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Can't Beat The Legends Rap
all the rappers in the world
haven't heard what I've been told
by the legends and the kings
should I tell you these things?
Biggie got shot
you all heard that it was true
but did any of you come to think of who
was the one that did the shooting
the gangsters rebooting
Tupac aswell
The world is going to hell
nd Fitty
No, not the rapper, not 50 cent.
he dedicated his name to him
just out of respect.
Kelvin,
his last name was martin
would rob people if they only had fifty cents
back in the 80's
that didn't even make any sense?
Eminem,
Dre
lil wayne and the rest
ain't got nothing on legends.
damn right
they the best.
MCHammer
he be beast
and he's not yet been deceased
but in my opinion
MCE leaves him in the dust
and Cudi be dope
for all the weed that he smoke
and luda be brave
for all that he overcame
nd snoop be bold
he's raising a family and old
still spilling rhymes forever in time
but they can't beat the legends.
forever
they're the best.
haven't heard what I've been told
by the legends and the kings
should I tell you these things?
Biggie got shot
you all heard that it was true
but did any of you come to think of who
was the one that did the shooting
the gangsters rebooting
Tupac aswell
The world is going to hell
nd Fitty
No, not the rapper, not 50 cent.
he dedicated his name to him
just out of respect.
Kelvin,
his last name was martin
would rob people if they only had fifty cents
back in the 80's
that didn't even make any sense?
Eminem,
Dre
lil wayne and the rest
ain't got nothing on legends.
damn right
they the best.
MCHammer
he be beast
and he's not yet been deceased
but in my opinion
MCE leaves him in the dust
and Cudi be dope
for all the weed that he smoke
and luda be brave
for all that he overcame
nd snoop be bold
he's raising a family and old
still spilling rhymes forever in time
but they can't beat the legends.
forever
they're the best.
Published 22nd Sep 2012
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22nd Sep 2012 7:34am
I thought on it. I'll follow you. I'm interested in your progress. I'm not a fan of rap, but I like your passion about defending your "Legends" and your loyalty. Good job.
22nd Sep 2012 7:36am
I don't really like rap either, that day It just came to me..
It irritates me when people mindlessly follow what's new in the scene, without knowing the roots, and the originals.
There's no progress without history!
It irritates me when people mindlessly follow what's new in the scene, without knowing the roots, and the originals.
There's no progress without history!
22nd Sep 2012 8:47am
Kristofer.
Yeah, I agree with Miss Caliban above.you do have a passion.
The original roots of rap are in The Sugar Hill Gang.
Look man phrases like ;
"MCHammer
he be beast
doesn't really work for me. It kind of reads like you were trying to come up with a rhyme and that phrase was the best you could come up with.
"Biggie got shot
you all heard that it was true"
I'd be trying to insert some kind of imagery or something to make your poem stand up on it's own without all the name drops.
all in , there are some decent lines in there and I guess the message you are giving in terms of content is sound enough. when doing a rhyme scheme I find it best to try not think too much at all about what will rhyme with this or that and just write what pops into your head.
hope this made some sense.
nice one, shine on.
Yeah, I agree with Miss Caliban above.you do have a passion.
The original roots of rap are in The Sugar Hill Gang.
Look man phrases like ;
"MCHammer
he be beast
doesn't really work for me. It kind of reads like you were trying to come up with a rhyme and that phrase was the best you could come up with.
"Biggie got shot
you all heard that it was true"
I'd be trying to insert some kind of imagery or something to make your poem stand up on it's own without all the name drops.
all in , there are some decent lines in there and I guess the message you are giving in terms of content is sound enough. when doing a rhyme scheme I find it best to try not think too much at all about what will rhyme with this or that and just write what pops into your head.
hope this made some sense.
nice one, shine on.
22nd Sep 2012 4:58pm
Yup, this is fairly cringe-worthy. Christ, Eamon, you're nice. Just seems like a desperate plucking for words that rhyme and as a result the meaning and tone suffers beyond belief.
