Breakup Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#breakup
breakup seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Dying of thirst in my empty Kool-Aid pitcher
Men have begged
for my love
women too,
and I gave it
to him
as easily
as blowing the
fuzz off
a dandelion
and I asked him to
keep me safe
from the head games
I play with myself
Long story short:
He said no.
So I’m drinking a lot.
He said no.
And I want to know what
the actual fuck is
socially wrong
in having
an
inbox
just
for
one
It's like being surrounded
by desperation-fueled
soul-desiccation,
where the...
for my love
women too,
and I gave it
to him
as easily
as blowing the
fuzz off
a dandelion
and I asked him to
keep me safe
from the head games
I play with myself
Long story short:
He said no.
So I’m drinking a lot.
He said no.
And I want to know what
the actual fuck is
socially wrong
in having
an
inbox
just
for
one
It's like being surrounded
by desperation-fueled
soul-desiccation,
where the...
#breakup
#despair
#emptiness #heartbroken
#emptiness #heartbroken
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Broken Pieces ...
Trapped in a loop, no way to escape,
Memories haunt me, they won’t fade away.
See your face in the corners of my mind,
Everywhere I turn, I’m running out of time.
Heartbreak’s easier with someone new,
But I’m left holding on to the ghost of you.
Sometimes it’s better to sweep the broken pieces,
Than picking them up and cutting your fingers.
Trying to glue back what’s already gone,
Some cracks are meant to stay undone.
Cry on my shoulder, then leave me to drown,
You walked away, now I’m stuck on this ground.
Thanks...
Memories haunt me, they won’t fade away.
See your face in the corners of my mind,
Everywhere I turn, I’m running out of time.
Heartbreak’s easier with someone new,
But I’m left holding on to the ghost of you.
Sometimes it’s better to sweep the broken pieces,
Than picking them up and cutting your fingers.
Trying to glue back what’s already gone,
Some cracks are meant to stay undone.
Cry on my shoulder, then leave me to drown,
You walked away, now I’m stuck on this ground.
Thanks...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#hurt #relationships
#hurt #relationships
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Heartbreak
Heartbreak!
swept with remorse
last note, unspoken thoughts
a chasm much too wide to cross
plummet
swept with remorse
last note, unspoken thoughts
a chasm much too wide to cross
plummet
#breakup
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Ode to the Drunk Girl, Don't Text That Man
Babe, we’ve talked about this too many times to be sane.
Put your cell phone away, there’s nothing to be gained
from texting a man who knows you miss him.
You sent the long paragraph, he doesn’t care,
which is why you’re six shots in, and I’m holding your hair.
You can’t fix him, he’s not a flat tire.
His mama should have named him “Selfish Fucking Liar”.
In fact, we’re changing his contact name to that right now.
Give me your phone, your keys, and sit your ass back down.
He forgot your birthday and didn’t know your favorite song. ...
Put your cell phone away, there’s nothing to be gained
from texting a man who knows you miss him.
You sent the long paragraph, he doesn’t care,
which is why you’re six shots in, and I’m holding your hair.
You can’t fix him, he’s not a flat tire.
His mama should have named him “Selfish Fucking Liar”.
In fact, we’re changing his contact name to that right now.
Give me your phone, your keys, and sit your ass back down.
He forgot your birthday and didn’t know your favorite song. ...
#alcohol
#breakup
#friendship
#love
#motivational
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Redemption (Open Verse)
Intro:
You know,
I once heard this quote
And this quote said
“No matter how hard your heart is broken, the world doesn’t stop for your grief”
So no matter how fractured you are, you can’t stop going
The world doesn’t stop, so we continue to move with it
So, let me take a moment to get this off of my chest
Verse:
The thought constantly haunts my mind
Of how you up and left me during the darkest of times
I thought when we agreed, I had your back, you had mine
I put my heart on the line, just to get stabbed in the spine
...
You know,
I once heard this quote
And this quote said
“No matter how hard your heart is broken, the world doesn’t stop for your grief”
So no matter how fractured you are, you can’t stop going
The world doesn’t stop, so we continue to move with it
So, let me take a moment to get this off of my chest
Verse:
The thought constantly haunts my mind
Of how you up and left me during the darkest of times
I thought when we agreed, I had your back, you had mine
I put my heart on the line, just to get stabbed in the spine
...
#breakup
#healing
#hurt #love
#hurt #love
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Club Promotor
#breakup
#drugs
#heartbroken
#marijuana
#sex
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The Wounds of Love
I can't recall what’s real, or if I dream,
A scream resounds within, though silence seems
To choke my voice, to halt my every plea,
This hollow stillness smothers what’s left of me.
Love has left me battered, torn, and blind,
Awaking to a world I cannot find,
A shattered self with nothing left to hold,
Pain’s cruel embrace is all that’s uncontrolled.
I hold my breath and wish for endless sleep,
Oh, God, deliver me, my soul to keep.
Back in the dark, I feel too much to bear,
A pulse, a life, but none to grant me care, ...
A scream resounds within, though silence seems
To choke my voice, to halt my every plea,
This hollow stillness smothers what’s left of me.
Love has left me battered, torn, and blind,
Awaking to a world I cannot find,
A shattered self with nothing left to hold,
Pain’s cruel embrace is all that’s uncontrolled.
I hold my breath and wish for endless sleep,
Oh, God, deliver me, my soul to keep.
Back in the dark, I feel too much to bear,
A pulse, a life, but none to grant me care, ...
#breakup
#hurt
#love
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Faded Away
You were my rose,
The beautiful flower that grew in the dark,
All I knew, all I loved,
A light in my emptiness,
A balm for your void.
It felt like a dream,
Building bridges from pain,
Walking through rain,
Dancing in storms,
Bound together,
Broken yet whole.
Each day with you was sunlight spilling through the window,
Chasing shadows away.
We laughed,
We smiled,
Our secrets we whispered,
Our meaning grew deep,
Our love felt eternal.
But then we woke up.
The bridges burned, ...
The beautiful flower that grew in the dark,
All I knew, all I loved,
A light in my emptiness,
A balm for your void.
It felt like a dream,
Building bridges from pain,
Walking through rain,
Dancing in storms,
Bound together,
Broken yet whole.
Each day with you was sunlight spilling through the window,
Chasing shadows away.
We laughed,
We smiled,
Our secrets we whispered,
Our meaning grew deep,
Our love felt eternal.
But then we woke up.
The bridges burned, ...
#breakup
#hurt
#love #relationships
#love #relationships
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Maybe I'm the Toxic One
Warning][warning]
Stay away from me
[Warning][warning]
Maximum toxicity
Another romantic relationship ends like they do
Happens everytime, every one I get into
When it comes to relationships, I'm think I'm done
Looks like I may be the toxic one
Another romance ends in mental abuse
Seems like everytime someone blows a fuse
She walked out the door and now she's gone
Must be that I'm the toxic one
~Chorus~
My toxicity level is at max
[Warning][warning]
Time for me to face The facts
It's best for me that...
Stay away from me
[Warning][warning]
Maximum toxicity
Another romantic relationship ends like they do
Happens everytime, every one I get into
When it comes to relationships, I'm think I'm done
Looks like I may be the toxic one
Another romance ends in mental abuse
Seems like everytime someone blows a fuse
She walked out the door and now she's gone
Must be that I'm the toxic one
~Chorus~
My toxicity level is at max
[Warning][warning]
Time for me to face The facts
It's best for me that...
#breakup
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Family Secrets
Family Secrets
Don’t go round selling family secrets
The secrets I know would get me murdered
The things that I know wish I was dementia
The things I know I wish I could forget em
She smiles at me at the mention I know what she is worth surviving millions
But I must agree she is a beauty my heart still
Belongs to her even if I hate her
My heart belongs to her
She hates me but she won’t leave me
Don’t go round selling family secrets
The secrets I know would get me murdered
The things that I know wish I was dementia
The things I know I wish I could forget em
She smiles at me at the mention I know what she is worth surviving millions
But I must agree she is a beauty my heart still
Belongs to her even if I hate her
My heart belongs to her
She hates me but she won’t leave me
#breakup
#hate
#love #money
#love #money
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Farewell
Acting like I need to mend.
Implying that I'm broken.
Tells a weakness in your head.
As insults often spoken.
Your ignorance to see.
Is easy to believe.
Your good intentions may be,
The reason I grit my teeth.
Your tactics of goodwill.
Manipulative speech.
Your practiced fictitious guilt.
Is just not worth the grief.
It's time for me to leave.
The only contrition I feel.
Is for overwhelming relief.
But you I can never tell.
Silence says my farewell.
A R.M.
...
Implying that I'm broken.
Tells a weakness in your head.
As insults often spoken.
Your ignorance to see.
Is easy to believe.
Your good intentions may be,
The reason I grit my teeth.
Your tactics of goodwill.
Manipulative speech.
Your practiced fictitious guilt.
Is just not worth the grief.
It's time for me to leave.
The only contrition I feel.
Is for overwhelming relief.
But you I can never tell.
Silence says my farewell.
A R.M.
...
#breakup
#manipulation
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I miss you so
I don't care on what they say to you,
I will never ever make you blue
people say that I'm no good for you,
but I can give you love that will be true
I sit in my room and I pray, that you'll come back to me someday
I can't go on living this way anymore
I look out my window and all I see, are people walking down the street
I look for your face in the crowd and your not there
Since you've been gone I haven't felt the same,
because you said once that you would take my name
i don't care if takes 100 years,
or if I had to cry 1...
I will never ever make you blue
people say that I'm no good for you,
but I can give you love that will be true
I sit in my room and I pray, that you'll come back to me someday
I can't go on living this way anymore
I look out my window and all I see, are people walking down the street
I look for your face in the crowd and your not there
Since you've been gone I haven't felt the same,
because you said once that you would take my name
i don't care if takes 100 years,
or if I had to cry 1...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#lyrics
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DU Poetry : Breakup Seeking Honest Critique Poems