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s o u l m o t h e r
in long nights
when the terror
comes after like
a pack of rabid dingos
and the little tent made
from sheets is not able to
be my bastion for long not
able to hold off the pain of
distance death demons doves
i lurch outside like a wild man
and suckle your words till tears
gush leaving billabongs and
i am nothing but a galaxy
of pores and spores just
weightless imbibing
in that moment
you are mother
i am child and
i love you for
an eternity
in those
minutes
which
add up
to be
hours
and
then
another
day that
leads to
night
such joy
to hold
onto
you
while
you
dont
even
know
i
exist
.
[written for the dup muse competition]
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Re: s o u l m o t h e r
Anonymous
6th Jul 2012 8:16pm
Wow!!!! the depth and desire in this piece are absolutely Beautiful. It Reads of a bitter sweet longing, a bitter pain to be without that special someone, but an oh so sweet feeling to be overcome with passion. Thank you for sharing
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re: Re: s o u l m o t h e r
6th Jul 2012 11:00pm
milk.i.way
thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts.
you are a dear. yes and yes.
much love,
sumeet
thank you for stopping by and sharing your thoughts.
you are a dear. yes and yes.
much love,
sumeet
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6th Jul 2012 8:19pm
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6th Jul 2012 11:03pm
alwaysintriguing
thank you for stopping by
and leaving your thoughts.
much appreciated.
light,
sumeet
thank you for stopping by
and leaving your thoughts.
much appreciated.
light,
sumeet
Re: s o u l m o t h e r
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Jul 2012 11:56pm
6th Jul 2012 8:58pm
This was painful to read, Jan-e-mann.
The integrity of authorship is palpable. Top form, as usual.
The integrity of authorship is palpable. Top form, as usual.
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re: Re: s o u l m o t h e r
aishelina
shukriya. :] thank you.
not sure what else to say. yes. :)
lovelight,
sumeet
shukriya. :] thank you.
not sure what else to say. yes. :)
lovelight,
sumeet
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Anonymous
7th Jul 2012 8:55am
Hamesha ;)
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6th Jul 2012 9:52pm
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6th Jul 2012 11:10pm
firebyrd
thank you for stopping by and
leaving that wonderful feedback.
light
sumeet
thank you for stopping by and
leaving that wonderful feedback.
light
sumeet
Re: s o u l m o t h e r
8th Jul 2012 9:21am
The picture painted is co clear, and I can feel the turmoil. I love the idea of suckling at words. The feeling of peace comes over the reader like a wave. I love how the words trickle down, and the ending!
"such joy
to hold
onto
you
while
you
dont
even
know
i
exist "
So powerful, sweet, and sad.
Beautiful.
"such joy
to hold
onto
you
while
you
dont
even
know
i
exist "
So powerful, sweet, and sad.
Beautiful.
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re: Re: s o u l m o t h e r
10th Jul 2012 1:13pm
star
oh you found this.:]
i knew if you do then everything you
have pointed out would be said. this
is written for a woman, a mother and
you are one. and this gives me immense
joy.:]
thank you.
much love,
sumeet
oh you found this.:]
i knew if you do then everything you
have pointed out would be said. this
is written for a woman, a mother and
you are one. and this gives me immense
joy.:]
thank you.
much love,
sumeet
Love the form
11th Jul 2012 3:08am
The way you've evolved on several levels, Sumeet, is really stunning.
Not only do you really bring forth wrenching emotion of unrequited affection, it's visually attractive, like a tear drop almost or a rain drop, but the poem literally begins, fills and then drips to its beautiful end.
Good stuff, my friend!
Happy writing,
Betty
Not only do you really bring forth wrenching emotion of unrequited affection, it's visually attractive, like a tear drop almost or a rain drop, but the poem literally begins, fills and then drips to its beautiful end.
Good stuff, my friend!
Happy writing,
Betty
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re: Love the form
11th Jul 2012 6:20am
hey ugly
a warm welcome first of all. i have missed you.
well as always you just say what you have to say.
and you complete my effort by connecting the dots
on a different plane. :]
thank you. for everything you had to say. tear
drop was marvelous. i love your eye.
curtsy,
sumeet
a warm welcome first of all. i have missed you.
well as always you just say what you have to say.
and you complete my effort by connecting the dots
on a different plane. :]
thank you. for everything you had to say. tear
drop was marvelous. i love your eye.
curtsy,
sumeet