Finally

What I like about this is the lyrical conflict between man at his most primal and man with his emotion. A very clear reflection of two worlds intertwining.

Cheers, Miss. I wondered if it would be seen as a simple reflection, or if could be read at the different levels so I'm happy with your comment.

Deft setting of time and place with so few words:

"Sword
laying at my hip like a third arm,
sun telling me when to gather wood."

The language fits the era described, too.  A good construction.

Attention to the following:

"I would of rode, hunted and I
would of killed. Gloriously. Oh
I would of killed"

all the "I would of" should be "I would have" or "I would've".

I do that more and more frequently. Cheers for pointing that out, Atakti, and thanks for the praise.

Have

Have

Have. Think I've got it? :)

Mr A,  
 
deffinately like the poem and t5he tale it tells, the circle it travells and the images it conjures.  
 
where I might have some small issues is in the first stanza;  
 
When I was a child, I remember  
 
(this may be a grammatical error, I'm not sure but it made me stop either way, if you had it the other way around itmight sort that out ..or I could be just being a nazi)  
 
edit; ok so I get it now, it's the line break that's putting it off a bit  
 
when I was a child  
I remember that ..  
 
another edit: no, it still sounds wrong for some reason, sorry 'bout this Mr A, I'm trying to be helpul but I've gone confused myself.  
 
I wanted to live in another time,  
many years ago on horseback.  
 
(see, it's kind of implying that you wanted to live on horseback , perhaps another line or two might sort that for you,it'd be no harm to stretch it a little anyway because it's a decent enough image)  
 
the second might need another look at,in the first two lines, the puncuation;  
 
I'd have  rode through woods  
and I'd have  hunted, killed gloriously.  
 
(I like the sound of the two H's together what do you think? )  
   
Oh! I'd have killed;  
darting through flesh totally unscathed  
with a shield  
decorated to symbolise me  
unruled    
 
all just suggestions Mr A.  
 
liked it a lot    
 
 

Ok, the first line is more a figure of speech. When someone looks back and just starts talking. That's why the comma's there; to keep the grammar. If you said "When I'd got to the shop, I'd forgotten" you wouldn't notice it because it's more common.(just saw your edit. never mind:)

I think it's how the reader wants to read that bit. I think unless they think I wanted to be a horse's flea, I should be safe.

You'll notice the full stops, then "Gloriously" stopping again. This was to add emphasis and hold you on this word for a second, without the use of a line-break. Make sense?

It is heavily punctuated, partly to keep the form(as you see the first two verses are almost identical) and partly because it's the most important thing to read, especially when read aloud. I left words hanging that might look awkward but add a good rhythm when read aloud.

However, your critique was spot on. I was going to write this without punctuation and a more free form, if I did, I would of definitely taken your advice. Cheers for the praise too, Eamon. Really appreciate it.

days[of]olde
knights[was]bold

sweet fantasy piece

Yes. Twas so twasn't tit?

Cheers, saxman.

you can say I would've, if you don't mind the contractions. same sound, correct meaning, acceptable punctuation.

I know I know. Cheers for helping, wing.

it's ok i'll just stand here holding this wooden spoon

i know it helps

Very nicely done indeed, Mr. A.

Hope that you enjoy your holidays.

Uley

Cheers, Uley. You too.