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I need somethin
The words come to mind like wine to glasses Kinda like a superstar with all da flashes. I tripped and fell in love wit a dream or nightmare Jus cuz i dont show it dont mean i dont care. I loved for two long and came up short We need to be together like a basketball to a court. NO t.v show girlfriend no made up plays She needs to mold my life as if playin wit clay. People take love for granted and they lose so much And too believe that me and you started wit jus one crush. You hav affected my life like da tradic of 9\11 But in da words of jagged edge you walked rite out of heaven. In all this turmoil im caught like a bag in a whirlwind I got everything i need in life except a GIRLFRIEND!!!!!!
Published 30th Oct 2012
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30th Oct 2012 4:22am
I must confess that even though I was born in Los Angeles, I have been removed long enough that there were a few words I had to look at several times to figure out. It is a bit like slang that is spoken but I can say in my case, especially being in education, I don't read. Normally "too" is used were you placed the number "two". Maybe you did mean the number? Likewise "tradic" is normally spelled tragic. No offense intended---this just comes off as conversation one my have with a bro on the street rather then a written piece.
