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Gemini
Deep amethyst flowering bud of wisdom,
discriminating beauty cloaked in pain-
sharp teeth gnaw her grieving heart, vexing
as clouds gather drowning acid rain.
This
magic golden umbrella poises itself precisely,
here are soft white feathered downy quilts
and ointments of solace.
(One does not notice the Sun so much, if it never rains.)
discriminating beauty cloaked in pain-
sharp teeth gnaw her grieving heart, vexing
as clouds gather drowning acid rain.
This
magic golden umbrella poises itself precisely,
here are soft white feathered downy quilts
and ointments of solace.
(One does not notice the Sun so much, if it never rains.)
Published 19th Sep 2012
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20th Sep 2012 1:02am
Striking imagery though "upbeat" doesn't fit well. I like your clarity of vision and phrasing.
20th Sep 2012 1:53am
It's "upbeat" for me, when the ending has a silver-lining! ;) And thank you!
21st Sep 2012 11:00am
"This
magic golden umbrella poises itself precisely,
here are soft white feathered downy quilts
and ointments of solace.
(One does not notice the Sun so much, if it never rains.)"
I really like this part. Bravo! Are you a Gemini? (Asks the Scorpio)
magic golden umbrella poises itself precisely,
here are soft white feathered downy quilts
and ointments of solace.
(One does not notice the Sun so much, if it never rains.)"
I really like this part. Bravo! Are you a Gemini? (Asks the Scorpio)
21st Sep 2012 6:40pm
