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The mind of a killer
Painting a black
rainbow underneath
a falling sky, it's mist
consumes and eradicates
your last breath, your
last hope.
They pour the drink
you are forced to drink,
and feed the flesh you
are forced to eat.
Taught to be stupid, and
raised to be nothing,
what's left to do, except
make a noise so loud, fame
will hear you.
Your dreams will tell you what to do.
bang
bang
Congratulations
rainbow underneath
a falling sky, it's mist
consumes and eradicates
your last breath, your
last hope.
They pour the drink
you are forced to drink,
and feed the flesh you
are forced to eat.
Taught to be stupid, and
raised to be nothing,
what's left to do, except
make a noise so loud, fame
will hear you.
Your dreams will tell you what to do.
bang
bang
Congratulations
Published 22nd Jan 2013
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22nd Jan 2013 1:43am
Wow.. you know i had no idea how this was gonna end but you delivered it perfectly.. makes total sense.. thank you for your comments i appreciate them and much love ..
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22nd Jan 2013 9:12pm
old story? Was there an original story about this? I was unaware of that. Marilyn Manson kinda gave me inspiration to write this. He once said in one of his interviews that if you do something to the extreme, people will notice you.
23rd Jan 2013 5:47am
This is the reasoning behind many public shootings, or even grand threats to kill, don't you think?
No diminishment of your work was intended. :)
No diminishment of your work was intended. :)
23rd Jan 2013 6:02am
Right you are! the columbine suspects were avid listeners to Marilyn manson, not that he had anything to do with the shootings. We're all responsible for our own actions, but the media has infact turned everyone against eachother. This can also pertain to assassinations as well. Thanks for your review:)
24th Jan 2013 7:54am
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29th Sep 2013 4:00am
From the black rainbow (great symbolism) to the (the shining ) end (congratulations) which put me in mind of jack nickolson shoving his head through (surprise ) end
I enjoyed this meander alongside the mind claiming (they made me do it... I get the concept of their excuse making but always wonder if it a fallacy (to get out of the blame). Just being honest Syn
I enjoyed this meander alongside the mind claiming (they made me do it... I get the concept of their excuse making but always wonder if it a fallacy (to get out of the blame). Just being honest Syn
