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A Slap In The Face
I wish you'd stayed longer
with enough time to drop me a few lines
though you did in a poem with a sound rebuke
whether intended for me or not
it slapped my face
your drinking days are over
mine in full swing
wasting time, time is ticking
and we don't have long to make things matter
why your opinion means so much to me
I don't know but it does
you've touched my core
stir my blood
make me think
time is ticking
to do something of importance
is what counts
you ground me
thank you like an angel on earth
though with prickly spines
I can identify with
you reach me and so many others
you matter, you make a difference
I just wanted you to know
with enough time to drop me a few lines
though you did in a poem with a sound rebuke
whether intended for me or not
it slapped my face
your drinking days are over
mine in full swing
wasting time, time is ticking
and we don't have long to make things matter
why your opinion means so much to me
I don't know but it does
you've touched my core
stir my blood
make me think
time is ticking
to do something of importance
is what counts
you ground me
thank you like an angel on earth
though with prickly spines
I can identify with
you reach me and so many others
you matter, you make a difference
I just wanted you to know
Published 12th Mar 2013
| Edited 19th Mar 2013
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Anonymous
13th Mar 2013 00:06am
well penned, a good read
25th Mar 2013 6:53am
Anonymous
13th Mar 2013 00:38am
great read crim
strider...
strider...
25th Mar 2013 6:54am
13th Mar 2013 2:21am
25th Mar 2013 6:55am
13th Mar 2013 8:00am
How words can sting more than any physical slap.
Great expression and pen Crim. :)
Great expression and pen Crim. :)
25th Mar 2013 6:56am
13th Mar 2013 9:16am
Aweeee.. wow.. anyone that can get that close to you must be one hell of a person.. bows baby girl. much love dark princess.
25th Mar 2013 6:57am
Mistress of darkness I have my weaknesses..I love you beautiful lady..hugs Crim
Anonymous
13th Mar 2013 9:48am
Very lovely and sentimental with fascinating layers to it, great write crim, peace
25th Mar 2013 6:58am
