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through trees
what the fuck is this writers writing about writers?
(now i'm doing it)
i think
when there's no story to tell
no convincing imagination
it's time to stop reading
i know school
i know it's wettin' sparks
and waiting for fire
(i stood in the kitchen this morning
looking through the trees
at these big white wings writhing
amazed at this alien bird
my eyes were glued
glued
to a woman shaking
sheets out her window)
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Re: through trees
27th Feb 2013 9:27am
Nice, I get it. Can't really articulate exactly what I get right now, due to a herbal substance. Point well made though Mr A.
liked the wettin' sparks and waiting for fire analogy, I'll be using that next time I have a conversation that allows it :)
Good stuff man.
liked the wettin' sparks and waiting for fire analogy, I'll be using that next time I have a conversation that allows it :)
Good stuff man.
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re: Re: through trees
27th Feb 2013 11:14am
So through trees had a double meaning then. :)
I actually left some of this poem out, because it looked a little too ranty, and that's boring.
Use it, use it all before it's digital dust. Cheers for your thoughts, Eamon.
I actually left some of this poem out, because it looked a little too ranty, and that's boring.
Use it, use it all before it's digital dust. Cheers for your thoughts, Eamon.
Re: through trees
27th Feb 2013 10:36am
re: Re: through trees
27th Feb 2013 11:17am
CD's herbal substance? You must be crazy, or something similar.
Cheers nonetheless for patting my back. :)
Cheers nonetheless for patting my back. :)
Re: through trees
27th Feb 2013 4:46pm
who's writing who's(whose)writer
riting...sub'stance?herb'al?
yes,
eye all ways stand'under myown sub-stance, regard
less[of]
con'sequence[s].........
this world would be a'flutterin'Eden if wee'd all shake-our-sheets
out some wind'ows
i digs this tree-lined alptrauma dra'ma...
bravo,maestro
riting...sub'stance?herb'al?
yes,
eye all ways stand'under myown sub-stance, regard
less[of]
con'sequence[s].........
this world would be a'flutterin'Eden if wee'd all shake-our-sheets
out some wind'ows
i digs this tree-lined alptrauma dra'ma...
bravo,maestro
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re: Re: through trees
28th Feb 2013 6:06am
Substance, substance, substance. The more I say it, the more it diminishes.
Thank you, for the gracious comment, saxman.
Thank you, for the gracious comment, saxman.
Re: through trees
27th Feb 2013 4:57pm
*chuckles*
It's been going on since time immortal Mr. A.
Lord Byron's "Dedication" to Robert Southey (Poet Laureate) in "Don Juan"
http://englishhistory.net/byron/poems/juanded.html
Loved your images in this :)
It's been going on since time immortal Mr. A.
Lord Byron's "Dedication" to Robert Southey (Poet Laureate) in "Don Juan"
http://englishhistory.net/byron/poems/juanded.html
Loved your images in this :)
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re: Re: through trees
28th Feb 2013 5:29am
Hey, I know this(don't particularly like any Byrons or lords in literature).
I think to praise or just write about another writer in certain ways leaves the reader outside the poem. Poetry, for a long time, was written to be spoken nice and loud. Times change. The reader is drawn in close, subtly. Just not much of a fan of poetry that demands an audience, as opposed to a single reader. This was all in the poem, before editing.
Cheers for the comment, Maggie.
I think to praise or just write about another writer in certain ways leaves the reader outside the poem. Poetry, for a long time, was written to be spoken nice and loud. Times change. The reader is drawn in close, subtly. Just not much of a fan of poetry that demands an audience, as opposed to a single reader. This was all in the poem, before editing.
Cheers for the comment, Maggie.
Re: through trees
27th Feb 2013 7:27pm
seems like you left out things to leave open for interpretation. i like that..........
well done mr. A.......
well done mr. A.......
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re: Re: through trees
28th Feb 2013 6:07am
I left stuff out to make way for art, which was probably a mistake. Cheers for stopping by, rot.
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28th Feb 2013 6:34am
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