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the sun did not rise today
the sun did not rise today
its role was cut off.
seeing this, the flowers
fell to the ground without blooming,
the green leaves scattered without turning yellow
but the sun did not rise today
the waves of the sea did not touch the shore
a flock of birds started flying
in one direction to search
for the sun that comes every day.
by tearing the mountain,
the roots of the trees,
felt suffocated,
n started circling here and there
in the abyss
but the sun did not rise today
the lake, unable to embrace the day,
started flying towards the sky
above the mountains.
every wall of the house
began turning blind,
the fishes, yearning for the sun's smile,
started fainting,
the full moon fell from
heaven and stood in the desert
but the sun did not rise today
the birds singing
in the sweet dawn became mute.
the butterflies,
searching for the drops of dew,
started drying up.
the milk-filled cow's breasts
started bursting and the calf
started searching for the well
but the sun did not rise today...
its role was cut off.
seeing this, the flowers
fell to the ground without blooming,
the green leaves scattered without turning yellow
but the sun did not rise today
the waves of the sea did not touch the shore
a flock of birds started flying
in one direction to search
for the sun that comes every day.
by tearing the mountain,
the roots of the trees,
felt suffocated,
n started circling here and there
in the abyss
but the sun did not rise today
the lake, unable to embrace the day,
started flying towards the sky
above the mountains.
every wall of the house
began turning blind,
the fishes, yearning for the sun's smile,
started fainting,
the full moon fell from
heaven and stood in the desert
but the sun did not rise today
the birds singing
in the sweet dawn became mute.
the butterflies,
searching for the drops of dew,
started drying up.
the milk-filled cow's breasts
started bursting and the calf
started searching for the well
but the sun did not rise today...
Written by
dimpy
(dimpsmoon)
Published 5th Sep 2024
| Edited 6th Sep 2024
Author's Note
I took this picture of the setting sun while walking...
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Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 11:26am
A beautiful, atmospheric piece of writing. Well written. Nicely done.
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Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 12:10pm
Re. the sun did not rise today
Sublime and telling...
Even the mighty sun has moods.
Then they become our moods.
Excellent writing and feeling on this entry.
Serene photo
BIG LIKE
RL AWARD
Even the mighty sun has moods.
Then they become our moods.
Excellent writing and feeling on this entry.
Serene photo
BIG LIKE
RL AWARD
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Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 2:53pm
thanks so much artist ..everything related to nature wants change, n here SUN..well all credit goes to you obviously...
Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 8:34pm
Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
6th Sep 2024 3:37am
you have done a lot for me baby duck... Athe moon is shining but it is necessary to bring it out from the pile of the clouds into the open sky only then the world will see its beauty... n you have done something like that... thank you from the bottom of heart....
Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
7th Sep 2024 1:45am
Your welcome dimp
You're doing the real work and people are rewarding you with praise and that makes me happy ..
You're doing the real work and people are rewarding you with praise and that makes me happy ..
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Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 12:12pm
Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 2:55pm
Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 5:00pm
Deep poem with the lamenting of the sun, leaves you to ponder depths of its background meaning. Enjoyed the fish fainting line.
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Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 5:07pm
Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 5:03pm
Really enjoyed looking at this poem, dimpy. I believe it's one of the best I have read from you. I agree with Mary that it is indeed quite a melancholic write. May the sun rise for you very soon! 😊
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Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 5:06pm
Awww WOOOWWW
many thanks snaggy for your beautiful wish n for your warm support.....Will always remember... :) ❤ RL entry is like a gift for me... :)
many thanks snaggy for your beautiful wish n for your warm support.....Will always remember... :) ❤ RL entry is like a gift for me... :)
Re. the sun did not rise today
5th Sep 2024 5:36pm
We have had a rather sunless day in my part of England, with weather forecast rumours of a stormy Thursday/Friday night followed by a heatwave over the weekend!
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Re. the sun did not rise today
6th Sep 2024 1:01am
Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
6th Sep 2024 3:39am
Re. the sun did not rise today
6th Sep 2024 3:28am
Beautiful write. Really brilliant imagery as well. Nicely done per usual. Into the list it belongs. Appreciate you.
DL
DL
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Re: Re. the sun did not rise today
6th Sep 2024 3:38am
hey DL
thank you for enjoying my stuff n adding it to your RL entry.. it means a lot... :)
thank you for enjoying my stuff n adding it to your RL entry.. it means a lot... :)
Re. the sun did not rise today
6th Sep 2024 5:39am
You always come through with such deep and introspective vibes.
This one here is a sheer standout..
Much respect
Naaj
This one here is a sheer standout..
Much respect
Naaj
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6th Sep 2024 2:50pm