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My New Muse
Shakespearean mush fills my head
like regurgitated worm in a
baby birds mouth
gross you say,
yeah, so do I
or I used to
before you
now I'm happy
what the fuck do I do with that?
every noise makes a love song
screeching chalkboards
squealing brakes
whistling fools
all screaming
I love you, I love you, I love you
and I'm here, like
yeah, I love you too
you know, like
let me count the ways
and let me feed you cake
and let's read poetic slop together
so yeah.
thanks
I'm good and my poetry lacks
(cause who wants to read happy crap)
fuck
now what do I write about?
like regurgitated worm in a
baby birds mouth
gross you say,
yeah, so do I
or I used to
before you
now I'm happy
what the fuck do I do with that?
every noise makes a love song
screeching chalkboards
squealing brakes
whistling fools
all screaming
I love you, I love you, I love you
and I'm here, like
yeah, I love you too
you know, like
let me count the ways
and let me feed you cake
and let's read poetic slop together
so yeah.
thanks
I'm good and my poetry lacks
(cause who wants to read happy crap)
fuck
now what do I write about?
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Re: My New Muse
Anonymous
- Edited 16th Feb 2013 7:00pm
16th Feb 2013 6:10pm
Indeed, what do we write about Rachel O.?
Like the poetic-passion
Strider
~Nice reading, too~
Like the poetic-passion
Strider
~Nice reading, too~
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re: Re: My New Muse
17th Feb 2013 3:42am
I don't know Strider, I guess it's going to all be rainbows and butterflies from here on out, God help us.
Thanks a bunch for stopping by!
Thanks a bunch for stopping by!
Re: My New Muse
16th Feb 2013 7:33pm
You write as you now do, from your depths. I've admired your competition writes and "character" writes since we first smiled at each other.
This soulful whispering of you is refreshing and invigorating.
Seriously, given the stress and drama of daily life most of us deal with, in the end, loving and being loved as we love is what life is meant to embody.
Such beauty seeping through these sassy words.
This soulful whispering of you is refreshing and invigorating.
Seriously, given the stress and drama of daily life most of us deal with, in the end, loving and being loved as we love is what life is meant to embody.
Such beauty seeping through these sassy words.
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re: Re: My New Muse
17th Feb 2013 3:45am
So much one sided, unequal love going on in the world, so yes, to be loved as one loves is quite refreshing.
Thank you for such kind words Ken. Your thoughts mean a lot to me.
Thank you for such kind words Ken. Your thoughts mean a lot to me.
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22nd May 2013 4:29am
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16th Feb 2013 7:44pm
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17th Feb 2013 3:52am
Always a success in my book to make someone smile.
Thank you for stopping by Scribbler!
Thank you for stopping by Scribbler!
Re: My New Muse
16th Feb 2013 8:07pm
Hearing the artist`s presentation raises
comprehension up a few notches.
It grabs and makes immediate connection .....
awesome effort R/O .... thank You !
: > )
comprehension up a few notches.
It grabs and makes immediate connection .....
awesome effort R/O .... thank You !
: > )
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re: Re: My New Muse
17th Feb 2013 3:54am
I agree...I felt the need to read this one to make sure it was heard the way I wanted. Plus it's just fun.
Thanks a lot drivelicious!
Thanks a lot drivelicious!
Re: My New Muse
Ha, i have often thought about that happiness makes blander writes thing...a funny gig.
Think you have done well with it here, love is gnarly no matter how tough edged us silly poets can get.
Surely the stickier parts will come in time, but i found it refreshing to see this perky, bit tongue tied, bit flakey oart of the thing...thanks for the read
Think you have done well with it here, love is gnarly no matter how tough edged us silly poets can get.
Surely the stickier parts will come in time, but i found it refreshing to see this perky, bit tongue tied, bit flakey oart of the thing...thanks for the read
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re: Re: My New Muse
17th Feb 2013 3:56am
Hey!
Yeah, I am never one to seek out or write happy poems...well, not often anyway.
I'm glad you liked this LB, means a lot you stopped by, read and commented!
Yeah, I am never one to seek out or write happy poems...well, not often anyway.
I'm glad you liked this LB, means a lot you stopped by, read and commented!
Re: My New Muse
Anonymous
16th Feb 2013 10:00pm
Love the emotional purge and truth-unfiltered..raw and real....awesome!
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re: Re: My New Muse
17th Feb 2013 3:58am
Thanks miki, it was fun to write, just quick and honest. Not a ton of thinking involved, just feeling.
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17th Feb 2013 4:51pm
Thank you much Red...always intimidating to be raw, so I am glad it works! :)
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Anonymous
9th Apr 2013 6:44am
I chuckled all the way through :)
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22nd Apr 2013 9:45am
Re: My New Muse
8th May 2013 1:42pm
This was so sweet, so too was ur voice... I felt the love
n I can answer ur question HONESTLY, who wants to read happy poem? ME! why becuz the whoa is me shit is all too common n adds to an already sad hard reality for many as it is, or maybe I'm just a dreamer, a poet, so what do I know? lol
n I can answer ur question HONESTLY, who wants to read happy poem? ME! why becuz the whoa is me shit is all too common n adds to an already sad hard reality for many as it is, or maybe I'm just a dreamer, a poet, so what do I know? lol
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re: Re: My New Muse
10th May 2013 7:10pm
Aww, I love that! I too try to gravitate towards the more positive poets. They are hard to find, but not impossible as I have found several. I hope you have found them as well.
Thank you so much for the positive feed back. What a pleasure.
Thank you so much for the positive feed back. What a pleasure.
Re: My New Muse
10th May 2013 7:13pm
ok...
How have I missed you?
and yeah... I am quite fond of the happy crap, so...
Please do keep writing it :)
Much enjoyed :)
How have I missed you?
and yeah... I am quite fond of the happy crap, so...
Please do keep writing it :)
Much enjoyed :)
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10th May 2013 11:57pm