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Memories
I ease into the covers
and reminisce of your smooth baritone melodies
while your summer evening breath
echoed whispers of love down my neck
an electric surge pulses through my body
and rips away my breath
lustful liquid desires
form behind my coral mouth
while I bite my bottom lip
my desperate fingers trace
your once treasured paths
a low purr escapes my throat
while a shiver creates an arch
and my head delves deeper into the pillow
fierce waves of passion
enliven every nerve
an intense yearn
pleas from my core
and begs to be released
sensual vibrations quicken
while the rhythm pulls violent ripples
of longed for explosions
then
I ease into the covers
and reminisce of your smooth baritone melodies
while your summer evening breath
echoed whispers of love down my neck
and reminisce of your smooth baritone melodies
while your summer evening breath
echoed whispers of love down my neck
an electric surge pulses through my body
and rips away my breath
lustful liquid desires
form behind my coral mouth
while I bite my bottom lip
my desperate fingers trace
your once treasured paths
a low purr escapes my throat
while a shiver creates an arch
and my head delves deeper into the pillow
fierce waves of passion
enliven every nerve
an intense yearn
pleas from my core
and begs to be released
sensual vibrations quicken
while the rhythm pulls violent ripples
of longed for explosions
then
I ease into the covers
and reminisce of your smooth baritone melodies
while your summer evening breath
echoed whispers of love down my neck
Written by
raorrick
(Rachel O.)
Published 5th Sep 2012
| Edited 7th Sep 2012
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Re: Memories
You create such stimulating imagery in sights and sounds when those of us not under the covers with you can see with x-ray eyes and hear with bionic ears all that is happening when your desperate fingers glide across your keyboard to tell us memories of your sensual world. The vibrations travel through space to create ripples in the fabric of time where endless passion explodes as whispers on the neck of each lover of words who becomes entrralled by the echoes of yours...
JJ
JJ
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6th Sep 2012 11:39am
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Anonymous
5th Sep 2012 11:38pm
whew!! damn is it HOTTT in here? sheeesh! you gotta stop doing this to me..haha..Poetryman has it 100% right :)
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6th Sep 2012 11:42am
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6th Sep 2012 6:33am
Memories are amazing. They can sate, delight and comfort us. You paint an intimate one with a lingering vapor of sensual without being sexual. Love the story dancing back to your original, tender yearning.
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6th Sep 2012 11:44am
I agree Ken. Thank you for stopping by with your kind words. I appreciate you. :)
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Anonymous
6th Sep 2012 10:25am
Really well written, love the wrap style of the repetition at the end and the way it adds to the story without adding more lines, really love it.
Peace
Peace
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6th Sep 2012 11:45am
Thank you miki, that is the first time I've tried that, so I am glad it works.
Appreciate you stopping by. :)
Appreciate you stopping by. :)
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Anonymous
6th Sep 2012 5:31pm
Rachel O. ,
Wow, one hot write you put on there! Loved your line:
"my desperate fingers trace
your once treasured paths"
Awesome write!
tornado
Wow, one hot write you put on there! Loved your line:
"my desperate fingers trace
your once treasured paths"
Awesome write!
tornado
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6th Sep 2012 7:09pm
Well thank you! It is not often that I venture in to that section, so I am glad that it worked out.
I appreciate you stopping by and leaving your kind words.
:)
I appreciate you stopping by and leaving your kind words.
:)
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Anonymous
6th Sep 2012 9:27pm
Very stunning imagery, Rachel, and your sensual word play is a spot on match. Enjoyed.
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6th Sep 2012 10:40pm
Thank you Devlin, I am glad the imagery and word play worked for you.
I appreciate you stopping by. :)
I appreciate you stopping by. :)
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6th Sep 2012 11:29pm
Enjoyed this very much, nice and sensual, exactly how this type of poetry should be done (in my opinion anyway). Great job.
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7th Sep 2012 00:01am
Thank you so much. I agree. I don't like the one's that describe a porno, step by step. I wrote one like that once, in the beginning of my writings and I am ashamed of it now. :)
Thanks for stopping by. Very much appreciated!
Thanks for stopping by. Very much appreciated!
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7th Sep 2012 1:44pm
Wow, really tentalizing write there. Great job and now must turn the a/c up in here.
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8th Sep 2012 1:56am
Badaaaaassssss!
That was smoking hot, but subtle, you know? Elegant. You kick ass Miss Thang. Really.
That was smoking hot, but subtle, you know? Elegant. You kick ass Miss Thang. Really.
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8th Sep 2012 2:09am
A bad ass comment from a bad ass chic!
Thanks so much for stopping by, I alway appreciate your presence.
Thanks so much for stopping by, I alway appreciate your presence.
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Anonymous
12th Sep 2012 2:32am
You Never disappoint ! Lust at its finest, enjoined!
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12th Sep 2012 11:03pm
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17th Oct 2012 2:37pm
" . . . form beneath my coral mouth." ". . . your summer evening breath . . ." Fantastic lines. I love this poem and can feel myself easing "into the covers." You have a gift for remarkable images. Thank you for sharing this gift with me.
marcella1
marcella1
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3rd Jan 2013 6:46am
Maybe he should get mouthwash and the typology would be as near to perfection as perfection can be?
Why do you love an ideal type? Could it have something with the fact that we usually want what we can't have?
No matter the questions asked above (and they may be stupid ones) I like your poetry very much: there is a softness and sensuality to it which does not make it crude. You are a good poet and I appreciate that.
marcella1
Why do you love an ideal type? Could it have something with the fact that we usually want what we can't have?
No matter the questions asked above (and they may be stupid ones) I like your poetry very much: there is a softness and sensuality to it which does not make it crude. You are a good poet and I appreciate that.
marcella1
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29th Mar 2013 3:56am
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6th Mar 2013 3:53pm
Oh shit! This was sexy as hell!
Hot Memories..........Whew!
Pen on beautiful!
Hot Memories..........Whew!
Pen on beautiful!
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13th Jul 2015 4:57pm
So sensual and vivid. Lovely, look forward to reading more of your work. 💋
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