Broken reflections

Hey Gigi :) a personal little poem here. Quite sad, but well enough expressed.

In line 9 did you mean wear?
As for the ending I IMO ending on "and I'm okay" is stronger than the way it now. Also don't need the ramble bit. Have confidence in your words. :)

Overall I liked this, as sad as it is, there is the strength of rebellion in the "I'm okay"

Peace, Indie

Thank you will fix it up. And drop the ps :-) xoxo

"stood in the mirror staring at your reflection for hours me lurking in the shadows watching"

Could picture your write... Great job.. Sad because I see the child in every line. Nice Gigi..    

She wore glasses and had freckles lol. Was real small real small. Like a tooth pick. Haha have to put a good visual to it.

Thank you love xoxo

A deeply reflective poem! Is it the mirror that is broken or the girl exposed within the shardes? Excellent work of introspection!!! JJ

Thank you mr jj xoxo

This is such a personal poem, I feel like an intruder reading it. Good work with a very clear and strong message.

AlwaysCaliban

Thank you and no worries. I seem to be an open book lately so no biggie xoxo Ty

Awing introspection....

stood in the mirror staring at your reflection for hours    
me lurking in the shadows watching  

turns to, IMHO,

me, lurking
or else
my lurking

reasoning: either the real you is there, and what you are doing is modified by lurking or else, the lurking is modified and you were not there but were instead not yet fully developed and have of recent history done so and this is why you are okay.

This supports the evolution of the character, that previously you were entranced or innocent to fault, but now as wiser, you have gained perspective and survived, and learned to use your victimization as a victory over having been used, but to the betterment by gaining insight.  I'm taking the tailings of your economy and honing in on service to the outcome here.  IMHO.

All of this for a comma or a "y."  A jot or a tittle.

Not yet fully developed .:) very good eye to catch that. I will play with it some more thank you turtle

Gigi, that was deep and very akin to things I have felt.

Red

I'm sorry about that. Xoxoxo thank you

Very sad and touching.
Good work Gigi

xoxo

Thank you xoxox

this is certainly beautiful sadness, well expressed emotions...

Thank you xoxox

What an intense write. Hope all is well. :)

Everything is great. I right for my past xoxox Ty

this is deep and touching my lovely one..I wish I had a better critique but apathy has taken over..just know I love you and you are writing with your heart and soul and I feel it..hugs Crim

You too my lovely crim xoxoxo thank you so much

Ah, Just_Gigi     Starting to understand some of what goes into your name.  This so eloquently describes an aspect of the jealousy-power-need tension in a mother-daughter relationship, especially entering the teenage years - and a mirror is perfect to play this out.  "and I'm okay" is a killer line.  So much sadness there, yet illustrates perfectly that the moment of giving up can sometimes be the moment of strength.  Powerful, clever and deeply personal write, thank you for this.

Thank you for the beautiful comment!! Xoxox