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My Dark Angel
blessed by the light
but chose darkness instead
its wings wrapped you up
but the dark has soothed u instead
the challenges you faced
darkness has held your hand
the people you met
darkness helped you greet
the love you have felt
darkness introduced it to you
the pain you have suffered
darkness has beared it with you
the person you are
darkness helped mold you
the thoughts you get
darkness helped plant the seed
the lies you have uncovered
darkness has told you nothing but the truth
so walk side by side
hands clamped in his
your soft white light
being enfolded in his wings
your brand new might
complimented by his touch
your black angel feathers
ruffled by the night
but chose darkness instead
its wings wrapped you up
but the dark has soothed u instead
the challenges you faced
darkness has held your hand
the people you met
darkness helped you greet
the love you have felt
darkness introduced it to you
the pain you have suffered
darkness has beared it with you
the person you are
darkness helped mold you
the thoughts you get
darkness helped plant the seed
the lies you have uncovered
darkness has told you nothing but the truth
so walk side by side
hands clamped in his
your soft white light
being enfolded in his wings
your brand new might
complimented by his touch
your black angel feathers
ruffled by the night
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Re: My Dark Angel
2nd Oct 2012 10:33pm
This poem reminds me of the angel books written by Felicity Heaton. It's beautiful x
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2nd Oct 2012 10:36pm
Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 3:55am
Such a beautiful and vivid story poem, it's almost as if you're talking about a guardian angel.
Loved it, keep up the good work Schizo :)
Loved it, keep up the good work Schizo :)
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Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 4:05am
Now that I've read it now over I've found that similarity you're right it does sound like a guardian angel thank you pleased you like some of my older work
Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 4:08am
Well I admire your work.
Every time I read it it's like its coming from some place real and not just some words that are made up without any thought or perspective.
Every time I read it it's like its coming from some place real and not just some words that are made up without any thought or perspective.
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Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 4:28am
that's one reason why it takes some time for me some pieces just came out the ass but I try to put only ones that I felt something strong
Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 4:30am
Which is great that you do that because I feel if you do a half ass job on it then it's not gonna come out as meaningful or special as you want it to be.
I do the same with my poems especially if it's like a love poem or a poem about a serious subject.
I do the same with my poems especially if it's like a love poem or a poem about a serious subject.
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Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 4:43am
It never does and it irritates me when poems come out like that from me but I learn from them and try to use them especially with love poems or something serious
Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 4:47am
It really doesn't irritate me its actually therapeutic for me because half of the time if I write a love poem its about an actual experience I had while I was in love with that person.
I think you can learn from the stuff that you write especially if you look back at them you probably think differently than you did at the time when writing it.
I think you can learn from the stuff that you write especially if you look back at them you probably think differently than you did at the time when writing it.
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Re: Re. My Dark Angel
when it means something then that's when it therapeutic or at least relaxing but when it's all screwed and just seems warped it irratates
and definately you can learn not just from your own work from others as well it's actually quite amazing when I see something in others pieces that sparks something
and definately you can learn not just from your own work from others as well it's actually quite amazing when I see something in others pieces that sparks something
Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 5:00am
Exactly, now I get what you mean by how it irritates you so in that case it irritates me as well.
And that's true you can learn from others work as well.
Sometimes when I read certain pieces by people it sometimes inspires me to want to touch on the same subject or make my poem be as passionate and great as I want it to be, but then again that's the mind of a perfectionist lol
And that's true you can learn from others work as well.
Sometimes when I read certain pieces by people it sometimes inspires me to want to touch on the same subject or make my poem be as passionate and great as I want it to be, but then again that's the mind of a perfectionist lol
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Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 5:30am
I've had those moments of trying to be a perfectionist but than I realized that as long as I got better in the long run all is well lol anywho how's writting been
Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 5:35am
lol I know.
And good, I'm almost done with my " Gangster & The Good Girl" story so after that I will finish up my other story. How about you? :)
And good, I'm almost done with my " Gangster & The Good Girl" story so after that I will finish up my other story. How about you? :)
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Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 5:47am
I've seen I still need to read the latest part so I can get caught up but I'm looking foward to the ending as for my writting it's gone both ways some days I write for hours others I can barely get a sentence before it all just crashes
Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 5:51am
Well when you have the time check it out and tell me what you think :) I think I will make two more chapters and end the story.
My advice for you is to not try to force the words out, take your time on it and if it comes to you then it comes.
I get a bad case of writer's block from time to time and I think when it comes to trying to come up with an idea it sometimes happens quickly and sometimes happens slowly.
My advice for you is to not try to force the words out, take your time on it and if it comes to you then it comes.
I get a bad case of writer's block from time to time and I think when it comes to trying to come up with an idea it sometimes happens quickly and sometimes happens slowly.
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Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 6:15am
It takes me a couple times to remind myself not to force it sometimes I just want to write thru the block even though I know 8 out of 10 it doesn't work but then those two times sometimes makes it all worth it
And I'll be sure to check it out and write out my thoughts
And I'll be sure to check it out and write out my thoughts
Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 6:18am
I understand I'm kind of guilty of doing that from time to time because I don't like it when I get writers block so I try to pretend it's not there so I can at least accomplish making the poem, but I guess that makes me a bit stubborn lol
Good, hope you like it :)
Good, hope you like it :)
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Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 6:41am
Man that's me too I'm like nope don't have it not today and then proceed to just stare at a page for a good 30 mins before I can even think of writting something by the way amazing chapters for the story I was listening to ludovico einaudi experience and it gave a much more emotional story with it on
Re: Re. My Dark Angel
13th Oct 2015 6:46am
I guess great minds think alike lol
Wow thanks Im glad you're liking the story so far, I promise there is more to come in my last chapters :)
Wow thanks Im glad you're liking the story so far, I promise there is more to come in my last chapters :)
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