Heartbroken by Top Critiquers Poems
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heartbroken by top critiquers poems. Poems written by members who have given lots of feedback to other poets this month.
Unable To Forget
I had a vision of her walking across heaven
Realizing this while in the pits of a fiery lake
My time’s broken it’s always half past eleven
On the night I committed that crucial mistake
Hell is designed to torment the human mind
By violating emotions that’ll never truly heal
Damnation a cruel device when love is blind
Without any light left darkness will slowly kill
God did not want her pain to forever flow
He erased our history underneath a sunset
In her smile happiness has a cosmic glow
She’ll never remember I’m...
Realizing this while in the pits of a fiery lake
My time’s broken it’s always half past eleven
On the night I committed that crucial mistake
Hell is designed to torment the human mind
By violating emotions that’ll never truly heal
Damnation a cruel device when love is blind
Without any light left darkness will slowly kill
God did not want her pain to forever flow
He erased our history underneath a sunset
In her smile happiness has a cosmic glow
She’ll never remember I’m...
#heartbroken
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Fading Away Our Love (collab with Fia Naturie)
I knew the end
Before it has started
A cold wind
Freezes my heart
And the pain tears us apart
Always weeping
inside my chest
I had to tell him
I couldn't string this along
Our two hearts were once one
Now only emptiness
I call home
Our time will fade
The end of all today
A blackened sun
Shines my next day
As the stars come out
I want to be with you
But the next day
Realization shows through
We were no good together
You know this to be true
Nothing harder ...
Before it has started
A cold wind
Freezes my heart
And the pain tears us apart
Always weeping
inside my chest
I had to tell him
I couldn't string this along
Our two hearts were once one
Now only emptiness
I call home
Our time will fade
The end of all today
A blackened sun
Shines my next day
As the stars come out
I want to be with you
But the next day
Realization shows through
We were no good together
You know this to be true
Nothing harder ...
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#relationships
#sadness
#tragedy
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13 Comments
Mamas Don't
Text
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
#despair
#grief
#heartbroken
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24 Comments
~You are my Golden Spring..
https://youtu.be/6xlMbWc52VI?feature=shared
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
#heartbroken
#love
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
133 reads
6 Comments
insulted rain~with the talented Indie
intrepid need insults my intelligence
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
#heartbroken
#love
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6 Comments
it may not always be so; (after ee cummings )
it may not always be so; these stone
walls lining castle ruins, where these
fortresses of our heart seem invincible-
in love, their towering turrets a standard’s
base upon these dusty ramparts-
witnessing architecture wed landscape-
supporting our unyielding faith.
it may not always be so; victors
come and go; wars fought and lost-
as much as they are won; should
another champion capture your heart
as I myself have done, your attention
a profession of new-found love-
then, shall it...
walls lining castle ruins, where these
fortresses of our heart seem invincible-
in love, their towering turrets a standard’s
base upon these dusty ramparts-
witnessing architecture wed landscape-
supporting our unyielding faith.
it may not always be so; victors
come and go; wars fought and lost-
as much as they are won; should
another champion capture your heart
as I myself have done, your attention
a profession of new-found love-
then, shall it...
#sadness
#love
#heartbroken #lover
#heartbroken #lover
1049 reads
20 Comments
Let's stop pretending
From then to now what changed before our eyes 👁️👁️ As we are facing the truth of the deepness of the nonsense, that seems to take over what we see and hear 😞 YET it seems that there is no escaping from the negativity, and drama and confusion of some people's, mindset, as well as we see their heart has become bitter and cold as ice. For sure we use to be able to connect, on a positive level of common sense with intelligent, and knowledge with deep inner conversations 😞 YET that seems not to exist anymore, for now it's has become a thing of the...
#anger
#confusion
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#regret
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2 Comments
A Love Story
Love ferociously.
Just don't attach.
It's attachment that causes the pain, not the love.It's the desire to own,to keep, that waters the seeds and feeds the weeds of our own discontent.Our own broken heart.
How stupid are we?
Go ahead attach, attach to anything and when detachment arrives we will ache for days,weeks, months and years.Our lives will dissolve in a torrent of tears.We couldn't see that our attachment was stronger than our love.
We are all stupid!
Love, true love, never can and never will be taken from us, even if the...
Just don't attach.
It's attachment that causes the pain, not the love.It's the desire to own,to keep, that waters the seeds and feeds the weeds of our own discontent.Our own broken heart.
How stupid are we?
Go ahead attach, attach to anything and when detachment arrives we will ache for days,weeks, months and years.Our lives will dissolve in a torrent of tears.We couldn't see that our attachment was stronger than our love.
We are all stupid!
Love, true love, never can and never will be taken from us, even if the...
#heartbroken
#love
127 reads
11 Comments
I hate surprises
Oh, don't give me
Alice's intentions
and a queen of hearts
attitude.
In Wonderland,
with a good smile,
even cats disappear.
In wonder
with a good
disappear.
Cat's land smile.
Alice's intentions
and a queen of hearts
attitude.
In Wonderland,
with a good smile,
even cats disappear.
In wonder
with a good
disappear.
Cat's land smile.
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#hurt
94 reads
8 Comments
Red Light
Girls chance, dark nights
Men glance, red lights
Walk by, car stop
Eye spy, knee drop
Cheap thrill, money seek
Bitter pill, turn cheek
Nights out, morning comes
Doubts shout, pimp runs
Men glance, red lights
Walk by, car stop
Eye spy, knee drop
Cheap thrill, money seek
Bitter pill, turn cheek
Nights out, morning comes
Doubts shout, pimp runs
#despair
#heartbroken
#sadness
162 reads
12 Comments
Where's Daddy?
No lumpenproletariat allowed,
or even old fashioned non-combatants,
to survive the new killing fields plowed
by techno-feudal targeting patents
designed for destruction block by block,
instead of soldiers duel by duel,
until depleting its carpet bomb stock
or the bombers run out of noxious fuel.
Yet still the algorithm looks for him
until the mission is declared complete
when something like a special cryptonym
sends troops to search each mortuary street,
since daddy may have eluded the bomb...
which made kibble out of the...
or even old fashioned non-combatants,
to survive the new killing fields plowed
by techno-feudal targeting patents
designed for destruction block by block,
instead of soldiers duel by duel,
until depleting its carpet bomb stock
or the bombers run out of noxious fuel.
Yet still the algorithm looks for him
until the mission is declared complete
when something like a special cryptonym
sends troops to search each mortuary street,
since daddy may have eluded the bomb...
which made kibble out of the...
#heartbroken
#shame
#despair
338 reads
6 Comments
My Saudade
the pendulum swings
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my anarchist artist
missing us, and
all what once was
passion destruction
maybe just an illusion
yearning for intimacy
i suppress my urge
preventing myself
from calling you
...
the metronome moves
my heart bleeds for you
my anarchist artist
missing us, and
all what once was
passion destruction
maybe just an illusion
yearning for intimacy
i suppress my urge
preventing myself
from calling you
...
#heartbroken
#love
841 reads
20 Comments
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