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When I first went into reading this, I read the first line and wondered if it were meant to be erotic, but now, after reading the entire piece, I figure that first line must be something else. Invasive? Spiritual? Intimate? I can't really decide (indecision is a bitch ;) )but...I ponder.

Every line of this poem has got me. "A supertide of plasma" beautiful, otherwordly. Incredible.

Vague and poetic until the very end. "i.need.you" because there's no way of de-simplifying that, is there? Blatant and pure.

My god, you amaze me.

"thank you." :]

You trimmed all of the deadwood from it, and this version is glorious.

I'm still struck by the phrase "dustdeaf moon."

Fabulous redraft, Sumeet. Every line kicks in the gut, and even the visual layout adds to the side-sine-wave, the small roller coaster of the feeling.

Happy writing, B

Ugly

thanks. yeah, went chop chop.:]

i know you like it. happy accident.

be well. x

weirdo