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Better
When I first met you
I didn’t know what to say
You question everything I do
To make me better
That’s what you’d say
I never knew there was someone
Like you
Now I do
You told me who you were
You told me how you really feel
How torn up and hurt you were
You let me in to reveal
That I was the one to guide you to become
Better than you were
Better right now
I didn’t want to hear you say those words
I couldn’t be the one to let you down
I did nothing to mend your hurt
You were the one who rose off the ground
To a better place
That I am never bound
Better than now
I didn’t know what to say
You question everything I do
To make me better
That’s what you’d say
I never knew there was someone
Like you
Now I do
You told me who you were
You told me how you really feel
How torn up and hurt you were
You let me in to reveal
That I was the one to guide you to become
Better than you were
Better right now
I didn’t want to hear you say those words
I couldn’t be the one to let you down
I did nothing to mend your hurt
You were the one who rose off the ground
To a better place
That I am never bound
Better than now
Written by
fianaturie8
(Fia Naturie)
Published 18th Mar 2025
| Edited 19th Mar 2025
Author's Note
I tried one more time to write a song. This is it. It's not finished but that is all I have
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Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 00:03am
Re: Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 00:05am
Thank you I know it needs work but I wanted it to see the light of day before its hidden. xoxo
Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 00:29am
Nicely Done I enjoyed the deepness of your words and the deepness of your mind thoughts 👏✍️👊💪 look at this as a new beginning to explore a different kind of way of writing for ask thyself what is a song of words the only thing is missing is the sounds of music 🎶🎶🎶😁
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Re: Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 00:32am
Re: Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 00:37am
We all have hidden talents to explore the deepness of the reactions is the truth of the truth done by design it's alright to take a leap of faith 🙂 if you believe in thyself 🙏
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Re: Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 1:46am
Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 1:54am
From what I can understand from reading the poem, it was you who made them a better person & it's nice that they acknowledged that before they took flight, as it were. Emotional & bittersweet, for sure. Powerful. 🙏
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Re: Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 1:59am
Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 3:50am
Well I love the lyrics you have, Fia. So much so, in fact. Into the list it belongs! You need to finish this one, my friend. Appreciate you.
Damian
Damian
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19th Mar 2025 3:57am
Re. Better
19th Mar 2025 3:42pm
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19th Mar 2025 3:42pm