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The Birth of a Scream
Lost.
Disoriented.
I mingle between terror
and nightmares.
Lurking creatures
with a lust to scare.
The dark growls,
yearning to be fed.
It gnaws on my fear
in my bone's core.
You become less
in your dark greed for more.
All the petrified, paralyzed hours.
Time groans, grabs and devours.
From the cold bottomless pit
of the abyss.
Can be heard
a real high pitch hiss.
A murderous cry it seems.
The birth of a scream.
Disoriented.
I mingle between terror
and nightmares.
Lurking creatures
with a lust to scare.
The dark growls,
yearning to be fed.
It gnaws on my fear
in my bone's core.
You become less
in your dark greed for more.
All the petrified, paralyzed hours.
Time groans, grabs and devours.
From the cold bottomless pit
of the abyss.
Can be heard
a real high pitch hiss.
A murderous cry it seems.
The birth of a scream.
Published 31st Oct 2024
Author's Note
Happy Halloween 🦇
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- Edited 8th Jan 2025 8:45am
31st Oct 2024 11:40pm
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31st Oct 2024 11:54pm
31st Oct 2024 11:44pm
31st Oct 2024 11:54pm
31st Oct 2024 11:59pm
It has you on the edge of your seat when you read this. Great work
Regards James
Regards James
1st Nov 2024 00:13am
Oh thank you, I love to hear that. I thought it wasn't scary enough, lol
Appreciate you checking out.
Appreciate you checking out.
1st Nov 2024 00:30am
hello beautiful Debbie I can feel it in my belly the need to scream so spooky and great ❤️
1st Nov 2024 00:41am
1st Nov 2024 1:23am
This was fucking cool. I liked the flow and the use of alliteration in this ♡
Happy Halloween!
Happy Halloween!
1st Nov 2024 2:46am
1st Nov 2024 3:47am
Brilliantly written, Debbie. Into the list it goes. Great Halloween ink. Appreciate you.
DL
DL
1st Nov 2024 12:18pm
1st Nov 2024 4:02am
1st Nov 2024 12:19pm
I love the buildup to the simple transition at the end, to one particular phrase, that has so much condensed meaning. It's almost like a prelude or prequel to some kind of frightening event about to happen. The definitive terms you use tend to be very observant in literate characterization and conveyed a literal context. The visual side of things you used to piece together your poem. are also outstanding in continual direction You use both diction and visual quite well. A good job at capturing both styles and techniques of writing, heh. Where you interject visual disposition and metaphor really bring to life the momentum towards the scream, especially when I look at that picture! You carry in transition the eerie mood and emotion in a unique, harmonic balance, that further defines itself, as it unravels. Thanks for sharing. This seemed like a new twist on things from you, in some ways. Looking forward to reading from you again!
1st Nov 2024 12:24pm
Enormous thanks for your feedback. I learn alot about my writing.
It's nice to hear I'm doing something right. I don't realize I'm doing the things
you describe. I'm glad you liked it, it was fun to write.
Thanks again!!!!
It's nice to hear I'm doing something right. I don't realize I'm doing the things
you describe. I'm glad you liked it, it was fun to write.
Thanks again!!!!
1st Nov 2024 6:05am
1st Nov 2024 12:17pm
1st Nov 2024 9:27am
Outstanding work here Debbie. Nicely executed a fun, dark poem you wrote. Hope you had a scary Halloween!
1st Nov 2024 12:17pm
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- Edited 28th Mar 2025 1:51am
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