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Night sky
The giant gown of night sky
felt like smooth billowing black satin.
With vast embroidered fields
of shimmering stars of passion.
Spend with me the nights irrational.
The straight paths are always diagonal.
Scars and stars, a dark and light decoupage.
The tiny moment can one day be large.
It's the glitter days we long to enlarge.
Rational is a mortal chain
On sanity's barge.
felt like smooth billowing black satin.
With vast embroidered fields
of shimmering stars of passion.
Spend with me the nights irrational.
The straight paths are always diagonal.
Scars and stars, a dark and light decoupage.
The tiny moment can one day be large.
It's the glitter days we long to enlarge.
Rational is a mortal chain
On sanity's barge.
Author's Note
It's not supposed to make sense.
Letting thoughts fall where they may.
Letting thoughts fall where they may.
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Re. Night sky
7th Sep 2024 00:01am
Ooh, girl!
It so does make sense!
And I so get,”the straight paths are always diagonal.”
Love you💕
It so does make sense!
And I so get,”the straight paths are always diagonal.”
Love you💕
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7th Sep 2024 00:03am
I know who it will make sense too 💜
Thank you so much, you boosted my night.
Thank you so much, you boosted my night.
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7th Sep 2024 00:07am
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7th Sep 2024 00:18am
Re. Night sky
7th Sep 2024 1:31am
I tend to do a lot of free verse and just let the words flow. This is nicely done. Fia xoxo
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7th Sep 2024 3:02pm
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7th Sep 2024 1:39am
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7th Sep 2024 3:00pm
Re. Night sky
Anonymous
7th Sep 2024 1:51am
Absolutely gorgeous. There are many cliches used to describe the night sky. I've never heard anyone used the black satin billowing gown. So cool.
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7th Sep 2024 2:59pm
Thank you. I like to envision the night sky as a gown,
billowing as if the night sky is striving to stun us.
That was my favorite part of the poem, so I thank you again.
billowing as if the night sky is striving to stun us.
That was my favorite part of the poem, so I thank you again.
Re. Night sky
7th Sep 2024 2:26am
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7th Sep 2024 2:55pm
Re. Night sky
7th Sep 2024 2:43am
Brilliantly written, Debbie. Makes perfect sense to me. Into the list it belongs. Appreciate you.
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7th Sep 2024 2:54pm
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7th Sep 2024 11:08am
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7th Sep 2024 2:53pm
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Anonymous
8th Sep 2024 2:05pm
Funny how often the ones that aren't supposed to make sense land with perfect clarity
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Re: Re. Night sky
8th Sep 2024 2:35pm
That does happen! The less it makes sense to me, the more it
makes to everyone else, lol
Thank you for checking out.
makes to everyone else, lol
Thank you for checking out.
Re. Night sky
9th Sep 2024 1:28am
ello Debbie, how are you; really enjoyed reading this, very beautifully done... take good care: deadwolf
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9th Sep 2024 10:12am
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10th Sep 2024 5:38pm
Re. Night sky
11th Sep 2024 9:40am
Still cathing up - missed your work and your beautiful wording.
Love this piece, the scars and stars. To me it has a dreamy feeling 💕
Love this piece, the scars and stars. To me it has a dreamy feeling 💕
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11th Sep 2024 11:46am
Re. Night sky
14th Sep 2024 12:14pm
This reminds of how sometimes we get so caught up in what is real and what is not. But my most cherished memories come from reading books, diving into what is not real. I feel like our imagination is more beautiful than rationality can ever be.
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14th Sep 2024 1:38pm
Thank you for your thoughts. I'll take imagination over rational anyway.
Appreciate your feedback!
Appreciate your feedback!
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Anonymous
3rd Oct 2024 11:34am
Beautiful words and thoughts ❤️
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3rd Oct 2024 11:43am