Breakup Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#breakup
breakup seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
sgtvasquezg
G. Vasquez
G. Vasquez
Poem Published
5th Mar 2025 3:44am
5th Mar 2025 3:44am
Rewind
You can't say that I didn't try.
I gave you what I could.
I even let you have my mind.
Nights I prayed,
And days I use to fantasize.
I was mesmerized how I reflected in your eyes.
Plus I hate to mention,
All the little dirty things you would do for me.
Flowers just because.
Reminiscing on what once was.
Holding hands when we bent the block.
Late night smoke sessions.
And early morning pillow talks.
Sexing you above the sheets.
While the radio played slow beats.
I'd like to press rewind,
Just to find what we lost...
I gave you what I could.
I even let you have my mind.
Nights I prayed,
And days I use to fantasize.
I was mesmerized how I reflected in your eyes.
Plus I hate to mention,
All the little dirty things you would do for me.
Flowers just because.
Reminiscing on what once was.
Holding hands when we bent the block.
Late night smoke sessions.
And early morning pillow talks.
Sexing you above the sheets.
While the radio played slow beats.
I'd like to press rewind,
Just to find what we lost...
#breakup
#ILoveYou
#love
#relationships
#romantic
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QuietlyOutspoken
Poem Published
3rd Mar 2025 1:01am
3rd Mar 2025 1:01am
21 Seasons
You promised me everything I’ve never had
Coffee and Halloween candy
Always confidently saying “she’s not that much younger than me”
What I thought was love was only pity
And fucked up codependency
I should’ve known this is how it would end
From the first moment we met
You were biting her neck
And staring at me
Now when I look you in the eyes
I’m pressing on a bruise
That’s three different shades of blue
Because you gave her a ring
While always promising me the same thing
I thought you’d come back when...
Coffee and Halloween candy
Always confidently saying “she’s not that much younger than me”
What I thought was love was only pity
And fucked up codependency
I should’ve known this is how it would end
From the first moment we met
You were biting her neck
And staring at me
Now when I look you in the eyes
I’m pressing on a bruise
That’s three different shades of blue
Because you gave her a ring
While always promising me the same thing
I thought you’d come back when...
#breakup
#heartbroken
#lover
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Seed
Poem Published
28th Feb 2025 4:46pm
28th Feb 2025 4:46pm
Sunflower
You are a sunflower
The glory in any flield
I wanted you from a far
But your love was too much
I wanted to be yours
To lick your honeysuckle
To smell your nectar bloom
But your love was too much
You are a sunflower
Green eyes and golden skin
I'm the daffodil king
And I loved you too much
You're a sunflower growing wild
A beauty among the bees
You're not just another wildflower
And I could never tame you
No, I could never tame you
Your love was too high a price to pay
So, I'll...
The glory in any flield
I wanted you from a far
But your love was too much
I wanted to be yours
To lick your honeysuckle
To smell your nectar bloom
But your love was too much
You are a sunflower
Green eyes and golden skin
I'm the daffodil king
And I loved you too much
You're a sunflower growing wild
A beauty among the bees
You're not just another wildflower
And I could never tame you
No, I could never tame you
Your love was too high a price to pay
So, I'll...
#breakup
#flowers
#freedom
#love
#lover
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LostViking
Lost Viking
Lost Viking
Poem Published
26th Feb 2025 1:25pm
26th Feb 2025 1:25pm
The New Woman
I envy her, the new woman,
Whose lips you now taste,
Gently, tenderly, like a secret
Whispered between breaths.
Her body is a temple that chains,
A captor of your soul I could not hold,
A purveyor of the sweetest euphoria.
She now lies beside you in darkness,
Her warmth, a stark reminder
Of the stranger now hold in my bed.
Forgive me, for I covet
The sinful thrill of your touch,
A remnant of longing for the forbidden,
A delight that dances with shadows.
I praise the new woman, this stranger,
The new keeper...
Whose lips you now taste,
Gently, tenderly, like a secret
Whispered between breaths.
Her body is a temple that chains,
A captor of your soul I could not hold,
A purveyor of the sweetest euphoria.
She now lies beside you in darkness,
Her warmth, a stark reminder
Of the stranger now hold in my bed.
Forgive me, for I covet
The sinful thrill of your touch,
A remnant of longing for the forbidden,
A delight that dances with shadows.
I praise the new woman, this stranger,
The new keeper...
#betrayal
#breakup
#sex
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SweetOblivion
Poem Published
24th Feb 2025 3:16pm
24th Feb 2025 3:16pm
Eminence Grise
#breakup
#lust
68 reads
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Nil
Nolan
Nolan
Poem Published
23rd Feb 2025 3:16am
23rd Feb 2025 3:16am
Poorly Worded Closure for a Girl I Used to Know
I met the girl of my dreams.
An existential compliment.
To everything I thought I wanted.
And,
We didn't really stay together.
At the end.
We just didn't care.
But, we were inseparable from the start.
A passion past by on lazy hazy grey days.
Where the sun hides behind dismal clouds.
Brooding in the sky.
She was my own personal manic pixie dream girl.
That I heard about in movies.
I never watch.
Yet,
I pushed her away.
I cheated,
I lied,
I took her for granted.
I acted...
An existential compliment.
To everything I thought I wanted.
And,
We didn't really stay together.
At the end.
We just didn't care.
But, we were inseparable from the start.
A passion past by on lazy hazy grey days.
Where the sun hides behind dismal clouds.
Brooding in the sky.
She was my own personal manic pixie dream girl.
That I heard about in movies.
I never watch.
Yet,
I pushed her away.
I cheated,
I lied,
I took her for granted.
I acted...
#bittersweet
#breakup
#MovingOn
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NP_NP
Poem Published
20th Feb 2025 9:16pm
20th Feb 2025 9:16pm
10 Years
"I don’t want you to hate me," He says
Then she says, “I could never hate you,
You built a strong woman with your insults.
Now I know what I will and won’t put up with.”
You taught me to cook,
How refreshing it is to bake cookies at midnight.
You’re the reason I dance
In the frozen section to music I never knew.
We bonded over our broken pasts,
Both of us screaming childhood screams.
We saw the worst in those
Who were supposed to love us.
Insults echoing in our homes. ...
Then she says, “I could never hate you,
You built a strong woman with your insults.
Now I know what I will and won’t put up with.”
You taught me to cook,
How refreshing it is to bake cookies at midnight.
You’re the reason I dance
In the frozen section to music I never knew.
We bonded over our broken pasts,
Both of us screaming childhood screams.
We saw the worst in those
Who were supposed to love us.
Insults echoing in our homes. ...
#breakup
#dark
#gothic
#love
#sadness
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Nizana
Lauryn
Lauryn
Poem Published
20th Feb 2025 5:48pm
20th Feb 2025 5:48pm
Beginning at the Ending of Love
His eyes were new to me and glistened
With a tender hope that I couldn't return.
He watched my face, searching as I knelt,
Lost in a sea of regret but longing for human touch.
His hand on my bare shoulders reminded me
Of other men. A flush of shame warmed my cheeks
As I thought of this man’s wife.
The weight of my hands betrayed the fatigue
From fifteen years of holding together a marriage that
Died despite my desperate grip.
I lowered my head, inhaling deeply,
Trying to steady the relentless drumming...
With a tender hope that I couldn't return.
He watched my face, searching as I knelt,
Lost in a sea of regret but longing for human touch.
His hand on my bare shoulders reminded me
Of other men. A flush of shame warmed my cheeks
As I thought of this man’s wife.
The weight of my hands betrayed the fatigue
From fifteen years of holding together a marriage that
Died despite my desperate grip.
I lowered my head, inhaling deeply,
Trying to steady the relentless drumming...
#breakup
#lust
#sex
189 reads
4 Comments
Nachiyobe
Poem Published
20th Feb 2025 9:51am
20th Feb 2025 9:51am
Confessions After the Fact Pt 1
I had a good man once... but,
I lost him in the battle of to save him,
From the darker parts of the light he held in his eyes,
The parts that twist and coil within me.
And Lord knows I tried,
Tried to patch up and piece together,
The fragments of my wild heart,
And silence the shadows that whisper in the dead of night,
The secrets I kept inside,
Secrets so dark I was intent on keeping them hidden,
Trapped in the silk of my silence....
I thought,
Yeah I thought that if I could just show him the light,
Only the...
I lost him in the battle of to save him,
From the darker parts of the light he held in his eyes,
The parts that twist and coil within me.
And Lord knows I tried,
Tried to patch up and piece together,
The fragments of my wild heart,
And silence the shadows that whisper in the dead of night,
The secrets I kept inside,
Secrets so dark I was intent on keeping them hidden,
Trapped in the silk of my silence....
I thought,
Yeah I thought that if I could just show him the light,
Only the...
#bittersweet
#breakup
#heartbroken
#MovingOn
#TimeHeals
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NoQuarter
Poem Published
17th Feb 2025 8:15pm
17th Feb 2025 8:15pm
I Don't Want To Be Studied
I don't want to be studied,
laid bare beneath your judgemental ways,
each mumbled word, each clumsy deed,
examined in a critical haze.
You pick apart my every thought,
my motivations, deep inside,
as if some hidden lesson's taught,
in how my restless feelings ride.
I don't want to be a puzzle,
a complex problem you must solve,
my thoughts a landscape, rough and subtle,
not something neat to resolve.
You search for patterns, hidden flaws,
the reasons why we couldn't stay,
ignoring nature's...
laid bare beneath your judgemental ways,
each mumbled word, each clumsy deed,
examined in a critical haze.
You pick apart my every thought,
my motivations, deep inside,
as if some hidden lesson's taught,
in how my restless feelings ride.
I don't want to be a puzzle,
a complex problem you must solve,
my thoughts a landscape, rough and subtle,
not something neat to resolve.
You search for patterns, hidden flaws,
the reasons why we couldn't stay,
ignoring nature's...
#breakup
#conflict
78 reads
1 Comment
COOPCAT
Poem Published
14th Feb 2025 10:12am
14th Feb 2025 10:12am
SALTY WIND
Salty wind
Caught in her silky hair
Smells the same
As my salty skin
When it was breathing love
The salty scent so sweet
Wrapped in the color of my flawless mind
That was imprinted in her memories
As a passport to paradise
Caught in her silky hair
Smells the same
As my salty skin
When it was breathing love
The salty scent so sweet
Wrapped in the color of my flawless mind
That was imprinted in her memories
As a passport to paradise
#breakup
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gothicsurrealism
Daniel Long
Daniel Long
Poem Published
11th Feb 2025 7:24pm
11th Feb 2025 7:24pm
Eyes Cloudy
Eyes once bright with sunlight.
Now clouded with thunderstorms.
Stormy arguments on our horizon,
I don’t understand what happened to us.
Eyes once serenely an oasis.
Now a tempest booms in our hearts.
Hues of rage and sorrow paint our horizon,
I’m confounded whether we’ll be the same.
Now clouded with thunderstorms.
Stormy arguments on our horizon,
I don’t understand what happened to us.
Eyes once serenely an oasis.
Now a tempest booms in our hearts.
Hues of rage and sorrow paint our horizon,
I’m confounded whether we’ll be the same.
#breakup
#depression
#love
#sadness
#surreal
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