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~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
amongst the vast deafness
of wicked gloom
and vestures of evil hues
in the great beyond
there is a whirlpool of citrus amber swirls
entwined with wine berry brush strokes
and splashes of amethyst water colors
~that
is where you are
amongst the violent charcoal convolutions
of malicious torrents
and destructive ruins
in the everlasting storm
there are forests of emerald majesties
ripples of eternal liquid jade
and cascades of melted mother of pearl
~that
is where you are
deep in the colossal wreckage
of my internal thrashing pulse
and fragmented drumming
of my stitched heart
there is a radiant opalescent glow
brilliant coruscating sparkle
and a shimmer of glorious glisten
~that
is where you are
of wicked gloom
and vestures of evil hues
in the great beyond
there is a whirlpool of citrus amber swirls
entwined with wine berry brush strokes
and splashes of amethyst water colors
~that
is where you are
amongst the violent charcoal convolutions
of malicious torrents
and destructive ruins
in the everlasting storm
there are forests of emerald majesties
ripples of eternal liquid jade
and cascades of melted mother of pearl
~that
is where you are
deep in the colossal wreckage
of my internal thrashing pulse
and fragmented drumming
of my stitched heart
there is a radiant opalescent glow
brilliant coruscating sparkle
and a shimmer of glorious glisten
~that
is where you are
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Re: ~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
Anonymous
10th Feb 2013 7:42pm
Beautidul write, Rachel O.
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10th Feb 2013 9:21pm
Re: ~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
I dunno. I quite like this. It seems a little over-worded, but I like it regardless. The collage of words build great images and the repetition works. I imagine it being read slowly, with a quiet, but definite voice.
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re: Re: ~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
10th Feb 2013 9:26pm
Thank you!
I agree, it's wordy, just couldn't bring myself to eliminate anything. Maybe I'm too close to it.
I planned on adding an audio to this one. I hope when I read it, it will come across the way you imagine.
I am thrilled you stopped by, commented and liked. :)
I agree, it's wordy, just couldn't bring myself to eliminate anything. Maybe I'm too close to it.
I planned on adding an audio to this one. I hope when I read it, it will come across the way you imagine.
I am thrilled you stopped by, commented and liked. :)
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10th Feb 2013 7:44pm
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10th Feb 2013 9:27pm
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10th Feb 2013 7:47pm
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10th Feb 2013 9:28pm
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10th Feb 2013 8:59pm
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10th Feb 2013 9:29pm
Re: ~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
10th Feb 2013 9:13pm
Wow, stunning write.
I could sense each word.
Very well written.
Scribbler.
I could sense each word.
Very well written.
Scribbler.
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10th Feb 2013 9:30pm
Re: ~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
10th Feb 2013 9:46pm
Rachel,
Agree with Mr A , definately a likeable piece, maybe a tad bit over worded but easily sorted out whenever you're of the mind to.
Kind of like swet and sour sauce here with the contrasts, a right good write.
Welcome back :)
Agree with Mr A , definately a likeable piece, maybe a tad bit over worded but easily sorted out whenever you're of the mind to.
Kind of like swet and sour sauce here with the contrasts, a right good write.
Welcome back :)
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re: Re: ~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
10th Feb 2013 10:28pm
Thanks Eamon!
^o^ you reading listed me! Yay!
I am so glad you stopped by. It means a lot!
^o^ you reading listed me! Yay!
I am so glad you stopped by. It means a lot!
Re: ~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
10th Feb 2013 9:53pm
Here you go smelling colors again :)
I'd like to meet this guy; he seems my kind of fellow. :P
Thank you for the sweetest honor and even more, friendship that IS!
I'd like to meet this guy; he seems my kind of fellow. :P
Thank you for the sweetest honor and even more, friendship that IS!
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re: Re: ~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
10th Feb 2013 10:30pm
The honor is all mine Ken. Your friendship is a true treasure in the midst of rubble.
Re: ~S~M~K~ A Light In The Darkness
16th Feb 2013 4:18am
Phenomenal Ink, Phenomenal Write!
Darkness has never been more beautiful! xo
Darkness has never been more beautiful! xo
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16th Feb 2013 4:15pm