that BBC deep into the heat of the night,
“When he became more famous his coon ass said that he wasn’t black
The motherfucka needed to look at his skin to realize that was a false fact,
“Like his NFL career he should run that shit back
But one thing for sure hate from his murder trial did not cut no slack,
...
But that did not stop him, he still let them in his world,
“Throughout his life he became addicted to the black man’s kryptonite
Giving them that BBC deep into the heat of the night,
“When he became more famous his coon ass said that he wasn’t black
The motherfucka needed to look at his skin to realize that was a false fact,
“Like his NFL career he should run that shit back
But one thing for sure hate from his murder trial did not cut no slack,
...
#forgiveness
#heaven
241 reads
10 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
4th Jun 2024 5:17pm
4th Jun 2024 5:17pm
From The Pastures Of Heaven
nature has words to speak
the quill his secrets leak
the hidden truth to seek
heal the heart that is sick
it's so quiet where i safely sit
betwenn the rocks and the trees
i near where i hear the bleat
it's so calm where i write
the town is remotely far
I feel close to Heaven's light
it is so mild where i tread
the shepherds track is soft
pastoral vibrations in my head
where herbs and stones abound
crickets and grasshoppers alike
nature is teeming with life around
...
the quill his secrets leak
the hidden truth to seek
heal the heart that is sick
it's so quiet where i safely sit
betwenn the rocks and the trees
i near where i hear the bleat
it's so calm where i write
the town is remotely far
I feel close to Heaven's light
it is so mild where i tread
the shepherds track is soft
pastoral vibrations in my head
where herbs and stones abound
crickets and grasshoppers alike
nature is teeming with life around
...
#earth
#heaven
#inspirational
#motivational
#utopia
142 reads
7 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
25th May 2024 12:11pm
25th May 2024 12:11pm
Mystical Elightenment
Flat and vast, the dormant hills sleep in the mist
They stretch wide their flanks on every earthy inch
Where the wheat fields and furrows, both exist
And back beyond the flat lines, rise gigantic rocks
******
From the rocky hills, whence i stand watching
The view makes the time a one moment extending
Lengthy and slow and the hush ever existing
With a white noise, constant murmur in the back
******
The mountain's height challenge the blue firmament
From an upper view, their crests graze the sky's face ...
They stretch wide their flanks on every earthy inch
Where the wheat fields and furrows, both exist
And back beyond the flat lines, rise gigantic rocks
******
From the rocky hills, whence i stand watching
The view makes the time a one moment extending
Lengthy and slow and the hush ever existing
With a white noise, constant murmur in the back
******
The mountain's height challenge the blue firmament
From an upper view, their crests graze the sky's face ...
#heaven
#morality
#philosophical
#religion
#utopia
147 reads
2 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
6th May 2024 10:37pm
6th May 2024 10:37pm
Weary Eyes
Mourning air humming over me
You were all mine seven months ago
I was denied entry
Elysium
Will I see you again?
Each day of mine is closing without light
Where will I rest my head for my eternity?
You were all mine seven months ago
I was denied entry
Elysium
Will I see you again?
Each day of mine is closing without light
Where will I rest my head for my eternity?
#death
#heaven
#hell
#peace
#silence
138 reads
4 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
3rd May 2024 4:48pm
3rd May 2024 4:48pm
Maw
for the darkness inside you conceal
you can't see the grey matter in your mind
grey means a dead brain
pink means you still have a choice
call your public defender call ghost busters
I will not ask you to suffer above what you insulted me with
blaming me and mine and making them suffer
you are highly intelligent hold onto your pride no matter what you think you see
hold onto your anger and pain it may someday serve you well
let me introduce myself I won't call you son though I remember you in my dreams
I haven't forgotten your plight and I am...
you can't see the grey matter in your mind
grey means a dead brain
pink means you still have a choice
call your public defender call ghost busters
I will not ask you to suffer above what you insulted me with
blaming me and mine and making them suffer
you are highly intelligent hold onto your pride no matter what you think you see
hold onto your anger and pain it may someday serve you well
let me introduce myself I won't call you son though I remember you in my dreams
I haven't forgotten your plight and I am...
#dark
#heaven
#hell
166 reads
0 Comments
smackdownraven
Poem Published
3rd May 2024 6:10am
3rd May 2024 6:10am
Lady Dark, daddy do you see me yet?
darkness is that you?
I hate you Father and love you
you are hate incarnate I get along here
please don't take them from me
I don't seek to rise
daddy I don't seek
your mistresses hunt you
your pets do their bidding
daddy you let them find me
I only break out of the chains when they are seeking your company
and punch me until you come with your guns
wow what a lusty man
daddy you failed to mention
I am here doing my time for breaking through your celestial council
I'm writing my rhymes while...
I hate you Father and love you
you are hate incarnate I get along here
please don't take them from me
I don't seek to rise
daddy I don't seek
your mistresses hunt you
your pets do their bidding
daddy you let them find me
I only break out of the chains when they are seeking your company
and punch me until you come with your guns
wow what a lusty man
daddy you failed to mention
I am here doing my time for breaking through your celestial council
I'm writing my rhymes while...
#dark
#hate
#heaven #love
#heaven #love
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
2nd May 2024 00:49am
2nd May 2024 00:49am
I value Honesty and Truth
I can neither feed nor starve your indecision
neither cater nor pity your numb
it is for you to crave or remain chaste or chained
each of you has a choice before you
stay or remain for the unveiling or leave going where you choose
decide if you are truly ready for the truth
or prefer the illusion
to the brutality of being mind raped
are you secure being restained?
is it I who has misunderstood your unique song?
I thought I heard a need many different needs from the collective thought
I thought you desired freedom from...
neither cater nor pity your numb
it is for you to crave or remain chaste or chained
each of you has a choice before you
stay or remain for the unveiling or leave going where you choose
decide if you are truly ready for the truth
or prefer the illusion
to the brutality of being mind raped
are you secure being restained?
is it I who has misunderstood your unique song?
I thought I heard a need many different needs from the collective thought
I thought you desired freedom from...
#hate
#heaven
#hell #love
#hell #love
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faithmairee
Poem Published
31st Mar 2024 1:26pm
31st Mar 2024 1:26pm
Moonflower
Moonflowers on the vine
Heavenly scent the night
Blooms as big as saucers
Heavenly scent the night
Blooms as big as saucers
#dark
#flowers
#heaven
165 reads
4 Comments
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