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Dead Inside
He claims to be dead inside
he yaps about it everyday
today its over coffee
I listen and roll my eyes
he wants me to get it
to really get it,
I tell him "I get it"
he perks up and says "really?"
I smile and say "yeah really"
on he talks about his dead soul
he asks me questions like,
how did I know
"your breath"
he now looks puzzled
with a look of duh on my face I say
"it stinks"
apparently I have offended someone who is dead inside
which really doesn't make sense to me,
I let him get all cocky and defend himself
he got huffy, he made noises like a swan
when he was done and sipping his coffee
I simply said "dead people don't defend themselves
you got angry, someone dead inside would have been more docile
sometimes you got to get angry, to feel alive"
he looked at me over the top of his mug
I saw a smile well more of a smirk
we paid for our coffee, walked around town for a bit
we were saying our goodbyes when he handed me a mint
he yaps about it everyday
today its over coffee
I listen and roll my eyes
he wants me to get it
to really get it,
I tell him "I get it"
he perks up and says "really?"
I smile and say "yeah really"
on he talks about his dead soul
he asks me questions like,
how did I know
"your breath"
he now looks puzzled
with a look of duh on my face I say
"it stinks"
apparently I have offended someone who is dead inside
which really doesn't make sense to me,
I let him get all cocky and defend himself
he got huffy, he made noises like a swan
when he was done and sipping his coffee
I simply said "dead people don't defend themselves
you got angry, someone dead inside would have been more docile
sometimes you got to get angry, to feel alive"
he looked at me over the top of his mug
I saw a smile well more of a smirk
we paid for our coffee, walked around town for a bit
we were saying our goodbyes when he handed me a mint
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Re: Dead Inside
7th Dec 2012 4:37pm
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7th Dec 2012 4:38pm
I figure if your dead inside, your breath has got to stink right? lol thanks Shaunda!
Re: Dead Inside
7th Dec 2012 5:36pm
Awesome :-) A good, fun poem. Funny thing is, even though it was a fun poem you really painted a picture. Good visualization
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Re: Dead Inside
7th Dec 2012 5:44pm
Re: Dead Inside
7th Dec 2012 6:24pm
Too funny! I hope that was a real conversation, I can just picture it...
Thanks for the chuckle.
Thanks for the chuckle.
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7th Dec 2012 6:28pm
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Re: Dead Inside
7th Dec 2012 8:49pm
I Love this One Nikkie...
You do paint the most vivid pictures in your poetry...
Are you ready to publish yet?
Fire
You do paint the most vivid pictures in your poetry...
Are you ready to publish yet?
Fire
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7th Dec 2012 8:51pm
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7th Dec 2012 11:04pm
Re: Dead Inside
8th Dec 2012 00:27am
Re: Dead Inside
8th Dec 2012 00:27am
Nice...
"Your breath"...
..."Dead people don't defend themselves"...
You really get the best lines in this, I'd say.
Very well done with the write Nikkiemoe.
"Your breath"...
..."Dead people don't defend themselves"...
You really get the best lines in this, I'd say.
Very well done with the write Nikkiemoe.
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Re: Dead Inside
8th Dec 2012 2:08am
Not much more needs to be said. Everyone above has said it all. Wish I got to this sooner. Great job.
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Re: Dead Inside
13th Dec 2012 2:58pm
eye love this'n, dear nikkimoe
thee i'rony of the 'dead soul'
braying ego 'bout
they's deadness ----
a swell paradoximoronian tale
thee i'rony of the 'dead soul'
braying ego 'bout
they's deadness ----
a swell paradoximoronian tale
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