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Needing space
sorry you had to go so soon
our conversations were just beginning to bloom
maybe you don't perceive it that way
but I'm still sad that you could not stay
these days I don't cling or cleave
when periodically you take your leave
you always seemed like you needed your space
I understand you better now and won't get into your face
then there are times when I need my space as well
from the spaced-out look on my face you'll be able to tell
So, baby, lets keep our love strong
and give each other space when we need
then when we mingle again it will be double as sweet
our conversations were just beginning to bloom
maybe you don't perceive it that way
but I'm still sad that you could not stay
these days I don't cling or cleave
when periodically you take your leave
you always seemed like you needed your space
I understand you better now and won't get into your face
then there are times when I need my space as well
from the spaced-out look on my face you'll be able to tell
So, baby, lets keep our love strong
and give each other space when we need
then when we mingle again it will be double as sweet
Published 25th Jan 2013
| Edited 8th Mar 2013
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25th Jan 2013 4:18pm
25th Jan 2013 4:34pm
Thank you for your encouragement and for liking my poem. It seems I have hit another patch of fertility and hope it will last for a bit. Unlike other poets who can write daily, my pen flows the way it wants to in a more unpredictable way -- sometimes more sometimes less.
26th Jan 2013 00:53am
Don't trip sweets sometimes you need a short break
We all go through it once or twice..
Lancelott
We all go through it once or twice..
Lancelott
Thank you, Lance. I am pretty used to my unpredictable flow by now. It's all about riding the waves when they come in. ;)
26th Jan 2013 4:52pm
Scarlet, your poem has an emotional tone to it. That's great, now you need to work more on your punctuation and cutting down your thoughts subtly into metaphors and such. But keep the faith.
Love your writing. :-)
Love your writing. :-)
Thank you Evan for your insightful comments.
Since I write what wants to come out of me at any given time, I don't concern myself with style too much, but I try to be as correct as I can be in my spelling. I tend to write poems that are direct and don't need much interpretation and everybody's preference in that regard is different. Although I have been known to use metaphors as well and sometimes experiment with style and format. In the end every poet can keep learning along the way and get inspired by other poets and poetry. :)
Since I write what wants to come out of me at any given time, I don't concern myself with style too much, but I try to be as correct as I can be in my spelling. I tend to write poems that are direct and don't need much interpretation and everybody's preference in that regard is different. Although I have been known to use metaphors as well and sometimes experiment with style and format. In the end every poet can keep learning along the way and get inspired by other poets and poetry. :)
12th Feb 2013 11:45pm
...even when you're deeply in love....you still need space to yourself.xo
I truly enjoyed this :)
I truly enjoyed this :)
14th Feb 2013 6:20am
So true. You always have to give people the space they need even if you're deeply in love. I am glad that you enjoyed this poem and understood my message so well. :)
8th Mar 2013 7:15am
