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Paradise is an eternal orgasm with your beloved
We are insignificant
before the unknown that lies ahead.
Few seconds, then nothing will make more sense
Only she remains
to give a little light
in the darkness of my lonely mind
I fuck her in a desperate way,
I enter my female goddess
as it was the last thing I granted in this world.
I rotate the hips
she jumps like a salmon upstream.
She bites and sank her nails into my back
seems happy with my devotion.
I push my cock more in that I can
she wiggles like a fish on the harpoon.
We do it properly, slowly and thoroughly,
for endless moments
and the time stop.
Perhaps heaven do exists
and is like an eternal orgasm
with your beloved.
before the unknown that lies ahead.
Few seconds, then nothing will make more sense
Only she remains
to give a little light
in the darkness of my lonely mind
I fuck her in a desperate way,
I enter my female goddess
as it was the last thing I granted in this world.
I rotate the hips
she jumps like a salmon upstream.
She bites and sank her nails into my back
seems happy with my devotion.
I push my cock more in that I can
she wiggles like a fish on the harpoon.
We do it properly, slowly and thoroughly,
for endless moments
and the time stop.
Perhaps heaven do exists
and is like an eternal orgasm
with your beloved.
Published 21st Oct 2012
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21st Oct 2012 6:57am
Luca,
a lovely read or a poetic statement as I see heaven defined subtly. categorizing in love instead of erotic indeed justifies this definition very strongly!
keep sharing ur mighty thoughts Luca..
thank you ~Uma.
a lovely read or a poetic statement as I see heaven defined subtly. categorizing in love instead of erotic indeed justifies this definition very strongly!
keep sharing ur mighty thoughts Luca..
thank you ~Uma.
23rd Oct 2012 11:53am
When I enter my abstract way of being creative. I feel things differently than I do normally.
It is a world of my own, in which the feminine essence is adorable, my lover, even if it is a stranger, become my goddess, and reach orgasm together turns into something sacred.
Mine it's pagan, wild, and at the same time sweet way to conceive love.
Thank you for your welcome comment : )
It is a world of my own, in which the feminine essence is adorable, my lover, even if it is a stranger, become my goddess, and reach orgasm together turns into something sacred.
Mine it's pagan, wild, and at the same time sweet way to conceive love.
Thank you for your welcome comment : )
21st Oct 2012 12:41pm
definately a nice poem with enticing imagery that impregnates the mind with vistas of eternal estacy
You have detected exactly what I wanted to express by my verses.
Thank you very much for your lovely comment
Thank you very much for your lovely comment
21st Oct 2012 10:28pm
defi6x comment erotically mind boggling - "impregnates the mind"!
Fishermen may warm to the similes "she jumps like a salmon upstream" - salmon do this seasonal odyssey as part of their mating/breeding process - and "wiggles like a fish on the harpoon"!
Fishermen may warm to the similes "she jumps like a salmon upstream" - salmon do this seasonal odyssey as part of their mating/breeding process - and "wiggles like a fish on the harpoon"!
23rd Oct 2012 12:00pm
I hope that fishermen can forgive my poetic license.
BTW
Sorry my English is not good enough probably.
But I don't understand this part of the comment:
defi6x comment erotically mind boggling - "impregnates the mind"!
Thanks for coming around here anyway :D
BTW
Sorry my English is not good enough probably.
But I don't understand this part of the comment:
defi6x comment erotically mind boggling - "impregnates the mind"!
Thanks for coming around here anyway :D
22nd Oct 2012 5:35am
Once again, Luca, your description heats up my blood!! Great words!!
Sending hugs,
Amazon
Sending hugs,
Amazon
23rd Oct 2012 12:08pm
Pity that I can not be there to cool your hot spirits.
Thank you very much for the comment
Thank you very much for the comment
22nd Oct 2012 2:34pm
23rd Oct 2012 12:13pm
Tu sabes que me gustaria mucho verte saltar come un salmon que sube la coriente. ya no me visita ni en suegño, sigh. Me quedaré sognando con tu fotografía.
Thanx for your nice comment
Thanx for your nice comment
22nd Oct 2012 11:21pm
sensual as ever! i quite agree with Uma's remark on the chosen category. Very well done mister!
kiss
'O
kiss
'O
23rd Oct 2012 12:39pm
In my opinion there is only an invisible boundary between eroticism and love.
When you effusions with a person, at that precise moment you love her and pulses with the entire universe which is a witness to such love.
It's a question of completely surrender and worship your lover like a goddess.
I love to read your comments
Thanx so much.
When you effusions with a person, at that precise moment you love her and pulses with the entire universe which is a witness to such love.
It's a question of completely surrender and worship your lover like a goddess.
I love to read your comments
Thanx so much.
23rd Oct 2012 3:36pm
o you nasty-boy, Luca....you ignite a smokey-hot smoulder in th'ladies of DUP......eye love reading your stuff, kid,
but
constant orgasm, constant pleasure, constant indulgence in same would lose it's significance & becum rather unspecial....the joy of orgasm is dependent on it's fleeting, momentary nature. Craving & seeking a 'permanence' of such inevitably leads us into a state of painful delusion, & we spread that pain in our compulsion to 'keep' something that cannot be kept.
Are you'all taking notes out there, kids?
basically aye have no idear what i'm talking about....just an'other babblin'ol'jackAss...
peaceUp br'other Luca
but
constant orgasm, constant pleasure, constant indulgence in same would lose it's significance & becum rather unspecial....the joy of orgasm is dependent on it's fleeting, momentary nature. Craving & seeking a 'permanence' of such inevitably leads us into a state of painful delusion, & we spread that pain in our compulsion to 'keep' something that cannot be kept.
Are you'all taking notes out there, kids?
basically aye have no idear what i'm talking about....just an'other babblin'ol'jackAss...
peaceUp br'other Luca
24th Oct 2012 1:02pm
Hello Dany
U're too nice LOL
I am writing these things because I believe that, even if for few moments, we feel just divine when we make love. Women for me are like godess you know that ;)
Orgasm on earth, is for few moments. Perhaps in heaven lasts forever. You never know :)
I have only stressed the concept of happiness. Those few moments of happiness we have to take before we disappear.
"We are insignificant
before the unknown that lies ahead.
Few seconds, then nothing will make more sense."
A hug from your sincere admirer Luca.
U're too nice LOL
I am writing these things because I believe that, even if for few moments, we feel just divine when we make love. Women for me are like godess you know that ;)
Orgasm on earth, is for few moments. Perhaps in heaven lasts forever. You never know :)
I have only stressed the concept of happiness. Those few moments of happiness we have to take before we disappear.
"We are insignificant
before the unknown that lies ahead.
Few seconds, then nothing will make more sense."
A hug from your sincere admirer Luca.
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23rd Dec 2012 4:26pm
Thank you very much for your comment.
Sorry if I have not placed first. I became aware of its existence just now.
I'm glad you read me.
It will be a pleasure to read your stuff too.
Sorry if I have not placed first. I became aware of its existence just now.
I'm glad you read me.
It will be a pleasure to read your stuff too.
Anonymous
28th Dec 2012 11:25pm
Wow - I missed this one....it is great...
thank you for the good read
thank you for the good read
4th Jan 2013 00:12am
