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Sands of Time
When can I walk on the sands of time
Let it sift through the soul
Leaving footprints behind
For the wind to sweep away?
I fell on the sand
To have it burn me and scorch
From past regrets and remorse
Downy wings try to erupt
From leathered and weathered skin
To go up in a plume of smoke
The sands of time have no feeling
They do not judge
They are just and we must walk our path
Let it sift through the soul
Leaving footprints behind
For the wind to sweep away?
I fell on the sand
To have it burn me and scorch
From past regrets and remorse
Downy wings try to erupt
From leathered and weathered skin
To go up in a plume of smoke
The sands of time have no feeling
They do not judge
They are just and we must walk our path
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Re. Sands of Time
23rd Jan 2025 10:51pm
Brilliantly penned, Fia. Into the list it belongs. I felt this write, my friend. Flawlessly executed. Appreciate you.
Damian
Damian
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Re. Sands of Time
23rd Jan 2025 10:56pm
hello beautiful Fia when those thoughts arise just think about how you may have acted differently and walk your path the best you can great write...❤️
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23rd Jan 2025 11:03pm
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23rd Jan 2025 11:08pm
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23rd Jan 2025 11:09pm
Re. Sands of Time
23rd Jan 2025 11:42pm
Atmospheric, barren, a lyrical masterpiece. Love this poem and it's mystical imagery.
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23rd Jan 2025 11:46pm
Thank you, Keith I am happy you like the atmosphere. Thank you for the RL;))
Re. Sands of Time
24th Jan 2025 2:22am
Amen to this! What a great summation of life's (temporary) struggle. I'm sure we all have had a similar feeling of hell under our feet, perhaps? Impeding progress even.
This is a really good write, Fia. Brief but powerful with its message.
This is a really good write, Fia. Brief but powerful with its message.
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24th Jan 2025 2:27am
Re. Sands of Time
24th Jan 2025 3:25am
What a great write!
Painful memories do leave a sear on our minds.
Time doesn't judge but the lessons learned last a lifetime!
Painful memories do leave a sear on our minds.
Time doesn't judge but the lessons learned last a lifetime!
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24th Jan 2025 3:57am
Re. Sands of Time
24th Jan 2025 12:21pm
What an amazing piece, dear Fia.
It has a mystical, almost esoteric vibe to it.
This is probably one of my favorites of yours so far.
It has a mystical, almost esoteric vibe to it.
This is probably one of my favorites of yours so far.
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24th Jan 2025 12:37pm
Re. Sands of Time
27th Jan 2025 4:45pm
Loved: "I fell on the sand
To have it burn me and scorch
From past regrets and remorse "
Really vivid
To have it burn me and scorch
From past regrets and remorse "
Really vivid
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27th Jan 2025 4:47pm