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Angel's Free II
I love my life, it is important to me
Mama never believed a word that came out of my mouth
He cares for himself, for his wants, for his needs
It hurt
The worst pain I ever felt in my life
I lied to live; they would never believe me anyway
Mama sent me away so my body will be at peace for a while
They seen the healed scars on my skin
They asked if I wanted to go back
I have a choice
“No”
He will kill me this time
“No”
I want to be free
Angels are free
That's when a white feather fell
Mama never believed a word that came out of my mouth
He cares for himself, for his wants, for his needs
It hurt
The worst pain I ever felt in my life
I lied to live; they would never believe me anyway
Mama sent me away so my body will be at peace for a while
They seen the healed scars on my skin
They asked if I wanted to go back
I have a choice
“No”
He will kill me this time
“No”
I want to be free
Angels are free
That's when a white feather fell
Author's Note
A request to have the original poem not in ABAB style. I hope this came out well
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Re. Angel's Free II
23rd Aug 2024 12:01pm
Heavy Fia. This is a great write with many feelings of sorrow and darkness pouring out of the poem.
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23rd Aug 2024 12:03pm
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Re. Angel's Free II
23rd Aug 2024 3:06pm
Excellent. Very open-minded of you to take that proposal and reboot your poem. They are both great in their own ways, and you are a true poet when you can imagine the same idea in multiple ways. We might call that kind of imagination the quantum mind, or the stem cell mind, because they can turn the same thing into different things.
With this feather, I have a reminder of angels!
With this feather, I have a reminder of angels!
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23rd Aug 2024 3:11pm
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23rd Aug 2024 3:19pm
I think it's when the caffeine wears off, and I watch these movies. Thank you for the RL;) <3
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23rd Aug 2024 3:21pm
my therapist once told me not to watch horror movies.. so I'm sticking with porn
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23rd Aug 2024 3:33pm
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Re. Angel's Free II
23rd Aug 2024 5:44pm
I rather liked this one. It tells a rather moving and chilling, naturally told story with a nicely encapsulated ending.
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23rd Aug 2024 5:45pm
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Re. Angel's Free II
23rd Dec 2024 1:51am
Right now, nearly everything I write is about her. So, I'm venting right now. I hope to steer away at some point.
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23rd Dec 2024 1:54am
Re. Angel's Free II
23rd Dec 2024 1:59am
I don't know how to send a direct link to a specific poem, but on the "Angel" slant you might check out Jimmy's Belt. I'm sure you have heard of DID.
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