I WANT TO REMAIN 'I'

Nice one !!!!!

Thanks :)

Welcome to DUP! Very emotional poem. Enjoyed a lot. :)

Glad u liked it.. thanks a lot :)

Great piece Ms. Brinda
Good read
Welcome to the DU sweets

Sir Lancelott

Thanks a lot :)

Hey Brinda, you've done pretty damn well to stay honest in a poem, that's something great right there, it's impossible to truly write poetry if you're lying to yourself. That's step 1. If I may, take it to a word document and tighten it up, fix the punctuation, add commas and full-stops where you think it'll work best to have the reader pausing and really getting into a poem. Try and cut down the use of small words, use your vocabulary, because yours is pretty damn good! You've got some metaphors in there, try and expand on that, subtly is your friend!

Good write Brinda, keep the faith.

I agree with you because the emotion is there. What is needed is the power of language. Its never a necessity to write big words. Simple words can make one feel what probably the jargon cannot.

thanku so much for the advice :) i ll keep that in mind next time. I appreciate :)

Lovely poem, B!

And thanks for sharing :-)

Learnt a word from your poem: cynosure.....

So, to you....I say - dhanyavad :-D

Do pen on, poet!


Cheers

Tidespotter

Thanks tidespotter :) Glad that u know hindi too :)

Thanks a ton dear :)

I'm a lil troubled by what feels like your 'over thinking'
others intentions, I'm all for original n unique... But really it sounds like (unless I'm misinterpretting) you WANT to be alone period... n in my opinion what is life lived by yourself?
love is NEVER to culprit my friend :)

Yes life is to be lived by yourself and accepting the way you are !! thanks for your concern :)

Much appreciated Vishal :)

Dark is my skin
But I bother not a pin ---pin drop silence in dark ask  me to measure ...d extent of d infinite energy dt r hidden in dt  black whole  

Thanks for your expressions :)

While read feel dt Tum Hamesha creates magic without trick...

Lolzz

thanks dt we share our hearts in our language …