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Poet, Exposed
Hooded nib exposed
he takes it in hand
under cloak of darkness
Calloused, work-weary fingers
curl intimately
around its smooth girth
He begins the ancient rythym
Slow, hesitant strokes
coaxing, teasing
gently kneading
pleading for sweet release
Strokes grow bolder
gun-fire quick
furious, angry strokes
to wring forth
each spilling seed
Retreat, pace slows
as the last drips out
dreamily
drop by sweet drop
Black pearls
upon the page
Reading his words now
I can't help but wonder
is it me he thinks of
when he writes?
Published 22nd Feb 2013
| Edited 1st May 2013
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22nd Feb 2013 3:15am
Nice job here Low-lah. not sure if it was your aim ,but I found lots of tongue in cheek hidden about the place, brought a smile.
you're getting the hang of this free verse pretty quick.
some really nice ebbs and flows, these lines are especially lyrical:
"Slow, hesitant strokes
coaxing, teasing
gently kneading
pleading for sweet release"
good stuff, shine on
you're getting the hang of this free verse pretty quick.
some really nice ebbs and flows, these lines are especially lyrical:
"Slow, hesitant strokes
coaxing, teasing
gently kneading
pleading for sweet release"
good stuff, shine on
22nd Feb 2013 3:30am
You're only not sure because you don't know me! LOL!
My tongue is always planted firmly in cheek.
I thank you for the encouragement and the words!
Low-lah. As opposed to L-O-L-A Lola? Kinks fan?
My tongue is always planted firmly in cheek.
I thank you for the encouragement and the words!
Low-lah. As opposed to L-O-L-A Lola? Kinks fan?
22nd Feb 2013 3:32am
I love this! Such a wonderful way you manipulated the words to speak....bringing the ink to life!
Beautifully written! xo
Beautifully written! xo
22nd Feb 2013 3:39am
Thanks! Now you can see what drew me to your poem earlier today. I saw the pic you had posted with yours and thought , WOW! how cool is that? I had posted this one a few months back on another site, and when I read yours, I decided to share mine here.
Appreciate the words you leave here always!
Lola
Appreciate the words you leave here always!
Lola
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2013 3:40am
Nice deep write Lola.
Strider.
Strider.
22nd Feb 2013 3:45am
thank you Strider, I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
deep? perhaps. spunky always. :)
Lola
deep? perhaps. spunky always. :)
Lola
Anonymous
22nd Feb 2013 3:59am
Great write Lola! Quite descriptive :)
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23rd Feb 2013 5:20pm
I adore your manipulative words, I love the flip!!
Great write sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
Great write sweets!!
Sir Lancelott
23rd Feb 2013 5:28pm
are you calling me manipulative??? thank you. that's the nicest compliment anyone has paid me today. :)
23rd Feb 2013 7:35pm
Eroticised portrayal of the old-fashioned pen-and-ink write. Clearly his pen is his tool. (Double-entendre hidden.)
23rd Feb 2013 8:53pm
some of us still use ink. there is a connection with the feel of the pen in hand on paper that is just not the same when attempting to write on a keyboard.
I appreciate your words and your visit!
Lola
I appreciate your words and your visit!
Lola
17th Mar 2013 12:16pm
Mature sensuous writing fine art The most enjoyable I have read today. I do not write in any other form than Free Verse, which is one of the most disciplined of poetry styles, without which one has anarchy.Good to meet you Lola.
