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Resentment
I've been in this dark place
for quite a while now
if this place had a name
it might be "Dissatisfaction"
or something like,
"Indifference" or "Weariness"
All suiting words
describing a dreary situation
I've heard I'm good with words
but maybe I'm not
maybe just most people are terrible with them
but that's beside the point
the point is really,
that I am so very tired of this
this feeling that seemed to manifest
deep inside
roots buried so deep in my core
that this diseased tree will never fall down
I'm told by my therapist
to go deep down
within myself
to find these roots
for there is the source of my discontent
I traveled this path
and found you
I wasn't prepared for the revelation
after we have come so far
and I had rebuilt all those bridges
that I had set to torch
that all these feelings
could knock me flat
and curdle in my stomach
like rancid emotions
It was always you
I see that now
and now my biggest regret
is not telling you how I feel
what I know
what I want you to see in my eyes
that you hurt me
more than words could ever explain
It's too late now
because we made our peace
though now it seems premature
there's so much left to fester
and I don't have the heart to tell you
that I resent you
for quite a while now
if this place had a name
it might be "Dissatisfaction"
or something like,
"Indifference" or "Weariness"
All suiting words
describing a dreary situation
I've heard I'm good with words
but maybe I'm not
maybe just most people are terrible with them
but that's beside the point
the point is really,
that I am so very tired of this
this feeling that seemed to manifest
deep inside
roots buried so deep in my core
that this diseased tree will never fall down
I'm told by my therapist
to go deep down
within myself
to find these roots
for there is the source of my discontent
I traveled this path
and found you
I wasn't prepared for the revelation
after we have come so far
and I had rebuilt all those bridges
that I had set to torch
that all these feelings
could knock me flat
and curdle in my stomach
like rancid emotions
It was always you
I see that now
and now my biggest regret
is not telling you how I feel
what I know
what I want you to see in my eyes
that you hurt me
more than words could ever explain
It's too late now
because we made our peace
though now it seems premature
there's so much left to fester
and I don't have the heart to tell you
that I resent you
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Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 8:15am
very good. the line "I've heard I'm good with words
but maybe I'm not
maybe just most people are terrible with them"
reminds me that a fast man lives in a slow world, a smart man lives in a stupid world. and how the momentary feeling of relief goes away when you keep realizing there's so much more to say, but the other person doesn't care to talk anymore, and you realize nobody cares to talk about it anymore but you.
but maybe I'm not
maybe just most people are terrible with them"
reminds me that a fast man lives in a slow world, a smart man lives in a stupid world. and how the momentary feeling of relief goes away when you keep realizing there's so much more to say, but the other person doesn't care to talk anymore, and you realize nobody cares to talk about it anymore but you.
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re: Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 8:21am
I agree, very insightful and I enjoyed your comment.
Thank you for stopping by. I'll make sure to return the favor.
Thank you for stopping by. I'll make sure to return the favor.
Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 8:32am
Very nice. " I'm told by my therapist to go to deep down within myself to find these roots for there is the source of my discontent". I can relate to this line a lot.
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re: Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 8:37am
Yes, I've heard it often, though my therapists are never quite as lyrical. Thanks for stopping by.
Re: Resentment
Anonymous
- Edited 20th Jan 2013 8:43am
20th Jan 2013 8:40am
Tough when resentment rankles, hey.
Well-written with that cool twist at the end.
Small thing, though.
Spell-check typo and unneeded comma in this line:
*It might be "",Disatisfaction"
Thanks for the share.
Good on you, poet!
Pen on, A C.
Cheers
Tidespotter
Well-written with that cool twist at the end.
Small thing, though.
Spell-check typo and unneeded comma in this line:
*It might be "",Disatisfaction"
Thanks for the share.
Good on you, poet!
Pen on, A C.
Cheers
Tidespotter
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re: Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 8:48am
Thank you for bringing it to my attention that I needed a bit of a proof-read, I took it to heart.
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2013 9:32am
Don't take it to heart.
Didn't mean to offend. Just pointing out.
Write said honest critique accepted ;-)
Tidespotter
Didn't mean to offend. Just pointing out.
Write said honest critique accepted ;-)
Tidespotter
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20th Jan 2013 9:33am
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2013 9:42am
Glad. :-))
Thanks a pretty bunch to you!
Tidespotter
Thanks a pretty bunch to you!
Tidespotter
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Re: Resentment
Anonymous
20th Jan 2013 8:43am
Far more personal and relatable than your other pieces, that's definitely a good thing, a solid, definite step forward in your poetic journey, I think you've shattered your former limitations and we'll be seeing a stronger AlwaysCaliban, that's for sure.
This is a reading list entry for sure, never stop writing.. - Evan.
This is a reading list entry for sure, never stop writing.. - Evan.
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re: Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 8:49am
I don't intend to, thank you Evan, as always, for being here for me throughout my poetic journey, I appreciate your presence.
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Anonymous
20th Jan 2013 8:51am
At least someone does, aha. I'll stand by you, always.
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Re: Resentment
Anonymous
20th Jan 2013 9:14am
A heartfelt write, genuine words that speak.
I feel theres a hint of sadness in there too
Very well written poem by your pen, Always!
I feel theres a hint of sadness in there too
Very well written poem by your pen, Always!
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re: Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 9:19am
Thank you for the rare treat of stopping by and reading my words, Mourganna. :)
Glad you enjoyed.
Glad you enjoyed.
re: Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 9:42am
Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 5:33pm
AlwaysCaliban
I'd be agreeing with Evan. more power to you for upping your game a notch or two. I'ts never easy to throw yourself out there onto a page, you've done it well, with conviction.
far as critique goes, all I can come up with is to pass on some advice given to me;
Have a read over it and see if you can afford to cut a few words here and there, tighten it up a bit.
I'm not sure if you need the quotation marks on them three words in the first stanza, but if they work for you that's what counts.
all in, I think you've done a really good job here, fair play
I'd be agreeing with Evan. more power to you for upping your game a notch or two. I'ts never easy to throw yourself out there onto a page, you've done it well, with conviction.
far as critique goes, all I can come up with is to pass on some advice given to me;
Have a read over it and see if you can afford to cut a few words here and there, tighten it up a bit.
I'm not sure if you need the quotation marks on them three words in the first stanza, but if they work for you that's what counts.
all in, I think you've done a really good job here, fair play
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Re: Resentment
20th Jan 2013 7:00pm
Release the resentment, for your OWN sake. It's happened to me, where I have had to forgive people without speaking to them for my own peace of mind.
Sometimes these things can be done without a confrontation. Hope it works out for you.
Great capture in the poem, enjoyed reading it.
Sometimes these things can be done without a confrontation. Hope it works out for you.
Great capture in the poem, enjoyed reading it.
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Re: Resentment
21st Jan 2013 2:14am
Re: Resentment
21st Jan 2013 2:59am
Great work, Cali! I love all your poetry, and this one is exceptional too. You've been through a lot, sweetie, I can tell... and nothing feels better than pouring your heart unto the page and exorcising everything that bugs you that way. I've done that often, and it's a great way to create a moving work out of a dark moment in your life. I did that recently with my poem Zealous Cause, which I wrote after being persecuted a bit in my hometown by some local bigots. Once I wrote that poem of mine though, I felt empowered and much stronger than I had beforehand. Nothing has power quite like poetry! Thanks for sharing your poem with us, my dear, dear friend. :)
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Re: Resentment
22nd Jan 2013 00:52am
My favorite part:
"I've heard I'm good with words
but maybe I'm not
maybe just most people are terrible with them
but that's beside the point
the point is really,
that I am so very tired of this
this feeling that seemed to manifest
deep inside
roots buried so deep in my core
that this diseased tree will never fall down"
Excellent work once again, Cousin Caliban ;)
"I've heard I'm good with words
but maybe I'm not
maybe just most people are terrible with them
but that's beside the point
the point is really,
that I am so very tired of this
this feeling that seemed to manifest
deep inside
roots buried so deep in my core
that this diseased tree will never fall down"
Excellent work once again, Cousin Caliban ;)
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re: Re: Resentment
22nd Jan 2013 00:53am
Re: Resentment
22nd Jan 2013 6:40am
"It's too late now
because we made our peace
though now it seems premature
there's so much left to fester
and I don't have the heart to tell you
that I resent you"
Made me want to hug you Cali and make you feel good again! Excellent work thanks
because we made our peace
though now it seems premature
there's so much left to fester
and I don't have the heart to tell you
that I resent you"
Made me want to hug you Cali and make you feel good again! Excellent work thanks
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Re: Resentment
23rd Jan 2013 8:03pm
" i resent you, i resent you I resent you", its all in my head. i feel like im giving someone the death stare.
Awesome poem
Awesome poem
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Re: Resentment
4th Feb 2013 9:48pm
Had to stop by again, this is definitely a top favorite of your poetry and as I said before, it's pretty god damn good!
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Re: Resentment
10th Feb 2013 6:52am
How did I miss this poem.. This was so good Cali.. Nice xoxo
Everything is said above as far as critique wise I'm sure. So I have you my opinion lol 4 stars from me
Everything is said above as far as critique wise I'm sure. So I have you my opinion lol 4 stars from me
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re: Re: Resentment
10th Feb 2013 6:54am