Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
“A Heart That Can’t Let Go”
My heart is strong, they say,
But it falters when you’re far away.
For you are the rhythm, the steady beat,
The warmth that makes its pulse complete.
You’re the love my soul was made to find,
The thread that weaves through heart and mind.
Without you near, the world turns gray,
The brightest sun feels dim today.
My soul tie, my love, my reason to breathe,
To lose you is more than my heart can grieve.
It’s like tearing the stars from the night,
Or breaking the dawn from the morning light.
Each memory of you is etched...
But it falters when you’re far away.
For you are the rhythm, the steady beat,
The warmth that makes its pulse complete.
You’re the love my soul was made to find,
The thread that weaves through heart and mind.
Without you near, the world turns gray,
The brightest sun feels dim today.
My soul tie, my love, my reason to breathe,
To lose you is more than my heart can grieve.
It’s like tearing the stars from the night,
Or breaking the dawn from the morning light.
Each memory of you is etched...
#heartbroken
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Technical KnockOut
I know it's been a minute since I've placed a call.
But I had to pick myself up from when you made me fall.
It's definitely your fault that now I'm afraid of heights.
Who would have thought then, not to let this love take flight.
Like a pitbull, you sure do got a bite.
Protecting my left, as you swing with your right.
Love taps, thinking who turned out the lights.
Counting out loud but hearing them as ABC's.
Thinking how did this girl get me on my knees.
There's no doubt that you won that bout.
Now I'm training my mind that I can live...
But I had to pick myself up from when you made me fall.
It's definitely your fault that now I'm afraid of heights.
Who would have thought then, not to let this love take flight.
Like a pitbull, you sure do got a bite.
Protecting my left, as you swing with your right.
Love taps, thinking who turned out the lights.
Counting out loud but hearing them as ABC's.
Thinking how did this girl get me on my knees.
There's no doubt that you won that bout.
Now I'm training my mind that I can live...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love
#relationships
#separation
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breaking
my heart is bteaking inside I'm trembling
trying to remain brave
the pain I feel is all too real
culted faith, I love too hard
and my soul shatters when you are cold
not fully understanding where it comes from
it's taken personally and I fall into the dark
of never loved
because if our love falters so easily
then it never was
hard feelings, you don't understand
or I don't matter enough to try
loyalty doesn't seem to mean as much as looks
fading attraction, I don't...
trying to remain brave
the pain I feel is all too real
culted faith, I love too hard
and my soul shatters when you are cold
not fully understanding where it comes from
it's taken personally and I fall into the dark
of never loved
because if our love falters so easily
then it never was
hard feelings, you don't understand
or I don't matter enough to try
loyalty doesn't seem to mean as much as looks
fading attraction, I don't...
#heartbroken
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INFERNAL HEARTBREAK AND MORDANT TEARS
This Christmas chills
A cold fire in my bones
Her gasping words
Damn like an infernal song
On sodden leaves
I'm dying from this heartbreak
infernal
Black candles burn
Silent vigil 'til she wakes
Her open tomb
Invites me to the abyss
infernal
I can see her
Just as sweet as our last kiss
I would find you in the abyss
For one last kiss
I taste the air
I almost taste red wine and
infernal
Clove cigarettes
That lingered on her lips, goddamn
This lonely knight ...
A cold fire in my bones
Her gasping words
Damn like an infernal song
On sodden leaves
I'm dying from this heartbreak
infernal
Black candles burn
Silent vigil 'til she wakes
Her open tomb
Invites me to the abyss
infernal
I can see her
Just as sweet as our last kiss
I would find you in the abyss
For one last kiss
I taste the air
I almost taste red wine and
infernal
Clove cigarettes
That lingered on her lips, goddamn
This lonely knight ...
#dark
#death
#grief #heartbroken
#grief #heartbroken
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Cut Ya Out ..
All these years, I let you hurt me,
We both made decisions, but you blame me.
Maybe grow up and take some blame.
It’s a shame, you just wanted to play,
With fire, now you’re burning today.
We could have had so much more,
Forbidden fruits will cost their name.
Call yourself a friend, but you knew the score,
It takes two to dance; you knew what’s in store.
When the world crumbled, you blamed me,
Maybe take some responsibility.
This time I'm walking away
...
We both made decisions, but you blame me.
Maybe grow up and take some blame.
It’s a shame, you just wanted to play,
With fire, now you’re burning today.
We could have had so much more,
Forbidden fruits will cost their name.
Call yourself a friend, but you knew the score,
It takes two to dance; you knew what’s in store.
When the world crumbled, you blamed me,
Maybe take some responsibility.
This time I'm walking away
...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#love
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Dying of thirst in my empty Kool-Aid pitcher
Men have begged
for my love
women too,
and I gave it
to him
as easily
as blowing the
fuzz off
a dandelion
and I asked him to
keep me safe
from the head games
I play with myself
Long story short:
He said no.
So I’m drinking a lot.
He said no.
And I want to know what
the actual fuck is
socially wrong
in having
an
inbox
just
for
one
It's like being surrounded
by desperation-fueled
soul-desiccation,
where the...
for my love
women too,
and I gave it
to him
as easily
as blowing the
fuzz off
a dandelion
and I asked him to
keep me safe
from the head games
I play with myself
Long story short:
He said no.
So I’m drinking a lot.
He said no.
And I want to know what
the actual fuck is
socially wrong
in having
an
inbox
just
for
one
It's like being surrounded
by desperation-fueled
soul-desiccation,
where the...
#breakup
#despair
#emptiness #heartbroken
#emptiness #heartbroken
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in hope we trust / or is it just a lie
love shatters the heart
held together by hope
never being fullfilled
it's a hurt we hide
carrying with us everyday
we hide it with a smile
hide with a laugh
keeping the tears inside
watering the pain
pain that's always there
strong on the outside
fragile on the inside
strength and smiles i show
while inside
i wilt...
held together by hope
never being fullfilled
it's a hurt we hide
carrying with us everyday
we hide it with a smile
hide with a laugh
keeping the tears inside
watering the pain
pain that's always there
strong on the outside
fragile on the inside
strength and smiles i show
while inside
i wilt...
#heartbroken
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Broken Pieces ...
Trapped in a loop, no way to escape,
Memories haunt me, they won’t fade away.
See your face in the corners of my mind,
Everywhere I turn, I’m running out of time.
Heartbreak’s easier with someone new,
But I’m left holding on to the ghost of you.
Sometimes it’s better to sweep the broken pieces,
Than picking them up and cutting your fingers.
Trying to glue back what’s already gone,
Some cracks are meant to stay undone.
Cry on my shoulder, then leave me to drown,
You walked away, now I’m stuck on this ground.
Thanks...
Memories haunt me, they won’t fade away.
See your face in the corners of my mind,
Everywhere I turn, I’m running out of time.
Heartbreak’s easier with someone new,
But I’m left holding on to the ghost of you.
Sometimes it’s better to sweep the broken pieces,
Than picking them up and cutting your fingers.
Trying to glue back what’s already gone,
Some cracks are meant to stay undone.
Cry on my shoulder, then leave me to drown,
You walked away, now I’m stuck on this ground.
Thanks...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#hurt #relationships
#hurt #relationships
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rain
my darkness grows and my flicker fades
it is cruelty, I hold you still
deep within my soul your dawn has rain
lingering behind my tapestry of hurt
with intricate designs of despair
the colors rich and brutal
sewn of emotional scars and blood
dreams that didn't work out
echoes of your voice, when you still loved me
then the finality of goodbye
you left me behind
my soul in the ashes
wept uncontrollably, because I couldn't escape the pain
your phantom haunt, and no other would do in your place
my...
it is cruelty, I hold you still
deep within my soul your dawn has rain
lingering behind my tapestry of hurt
with intricate designs of despair
the colors rich and brutal
sewn of emotional scars and blood
dreams that didn't work out
echoes of your voice, when you still loved me
then the finality of goodbye
you left me behind
my soul in the ashes
wept uncontrollably, because I couldn't escape the pain
your phantom haunt, and no other would do in your place
my...
#heartbroken
#love
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First Real Heartbreak
There was a time I'd do anything for you; you had me hooked like a fish. I would’ve never left you and always stayed true. There’s no one I would’ve swam in the abyss with. But damn, you fucked up. I was obsessed when I first met you! Now that I think of it, it was the first time I ever fell in love at first sight. When you cussed me out and dismissed me as if I was a peasant from the 1800s, it didn’t just break my heart—you took a little of my soul that day. Do you remember those lottery numbers on that ticket when I won—what was it—25 or 35 dollars?
NP
NP
#healing
#heartbroken
#love
#lover
#relationships
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I Want A Divorce!
What happened to you?
You use to have the biggest smile on your face
You would always seem so positive & optimistic about everything
You were my inspiration, my confidant, my friend, my lover
You made me strive to become what I am today
Do you remember, we had nothing?
We struggled terribly
Barely any money for bills, food or decent clothing
I grew the company from just me to having over 100 employees
We made it!
I was able to buy whatever we needed or wanted
We have three homes and enough money in the bank for the rest of our lives ...
You use to have the biggest smile on your face
You would always seem so positive & optimistic about everything
You were my inspiration, my confidant, my friend, my lover
You made me strive to become what I am today
Do you remember, we had nothing?
We struggled terribly
Barely any money for bills, food or decent clothing
I grew the company from just me to having over 100 employees
We made it!
I was able to buy whatever we needed or wanted
We have three homes and enough money in the bank for the rest of our lives ...
#greed
#heartbroken
#money
#poverty
#relationships
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Grief
I almost forgot that you were gone until I woke up and realized that I was now grown.
Your face, smile, all of your features were there.
I would’ve bet my life on that.
And there I was nothin but a child again racing to give you the biggest hug that I could make.
I would have never imagined that I would be sitting here dumbfounded.
Lead not to our own understanding, those are the words those men wrote in the Bible as they went about their day, reciting potential scriptures that they wanted to include in the Bible.
God doesn’t make any mistakes are the words...
Your face, smile, all of your features were there.
I would’ve bet my life on that.
And there I was nothin but a child again racing to give you the biggest hug that I could make.
I would have never imagined that I would be sitting here dumbfounded.
Lead not to our own understanding, those are the words those men wrote in the Bible as they went about their day, reciting potential scriptures that they wanted to include in the Bible.
God doesn’t make any mistakes are the words...
#death
#grief
#heartbroken #hurt
#heartbroken #hurt
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