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Tracing the forest domicile
Tracing the forest domicile
away from a shadowy civilization.
A dark toiling earth,
bereft nobility and worth,
amend self-gratification.
Searing plains of adversity,
walls, ignorant, situate torn minds, once blissful.
Promise to appease,
a heavy avalanche of knees.
Thoughts in action turn choice deedful.
Yet still recede I to a cavernous mind,
meandering tunnels through questions too deep,
for beneath the surface, emptiness will seep.
Light shatters darkened forms to keep thee entwined.
Homely burrow, in a safe place.
A perfect sphere, a shell, awake. With perfect flaws,
unto fear unknown,
seeds hopefully sown;
ones dually fraught personal cause.
early 2009
away from a shadowy civilization.
A dark toiling earth,
bereft nobility and worth,
amend self-gratification.
Searing plains of adversity,
walls, ignorant, situate torn minds, once blissful.
Promise to appease,
a heavy avalanche of knees.
Thoughts in action turn choice deedful.
Yet still recede I to a cavernous mind,
meandering tunnels through questions too deep,
for beneath the surface, emptiness will seep.
Light shatters darkened forms to keep thee entwined.
Homely burrow, in a safe place.
A perfect sphere, a shell, awake. With perfect flaws,
unto fear unknown,
seeds hopefully sown;
ones dually fraught personal cause.
early 2009
Published 14th Feb 2013
| Edited 7th May 2016
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14th Feb 2013 3:16pm
15th Feb 2013 11:49am
Thank you very much!
I appreciate you stopping by and leaving a word or two.
Peace, knowthyself.
Really like that name. It's kinda what the poem, as a protagonist, is fighting for. you know what I mean.
I appreciate you stopping by and leaving a word or two.
Peace, knowthyself.
Really like that name. It's kinda what the poem, as a protagonist, is fighting for. you know what I mean.
15th Feb 2013 5:04pm
Anonymous
- Edited 14th Feb 2013 5:00pm
14th Feb 2013 4:56pm
Heavy avalanche of knees....ok.
Cool, Mjolnir.
Agree with know thyself (above me here:-)....lovely metaphors.
In fact, so unusual...that I see you've even gone to give new grammatical functions to some words:
*walls, ignorant, situate torn minds, once blissful
(Never have I seen this word used as such: situate....it's usually used as a past participle.....amazing, man)
*Thoughts in action turn choice deedful
(Never have I seen "deedful" used as an adjective, but I must say.....it works astoundingly well here!)
I tip my hat to your courage; you seem to know when to use it :-)
Swell effort, pal.
Please do keep penning!
Peace / Vrede
Tidespotter
Cool, Mjolnir.
Agree with know thyself (above me here:-)....lovely metaphors.
In fact, so unusual...that I see you've even gone to give new grammatical functions to some words:
*walls, ignorant, situate torn minds, once blissful
(Never have I seen this word used as such: situate....it's usually used as a past participle.....amazing, man)
*Thoughts in action turn choice deedful
(Never have I seen "deedful" used as an adjective, but I must say.....it works astoundingly well here!)
I tip my hat to your courage; you seem to know when to use it :-)
Swell effort, pal.
Please do keep penning!
Peace / Vrede
Tidespotter
15th Feb 2013 12:13pm
Thank you, ever so, Tides!
Don't know much 'bout courage, and I'm not great with grammar,
so let's just put it down to happy accidents:D
I am yet to understand past participle's and such
(I can't really say I've tried),
maybe that makes me a bad person:/ lol.
Thanks for the great feedback and appraisals.
Peace
Mjolnir
Don't know much 'bout courage, and I'm not great with grammar,
so let's just put it down to happy accidents:D
I am yet to understand past participle's and such
(I can't really say I've tried),
maybe that makes me a bad person:/ lol.
Thanks for the great feedback and appraisals.
Peace
Mjolnir
Anonymous
15th Feb 2013 12:20pm
Nah, not a bad person lol
Just a creative one, ok :-)
Pen on, good stuff yer gots there!
Pleasure to read y'all.....
Peace
Tidespotter
Just a creative one, ok :-)
Pen on, good stuff yer gots there!
Pleasure to read y'all.....
Peace
Tidespotter
