Heartbroken by Top Critiquers Poems
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heartbroken by top critiquers poems. Poems written by members who have given lots of feedback to other poets this month.
Who cares
Your tepid favour not really warming to the thought.
There's no alchemy with which to distil a retort.
Comfort is a stretch, lack the agility to contort.
Best I seem to manage is a tireless distraught.
I'm lonely, saves me being an affliction.
My discomfort puts others in an awkward position.
How timely, seemed an effortless decision.
Left me having trouble remedying this condition.
This bitter flavour, sick having to savour such rancid after-taste.
Try to draw conclusions from the mess I have retraced.
Pointless seeking why it's...
There's no alchemy with which to distil a retort.
Comfort is a stretch, lack the agility to contort.
Best I seem to manage is a tireless distraught.
I'm lonely, saves me being an affliction.
My discomfort puts others in an awkward position.
How timely, seemed an effortless decision.
Left me having trouble remedying this condition.
This bitter flavour, sick having to savour such rancid after-taste.
Try to draw conclusions from the mess I have retraced.
Pointless seeking why it's...
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#love
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Apology
#breakup
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#love
#regret
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My Dreamy Graveyard
My dreamy world of writing
is a graveyard shrouded in fog.
Where each story has a grave,
each grave has a character.
These living, breathing corpses
with open eyes, raspy voices
and souls, gaze on through my eyes.
is a graveyard shrouded in fog.
Where each story has a grave,
each grave has a character.
These living, breathing corpses
with open eyes, raspy voices
and souls, gaze on through my eyes.
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#rejection
#sadness
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Cut Ya Out ..
All these years, I let you hurt me,
We both made decisions, but you blame me.
Maybe grow up and take some blame.
It’s a shame, you just wanted to play,
With fire, now you’re burning today.
We could have had so much more,
Forbidden fruits will cost their name.
Call yourself a friend, but you knew the score,
It takes two to dance; you knew what’s in store.
When the world crumbled, you blamed me,
Maybe take some responsibility.
This time I'm walking away
...
We both made decisions, but you blame me.
Maybe grow up and take some blame.
It’s a shame, you just wanted to play,
With fire, now you’re burning today.
We could have had so much more,
Forbidden fruits will cost their name.
Call yourself a friend, but you knew the score,
It takes two to dance; you knew what’s in store.
When the world crumbled, you blamed me,
Maybe take some responsibility.
This time I'm walking away
...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love
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insulted rain (with Crimsin)
intrepid need insults my intelligence
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
#heartbroken
#love
#relationships
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A Dangerous Obsession
I memorise the address and shut the computer down, hurrying out of the office to my car.
Outside, dusk is settling over the area with a hint of damp and mugginess in the air. I drive quickly, nearly going through a red at a set of traffic lights. I continue on along the coastal road, tight chested.
I didn’t know what I was expecting when I looked for her name, but I wish I hadn’t. The different surname indicates she has married since we last saw each other.
That shouldn’t bother me. But it does.
Leave it alone, I tell myself as I approach the...
Outside, dusk is settling over the area with a hint of damp and mugginess in the air. I drive quickly, nearly going through a red at a set of traffic lights. I continue on along the coastal road, tight chested.
I didn’t know what I was expecting when I looked for her name, but I wish I hadn’t. The different surname indicates she has married since we last saw each other.
That shouldn’t bother me. But it does.
Leave it alone, I tell myself as I approach the...
#heartbroken
#lover
#mystery
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in hope we trust / or is it just a lie
love shatters the heart
held together by hope
never being fullfilled
it's a hurt we hide
carrying with us everyday
we hide it with a smile
hide with a laugh
keeping the tears inside
watering the pain
pain that's always there
strong on the outside
fragile on the inside
strength and smiles i show
while inside
i wilt...
held together by hope
never being fullfilled
it's a hurt we hide
carrying with us everyday
we hide it with a smile
hide with a laugh
keeping the tears inside
watering the pain
pain that's always there
strong on the outside
fragile on the inside
strength and smiles i show
while inside
i wilt...
#heartbroken
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Unrequited Love and Cold Coffee
Unrequited Love and Cold Coffee
I was going
to write that,
but you saved me
the trouble.
I'm feeling numb.
I've been
so alone
carrying this silence
for so long
I've forgotten
how to talk.
Cold coffee.
My sandwich
has gone stiff
just sitting
on the plate.
I was supposed
to eat it
to keep
my strength up.
But it's grown
into a sculpture
that represents
the thousand dreams
I've watched die.
Cut. ...
I was going
to write that,
but you saved me
the trouble.
I'm feeling numb.
I've been
so alone
carrying this silence
for so long
I've forgotten
how to talk.
Cold coffee.
My sandwich
has gone stiff
just sitting
on the plate.
I was supposed
to eat it
to keep
my strength up.
But it's grown
into a sculpture
that represents
the thousand dreams
I've watched die.
Cut. ...
#grief
#loneliness
#heartbroken
#despair
#emptiness
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4 Comments
Your Voice
Don’t keep your voice from me,
not for an hour,
because a single hour without your voice
is like a vacant day
an unused month,
a hollow year;
because without your voice
I then become a wandering ghost
a flitting shade,
that haunts my rooms
and asks and asks and asks
the churning silence there,
“When will I hear her speak again?
When will I have her near?”
not for an hour,
because a single hour without your voice
is like a vacant day
an unused month,
a hollow year;
because without your voice
I then become a wandering ghost
a flitting shade,
that haunts my rooms
and asks and asks and asks
the churning silence there,
“When will I hear her speak again?
When will I have her near?”
#heartbroken
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The Hand
I remember my 1st day of school
I was so nervous
She sat next to me
And started talking
Her voice soothed me
And made me feel comfortable
Then we had recess
And I got hurt
She reached out to help me up
That was the 1st time
She held my hand
And at that moment
I knew everything was going to be ok
We got a little older
And grew closer and closer
We went everywhere together
And shared every experience
Everywhere we went she held my hand
Her comfort reassured me constantly ...
I was so nervous
She sat next to me
And started talking
Her voice soothed me
And made me feel comfortable
Then we had recess
And I got hurt
She reached out to help me up
That was the 1st time
She held my hand
And at that moment
I knew everything was going to be ok
We got a little older
And grew closer and closer
We went everywhere together
And shared every experience
Everywhere we went she held my hand
Her comfort reassured me constantly ...
#heartbroken
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Healing
Healing is such a complicated journey as no human being is given the same hand of cards to play in the game of life.
I always thought that with time, the wounds from a perticular breakup, would hurt less and the blood would dissipate in a vague memory tucked in its own understanding of the traces it left behind.
I never came to terms with why that specific relationship, affected my soul in such a powerful manner. The colors were brighter with him and the melody euphonious. Aromas of life exhilirated my spirit, whenever he was around.
I don't think he truly...
I always thought that with time, the wounds from a perticular breakup, would hurt less and the blood would dissipate in a vague memory tucked in its own understanding of the traces it left behind.
I never came to terms with why that specific relationship, affected my soul in such a powerful manner. The colors were brighter with him and the melody euphonious. Aromas of life exhilirated my spirit, whenever he was around.
I don't think he truly...
#breakup
#healing
#heartbroken
#love
#relationships
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Poem for my Dad
POEM FOR MY DAD
By R Summers
Heaven has an Angel, they've taken in our Dad. There's one more star to see at night, that just leaves us sad.
No more stories shall he tell of mad and crazy things. Gone will be his laughter and the happiness it brings.
No more sitting by the waters edge waiting for a bite, you swapped you're Rod forg Angels wings ans now you've taken flight.
You taught us so many things, we think of you and cry, but you never told us what to do, once you said goodbye.
A Father, Granddad, Legend some names that you have...
By R Summers
Heaven has an Angel, they've taken in our Dad. There's one more star to see at night, that just leaves us sad.
No more stories shall he tell of mad and crazy things. Gone will be his laughter and the happiness it brings.
No more sitting by the waters edge waiting for a bite, you swapped you're Rod forg Angels wings ans now you've taken flight.
You taught us so many things, we think of you and cry, but you never told us what to do, once you said goodbye.
A Father, Granddad, Legend some names that you have...
#heartbroken
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