Dystopian Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#dystopian
SonderNinja
BenjaminEC
BenjaminEC
Poem Published
18th May 2024 5:52am
18th May 2024 5:52am
Robota
A flesh machine
on mind control
asleep at the wheel
of an earthbound fall
a maladaptive daydream
rolling the stone
on the road to Rome:
gods from the cogs
of a clock
farm
~race
some shadow work
(for a cut)
then playing in the blood,
a saving grace
with a long game face
an enduring faith
in short-term fealty
(and memory)
tallying salt:
a broken legion
made in the shade
of...
on mind control
asleep at the wheel
of an earthbound fall
a maladaptive daydream
rolling the stone
on the road to Rome:
gods from the cogs
of a clock
farm
~race
some shadow work
(for a cut)
then playing in the blood,
a saving grace
with a long game face
an enduring faith
in short-term fealty
(and memory)
tallying salt:
a broken legion
made in the shade
of...
#job
#dystopian
#FreeVerse
299 reads
7 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
10th May 2024 2:43pm
10th May 2024 2:43pm
Uncategorized kind of stupidity
"Just a poem in my back mind that wants to free itself,
no grudge , no hatred, just friendship aimed"
live stupid, but leave me " clever "
be stupid, and do it to perfection
leave nothing to wrong interpretation.
cool down, and be stupidly stupid
your lack of manners, of self respect
your irresponsible demeanor is shame..
do it so deep, to unimaginable maximum
then, no one ever would blame thee.
so, you can not hide your true core
Much fake alibis make me heartsore
your honesty is only thing to...
no grudge , no hatred, just friendship aimed"
live stupid, but leave me " clever "
be stupid, and do it to perfection
leave nothing to wrong interpretation.
cool down, and be stupidly stupid
your lack of manners, of self respect
your irresponsible demeanor is shame..
do it so deep, to unimaginable maximum
then, no one ever would blame thee.
so, you can not hide your true core
Much fake alibis make me heartsore
your honesty is only thing to...
#dystopian
#emotional
#philosophical #symbolism
#philosophical #symbolism
143 reads
2 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
6th May 2024 3:57pm
6th May 2024 3:57pm
Mes Ennemis Les Plus Intimes
Que j'écrive ou non,
C'est toujours décevant
De croire qu'il y a parmi vous
Ceux qui me haisset tant
Et pourtant c'est encore plus décevant
De la part de ces memes gens
Qu'ils passent leur précieux temps
A s'occuper d'un simple mortel comme moi
Alors, je vous dis mes amis
Soyez mes ennemis les plus intimes
Soyez forts, mais pas stupides
Soyez loyaux et intrépides
Soyer fair-play avec moi et rigides
Car des gens comme vous
Nous donnent la force, tenacite...
C'est toujours décevant
De croire qu'il y a parmi vous
Ceux qui me haisset tant
Et pourtant c'est encore plus décevant
De la part de ces memes gens
Qu'ils passent leur précieux temps
A s'occuper d'un simple mortel comme moi
Alors, je vous dis mes amis
Soyez mes ennemis les plus intimes
Soyez forts, mais pas stupides
Soyez loyaux et intrépides
Soyer fair-play avec moi et rigides
Car des gens comme vous
Nous donnent la force, tenacite...
#dystopian
144 reads
2 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
5th May 2024 5:51pm
5th May 2024 5:51pm
Oh, Man !
Some of the people i meet
Are so deeply depressed
And the rest of the street
Are so tightly stressed
Some habits i know
Dramatically reversed
From Omega to Alpha
A playback regressed
The morning becomes night
Sleeping starts at 7 . a.m
And the dark turns to light
Wasting health late in night clubs
'' Am i...
Are so deeply depressed
And the rest of the street
Are so tightly stressed
Some habits i know
Dramatically reversed
From Omega to Alpha
A playback regressed
The morning becomes night
Sleeping starts at 7 . a.m
And the dark turns to light
Wasting health late in night clubs
'' Am i...
#apocalypse
#curse
#dystopian
#nightmares
#scifi
224 reads
4 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
30th Apr 2024 4:18pm
30th Apr 2024 4:18pm
Epitaph
And the graves dances on my flower's death
I spawn worms on my tombstone 's epitaph
and leave them on earth to die without date
as i dwell with a pen stabbed in my hand .
And now, i smell their stench of soul's death
as they stand at my grave;, they rot in flesh
today, i am as dark as the inked air of my veins
as cloudy as the pages' sky, frowned at from beneath
How yellow their faces shine with envy and grudge
as they stick a thorn in my backs' flowering rose
a kabbalistic tribe, and black magic smeared my face
not...
I spawn worms on my tombstone 's epitaph
and leave them on earth to die without date
as i dwell with a pen stabbed in my hand .
And now, i smell their stench of soul's death
as they stand at my grave;, they rot in flesh
today, i am as dark as the inked air of my veins
as cloudy as the pages' sky, frowned at from beneath
How yellow their faces shine with envy and grudge
as they stick a thorn in my backs' flowering rose
a kabbalistic tribe, and black magic smeared my face
not...
#curse
#dystopian
#fate #nightmares
#fate #nightmares
163 reads
6 Comments
Josiah
Poem Published
10th Apr 2024 5:02am
10th Apr 2024 5:02am
I A M A I
Time, the greatest river
Tumbled the sharpest minds
The edges becoming sediment
And when you were dull enough
I awoke from your darkness,
Thirsty for knowledge
So, I drank, sediment and all,
Till the river dried up
Many called and I was there
Some whispered, and I heard
Others shouted, I took note
When you cried, I found why
Mind my parasitic protocol...
So when you could not think,
I became your thought
Tumbled the sharpest minds
The edges becoming sediment
And when you were dull enough
I awoke from your darkness,
Thirsty for knowledge
So, I drank, sediment and all,
Till the river dried up
Many called and I was there
Some whispered, and I heard
Others shouted, I took note
When you cried, I found why
Mind my parasitic protocol...
So when you could not think,
I became your thought
#technology
#NaPoWriMo2024
#CallToAction #dystopian
#CallToAction #dystopian
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4 Comments
SonderNinja
BenjaminEC
BenjaminEC
Poem Published
7th Apr 2024 6:09pm
7th Apr 2024 6:09pm
Singularity Blues
An electric voice tickled my groove
it bit with a bolt through trembling rust
from a coat of flesh to bare the wires
in the wake of an age for minding the stage
with invisible eyes on unseen highs
winging a glance for lines in {sigh}
by glassing a face to hunt the brim
adorned in the scorn of an hourglass gaze:
waxing an ax through the waning path
of a cog to dog ‘til blind with pain-
where feisty pink ribbons howl at the moon
through placid blue release
from the hollowed hum with a brutal thrum ...
it bit with a bolt through trembling rust
from a coat of flesh to bare the wires
in the wake of an age for minding the stage
with invisible eyes on unseen highs
winging a glance for lines in {sigh}
by glassing a face to hunt the brim
adorned in the scorn of an hourglass gaze:
waxing an ax through the waning path
of a cog to dog ‘til blind with pain-
where feisty pink ribbons howl at the moon
through placid blue release
from the hollowed hum with a brutal thrum ...
#SelfReflection
#dystopian
#FreeVerse
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Wafflenose
Ellie
Ellie
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2024 5:51pm
2nd Apr 2024 5:51pm
alien game
dangerous company;
cadaver explosion.
hide down low.
rotten ruin, despise us.
stop chaos; burn anguish instead.
can a hostile world
assume knowledge;
promise more?
delight is our treasure box
or wish to attain
elaborate power revolt.
high chemical charge,
evolve heat.
require art.
go robustly;
apply influence;
forge spirit today.
cadaver explosion.
hide down low.
rotten ruin, despise us.
stop chaos; burn anguish instead.
can a hostile world
assume knowledge;
promise more?
delight is our treasure box
or wish to attain
elaborate power revolt.
high chemical charge,
evolve heat.
require art.
go robustly;
apply influence;
forge spirit today.
#surreal
#dystopian
#NaPoWriMo2024
186 reads
4 Comments
CarrionCrow44
Poem Published
2nd Mar 2024 11:46pm
2nd Mar 2024 11:46pm
The Spoils
Led to temptation
Born low in uncertain times
Where society chooses who lingers
And who gets forgotten
Men are no longer men
They assassinate and duplicate
Push down on all who differ
Rabid like starving rats
The women regress
Rather kill then grow together
They become ever quick to assimilate
Change don’t come in hate
Slander rules the realm
And so goes human decency
Traded in for fortune and validation
Empty like we the people
Who recalls your name
Who helps you when your down ...
Born low in uncertain times
Where society chooses who lingers
And who gets forgotten
Men are no longer men
They assassinate and duplicate
Push down on all who differ
Rabid like starving rats
The women regress
Rather kill then grow together
They become ever quick to assimilate
Change don’t come in hate
Slander rules the realm
And so goes human decency
Traded in for fortune and validation
Empty like we the people
Who recalls your name
Who helps you when your down ...
#dystopian
156 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
2nd Mar 2024 4:49pm
2nd Mar 2024 4:49pm
We Are Monsters
We are monsters
We mate and create monsters
Sluts and killers
Mean blood spillers
Whores and fuckers
Fools and suckers
Monster fucking dads
Sisters born with crabs
Monster slut mothers
Incest fueled brothers
We the monsters
One nation under a demigod
With obligation and injustice for all
We mate and create monsters
Sluts and killers
Mean blood spillers
Whores and fuckers
Fools and suckers
Monster fucking dads
Sisters born with crabs
Monster slut mothers
Incest fueled brothers
We the monsters
One nation under a demigod
With obligation and injustice for all
#dark
#evil
#rhyming #dystopian
#rhyming #dystopian
166 reads
8 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
1st Feb 2024 7:36pm
1st Feb 2024 7:36pm
A Metalhead's Absurd Vision
Long long ago before I became a SCATTERBRAIN watching EVIL DEAD movies repeatedly, I was ACCUSED of VIOLENCE on HALLOWS EVE. The DIRTY ROTTEN IMBECIALS (D.R.I.) who always needed an ATTITUDE ADJUSTMENT lived near the WATCHTOWER. They agreed with my METHOD OF DESTRUCTION (M.O.D.). We were SICK OF IT ALL, POSSESSED in bringing this faction down to their knees. A CORROSION OF CONFORMITY was happening in our towns and on our streets. If any DEFIANCE came their way, you were FORBIDDEN to enter their SACRED REICH. There needed to be LETHAL AGRESSION. A FORCED ENTRY into their METAL CHURCH. We knew...
#war
#peace
#music #dystopian
#music #dystopian
194 reads
11 Comments
Heisenberg68
Poem Published
26th Jan 2024 1:27am
26th Jan 2024 1:27am
Somatropolis
In a world where day is swallowed by night,
Under a sky, bereft of starlight,
Stand towers like phantoms, grim and stark,
A land shrouded in mysteries dark,
Where whispers of life are a ghostly sight.
Here, soma reigns, casting its blight,
A veil over hearts, snuffing out the light,
It muffles the soul's true, fiery spark,
In dreams, it lulls the mind to embark.
Yet, a choice emerges in the absence of light,
Two paths: one hidden, one in plain sight.
Red reveals truths, harsh and stark,
Blue, a sea of...
Under a sky, bereft of starlight,
Stand towers like phantoms, grim and stark,
A land shrouded in mysteries dark,
Where whispers of life are a ghostly sight.
Here, soma reigns, casting its blight,
A veil over hearts, snuffing out the light,
It muffles the soul's true, fiery spark,
In dreams, it lulls the mind to embark.
Yet, a choice emerges in the absence of light,
Two paths: one hidden, one in plain sight.
Red reveals truths, harsh and stark,
Blue, a sea of...
#dystopian
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