Fiction Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#fiction
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
21st Jan 2025 11:03am
21st Jan 2025 11:03am
A loving couple
After an intense game of Chutes & Ladders, Andrea hailed victorious over Paul
As everyone knows, Paul is a huge sore loser
He also had one to many drinks that evening
Andrea decided to showboat a bit
The showboating was in Paul's face
He didn't like this one bit
He told Andrea to back off
She wouldn't listen
With an unexpected scream, Paul slugged her twice in the mouth, knocking a tooth out
He then said, "See, you don't need that dentist visit after all. I helped you out."
Andrea said crying and upset, "That...
As everyone knows, Paul is a huge sore loser
He also had one to many drinks that evening
Andrea decided to showboat a bit
The showboating was in Paul's face
He didn't like this one bit
He told Andrea to back off
She wouldn't listen
With an unexpected scream, Paul slugged her twice in the mouth, knocking a tooth out
He then said, "See, you don't need that dentist visit after all. I helped you out."
Andrea said crying and upset, "That...
#fiction
#love
#marriage #ShortStory
#marriage #ShortStory
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
21st Jan 2025 10:52am
21st Jan 2025 10:52am
Anxiety
She told me while we were at a cafe eating lunch, that the way I live my life would make her head explode
She can't handle more then one thing at a time, due to her anxiety
I told her that I would pay her $200 dollars to see her head explode
She said today was my lucky day, pulled out a gun and shot herself in the head
Part of her head exploded onto the wall and our table
Instead of $200, I placed a $100 in her bra, since I only saw part of her head explode
I got up, paid the cashier and left
She had guts but no brains, literally
She can't handle more then one thing at a time, due to her anxiety
I told her that I would pay her $200 dollars to see her head explode
She said today was my lucky day, pulled out a gun and shot herself in the head
Part of her head exploded onto the wall and our table
Instead of $200, I placed a $100 in her bra, since I only saw part of her head explode
I got up, paid the cashier and left
She had guts but no brains, literally
#anxiety
#fiction
#horror #satirical
#horror #satirical
75 reads
10 Comments
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
21st Jan 2025 2:21am
21st Jan 2025 2:21am
Sorry About Last Night
Clare finally opened her eyes.
She discovered that she's hungover and naked.
That's before David walked in.
He gave her a cup of coffee.
"Sorry about last night.", David regretfully said.
She discovered that she's hungover and naked.
That's before David walked in.
He gave her a cup of coffee.
"Sorry about last night.", David regretfully said.
#alcohol
#coffee
#fiction
#friendship
#sex
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
20th Jan 2025 12:34pm
20th Jan 2025 12:34pm
Freaking Out
I was in my car, parked in a seedy shopping center on the outskirts of town
I was going out of my fucking head man
Not laughing or crying or anything man
I felt nothing!
Just freaking out in my head
I couldn't feel a fucking thing
Didn't know who I was or what I was, or if i was anything at all
I was totally freaking out dude
I guess I shouldn't have eaten that Whopper, with McDonald's French Fries, a Strawberry Milkshake and then went to Dunkin Donuts to buy a dozen donuts.
That shit will drive you fucking insane!
Next time I'll just...
I was going out of my fucking head man
Not laughing or crying or anything man
I felt nothing!
Just freaking out in my head
I couldn't feel a fucking thing
Didn't know who I was or what I was, or if i was anything at all
I was totally freaking out dude
I guess I shouldn't have eaten that Whopper, with McDonald's French Fries, a Strawberry Milkshake and then went to Dunkin Donuts to buy a dozen donuts.
That shit will drive you fucking insane!
Next time I'll just...
#fiction
#food
#illness
#MentalHealth
#satirical
63 reads
13 Comments
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
20th Jan 2025 11:35am
20th Jan 2025 11:35am
I Do Not Let Myself Do Threesomes!
I was just never enough
for you! Is that it?! I know
because I found this bitch
in the closet getting ready
to strip and hump your ass!
We're supposed to share
this wonderful moment
together! I do not let
myself do threesomes!
for you! Is that it?! I know
because I found this bitch
in the closet getting ready
to strip and hump your ass!
We're supposed to share
this wonderful moment
together! I do not let
myself do threesomes!
#betrayal
#dialogue
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#sex
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Green_Arrow
Poem Published
20th Jan 2025 2:30am
20th Jan 2025 2:30am
A Possible Encounter With A Ghost In The Woods
Lisa walked into the woods.
She stopped, breathed heavily and stripped down.
She felt something humping her.
She stopped, breathed heavily and stripped down.
She felt something humping her.
#corruption
#fiction
#forest
#ghosts
#sex
112 reads
2 Comments
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
19th Jan 2025 10:05pm
19th Jan 2025 10:05pm
What Did I Drink At That Party Last Night?
After the rain stopped,
Nancy woke up and saw she
was naked and next to Paul.
Nancy woke up and saw she
was naked and next to Paul.
#fiction
#friendship
#home
#rain
#sex
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Green_Arrow
Poem Published
19th Jan 2025 11:33am
19th Jan 2025 11:33am
After We Got In The Cabin
After we got in
the cabin and found ourselves
isolated by
the snow, the girls and I stripped
and hump each other right there.
the cabin and found ourselves
isolated by
the snow, the girls and I stripped
and hump each other right there.
#dialogue
#fiction
#sex
#tanka
#winter
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Green_Arrow
Poem Published
19th Jan 2025 2:17am
19th Jan 2025 2:17am
My Pal's Got Something Better To Look At
Got something to show Arnie.
He's busy looking at two naked chicks.
So much for my seashells.
He's busy looking at two naked chicks.
So much for my seashells.
#dialogue
#fiction
#friendship
#sex
#summer
105 reads
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Green_Arrow
Poem Published
17th Jan 2025 2:54pm
17th Jan 2025 2:54pm
It's The Best Way To Help Her
Just
ignore
him. Keep on
doing it to
me. It's only my
husband. He likes to watch
while he shoves his rod into
our next-door neighbor. She's going
through a messy divorce and we both
figured that it's the best way to help her.
ignore
him. Keep on
doing it to
me. It's only my
husband. He likes to watch
while he shoves his rod into
our next-door neighbor. She's going
through a messy divorce and we both
figured that it's the best way to help her.
#dialogue
#fiction
#friendship
#husband
#sex
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Green_Arrow
Poem Published
17th Jan 2025 2:03pm
17th Jan 2025 2:03pm
Outside My Bedroom Window
I would like to taste
more than her cherry
red lips whenever I
see her sunbathing
naked outside my
bedroom window.
more than her cherry
red lips whenever I
see her sunbathing
naked outside my
bedroom window.
#dialogue
#fiction
#FreeVerse
#sex
#summer
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Green_Arrow
Poem Published
17th Jan 2025 3:22am
17th Jan 2025 3:22am
One Result Of Last Night's Party
Abigail woke up
and saw she has been part of
a huge naked daisy chain.
and saw she has been part of
a huge naked daisy chain.
#corruption
#culture
#fiction
#friendship
#sex
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