She's a cold habit..

Your patience in getting there is breath taking....a matador in a bullring.

On point beautiful xoxo

nicely done.

i really dig this one... kinda reminds me of pig destroyer lyrics... some of it... but you should read this one out load!

...this is entirely decent. There is form, care of and for words, and an air of knowledge, truth almost....well done. (a credit to your editing skills improving really, as these things have always been present in your work, you just had to show us better)

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OMG! ohhh my god  .. thank you .. thank you thank you .. yay.

Baby girl

I have read this several times since you posted it. I won't lie. Your structuring bugs me sometimes, but... lol

It does NOT weaken your voice !

Here is some unsolicited advice. ;)
Get your ass to a writing class, because you Sweet Pea have what it takes to get published.

I am serious ! :)

So it's a yes to mud wrestling? meet me in the back in 5 minutes gotta get my gin.. lol. Thank you Maggie. i don't know how to structure my shit i've tried it all and actually i graduated a poetry college 10 week course with a 92% the other 8 went to spelling and structure.. lol. honestly say for instance the lines

a moisturizing malice
so unclean it
seems holy.       that is a breath.. then shes a cold habit that is a breath and then as she sleeps a breath so i try to break up the breaths to fuck i lost what i was trying to say i should also take an attention span class cause just that fast i lost my thought. lol sorry

*chuckles*

Then my darlin single mommy, take your butt to a university, and start looking into grants that will send you full time to university. Seriously, I have worked my ass off for a very long time to just call myself competent. I have never had your natural talent, and never will.

And if I can get myself published(and I have, more than once)? You Sweetheart can easily be paid for a book.

I am not one bit kidding here.

Fuck people who think you are perverted, or too hard, etc. There is a fine list of writers who have came before you who have paved the way.

Walk the road... :)

WOW! Thank you. i dont know what to say to your kindness and encouragement i am not used to it especially a woman except miss subb. thank you both. i appreciate it. oh speaking about books i wonder how my new vagina would look on the cover... =)

It isn't kindness. It is fact ;)

And ? Read the play " The Vagina Monologues "

Fabulous bit of work, right up your alley. Speaking of vaginas. lol Nah... Do a Maplethorpe. Go for the asshole. lol ;)

Lmfao..  i fucking dig the shit out of you thank you ..

The "only thing that is building is your honesty." We usually want to kill the people (so damned demanding, they are)we say we love.  I find your poem refreshing and mature.


marcella1

Mistress i've been an unfaithful servant a zebra dark and light..you feed the beast in me I love that you could kill her and love her at the same time..peace Crim

"how many different ways i could kill her as she sleeps" i like that part

I think this is still one of your very best. This one reminds me of my ex in a few ways. Murder was considered more than once. I always fancied making it look like an accident, perhaps she could fall off a bridge or somethin'. You grow. Hello there, Dev :)